The Hole Truth
Revenge is as random as the wind38 total reviews
Comment from Frank Malley
"The Hole Story" is a fast-paced jostle through a horrifying and disgusting series of events that lead to resolution that twists until its last moment. This is one for the year's Horror Anthology, 2022.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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"The Hole Story" is a fast-paced jostle through a horrifying and disgusting series of events that lead to resolution that twists until its last moment. This is one for the year's Horror Anthology, 2022.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thanks so much, Frank! I love twisting things around and I'm looking forward to writing more stories soon.
Mike
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All the best. Frank
Comment from RBDJR007
I really enjoyed your story. What I really liked about it was the little descriptions you used throughout, such as when contemplating supper at the beginning of the story, I liked that you said the only decision "was which nationality was going to deliver it."
The flashback at the ending was kind of a surprise. You did such a great job at projecting that the brothers had grabbed the wrong guy, and him denying that he knew who the brothers were, you had me believing it and then I was like what?? Great job!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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I really enjoyed your story. What I really liked about it was the little descriptions you used throughout, such as when contemplating supper at the beginning of the story, I liked that you said the only decision "was which nationality was going to deliver it."
The flashback at the ending was kind of a surprise. You did such a great job at projecting that the brothers had grabbed the wrong guy, and him denying that he knew who the brothers were, you had me believing it and then I was like what?? Great job!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2014
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Hehe, thanks so much :-). I loved the irony of saying he did actually do what they thought, but they would never know. In the end, nobody gets what they want and the brothers are now murderers, still thinking the man they want is free. That's pretty damned horrific! So glad you enjoyed the story.
Mike
Comment from Judy Couch
I wanted to read the story that won the contest. I was not disappointed. It is super. I admire your ability to describe how the guy felt when he was in the hole -- his desperation and his growing weakness. You deserved to win with this story.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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I wanted to read the story that won the contest. I was not disappointed. It is super. I admire your ability to describe how the guy felt when he was in the hole -- his desperation and his growing weakness. You deserved to win with this story.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Thank you so much, Judy :-). I was really excited about the win. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it.
Mike
Comment from sibhus
Congrats, a well desereved win for an a very well written story. The twists in this really worked well, and kept my interest throughout. Good timing as well, and the dialogue seemed genuine. Again, congratulations on well deserved win.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Congrats, a well desereved win for an a very well written story. The twists in this really worked well, and kept my interest throughout. Good timing as well, and the dialogue seemed genuine. Again, congratulations on well deserved win.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Thanks so much, Sibhus :-). I was thrilled with the win. I'm really glad you liked my story.
Mike
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 06-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2014
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Woo! I'm so happy :-). This is my first site contest win and it feels sweet indeed.
Mike
Comment from dennis0530
Mistaken identitiy sometimes lead to a fatality. Maybe at times slow and quiet, at other times with a flash and a bang.
To own up a mistake takes a change of personality. Did the hole accomplish its purpose of bringing out the truth? But a lesson learned - an eye for an eye and he who lived by the sword can die with a flash and bang.
Lastly, a word of advice - wear your hardhat where it is needed.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Mistaken identitiy sometimes lead to a fatality. Maybe at times slow and quiet, at other times with a flash and a bang.
To own up a mistake takes a change of personality. Did the hole accomplish its purpose of bringing out the truth? But a lesson learned - an eye for an eye and he who lived by the sword can die with a flash and bang.
Lastly, a word of advice - wear your hardhat where it is needed.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Thanks Dennis! Really glad you enjoyed it :-).
Mike
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Your title is a great play on words. I think it would be utterly horrific to be thrown into a pit in the ground only to discover it served as a "pissing hole". You definitely did a great job with the horror. I think your entry will be tough to beat. Well done. Great twisty ending.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Your title is a great play on words. I think it would be utterly horrific to be thrown into a pit in the ground only to discover it served as a "pissing hole". You definitely did a great job with the horror. I think your entry will be tough to beat. Well done. Great twisty ending.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Thanks, GLG :-). It might not be as graphic as some horror but I was going for the fear of hopelessness. Really glad you liked it.
Mike
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Graphic is not always the perfect horror tactic. I find the subtle, and the believable much more terrifying.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Great entry for the contest. You came up with some fresh and creative approaches to the internal sensation of the 'victim' as he faced the hole. That's not an easy thing to do at all. Also enjoyed the twist at the end. You had me fooled!
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Great entry for the contest. You came up with some fresh and creative approaches to the internal sensation of the 'victim' as he faced the hole. That's not an easy thing to do at all. Also enjoyed the twist at the end. You had me fooled!
:)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Thank you, my friend :-). I have another character I use (Mike Radshaw) who experiences life in a very visceral way. He's good practice for reflecting emotion in metaphor (and sarcasm!). Tha ks for the great review.
Mike
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You're most welcome, F. :)
Comment from GWinterwin
This was a great story, I read all the way to the end, not knowing this was a writing contest. Very good job of keeping the reader in suspense to the end.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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This was a great story, I read all the way to the end, not knowing this was a writing contest. Very good job of keeping the reader in suspense to the end.
Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Tha k you so much for the confidence boost and the special rating. I'm so glad you liked it :-)
Mike
Comment from PearlW
Great story ... the wheel turning full circle and that bitch named Karma getting her guy in the end. I always wonder though, how someone 'dead' can relive/retell a story that happened in the past - they can do it in the present, but I'm so anal and practical, that I can never quite wrap my mind around this concept.
Anyway, it doesn't really matter, it's just a personal 'irk' of mine - it doesn't take from the story. It's very well written and I enjoyed it all the same.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Great story ... the wheel turning full circle and that bitch named Karma getting her guy in the end. I always wonder though, how someone 'dead' can relive/retell a story that happened in the past - they can do it in the present, but I'm so anal and practical, that I can never quite wrap my mind around this concept.
Anyway, it doesn't really matter, it's just a personal 'irk' of mine - it doesn't take from the story. It's very well written and I enjoyed it all the same.
Comment Written 31-May-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Lol, it's a fair point, and something I don't often consider. Perhaps he's confiding in a spectral being in an afterlife of sorts. Or maybe this is someone who read about the events, imagining them from the deceased's perspective. Actually, that's almost what it is. Tha ks for making me think :-).
Mike
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My lovely bones were told like that - a girl speaking from the afterlife, her concept of heaven and looking down on her family after her death. I can accept the spectral being explanation ;).
Sorry for being so anal with yours. It really is a great story.
