Comment from Wendy G

Exceptional

An excellent story in a poem - different and original. The archer's ego did get in the way, but at least he admitted it, and gave credit where it was due. And good on the girl for redefining what skills and talents a girl should and could enjoy. Just a pity the father made it clear he would have preferred a boy.
Wendy

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023

Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem. I am honored by the six-star rating. It is always sad when a parent doesn't love a child for who and what he/she is.
Joan

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

I love stories about women who were not afraid to push the envelope. This story in a poem was written well. The flow kept everything moving and there were enough details and emotions to paint a clear picture. Well done. I thoroughly enjoyed. Good luck in the contest. Gretchen

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2023

Thanks very much, Gretchen, for your thorough review. I appreciate all the stars.
Joan

Comment from Kaiku

Excellent

As I read this it reminded me of a series I`ve been watching on Netflix called Arrow. There are a couple very capable women archers that would take down most any talented knight. Thanks for a fun story. I`ll keep my ego in tact for now.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023

Hi Kaiku,
Thanks for the review. I can see why you thought of "Arrow". I watched that with my son. I wrote this before that show came on.
Joan

reply by Kaiku on 05-Jan-2023

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Comment from Moonbeams Musings 55

Excellent

A great story that is very well presented. The rhyme has such an engaging flow. A pleasure to read. I like how the archer admitted his ego got the best of him.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023

Thanks for the positive comments and high rating, Moonbeams. I am glad you liked it.
Joan

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You told an interesting story through this story poem, DP.
I enjoyed reading it--thanks for reposting as I hadn't seen
it originally. The rhymes worked well, the was good flow, and
the story was believable about the young girl whose father
wishes for a boy.
Thanks for sharing, Jan

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023

Thanks for the nice review, Jan. I am glad you finally got to read it and that you enjoyed it.
Joan

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very well written and very interesting story you have penned for the Share a story in a poem contest. You used very good descriptive words and imagery from your words. Best wishes in the contest! love, Teri

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2023

Thanks for the thorough review, Teri. I appreciate all the stars.
Joan

Comment from Sarah Das Gupta

Excellent

Well done on sustaining the story which not easy in poetry! However, in some places the rhyme seems a little forced and did you mean 'knock' ?
this is Medievel feminism!

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023

Thanks, Sarah, for the constructive criticism. I will check out the rhymes. I haven't looked at this for a long time. It could be just a little bit of feminism on the knight's side.
Joan

Comment from Mia Twysted

Excellent

As I started reading this poem, it reminded me of Robin Hood, and I thought that was where you were going. But then it was a female, and I was left with the impression of Brave.

It is always a good thing to spread the truth that one gender is not always the best and either can do anything...except give birth...

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2023

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2023

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Mia. I appreciate your comments
Joan

Comment from nancyjam

Excellent

I enjoyed your story poem. The rhyming and meter are well done and the story flows nicely with a great ending. Great description of the action and also the personality of the archer.
I wish you luck in the contest.
Nancy

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 18-Jan-2021

Thanks for reading and reviewing, Nancy I am glad you liked it.
Joan

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Ego is one of the biggest problems with humans today, it can be the cause of anxiety and shame, also unjustified terror, your poem outlines how we feel when we fail, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2021

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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021

Thanks for your continued support, Dolly. It is much appreciated.
Joan