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Be Heard

Short Quatrains

17 total reviews 
Comment from RGstar
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A solid, lyrical write. Good aabb structure with good rhymes.
Much of the values of life lie within.
Best wishes, and have a great day.
Rg

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
    Thank you much, my friend. Have a blessed day~Debbie
Comment from Preston McWhorter
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Hi, Debbie,
"Be Heard" is a good poem. With a rhyme scheme consistently followed and good rhyme. It has good flow and figurative language and imagery. (harbor peace of a dove). Some of the rhyme appears to be forced with the word order used so that words rhyme. The reason repeating the first stanza as the last is not apparent to me.
Your friend,
Preston

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
    I'll take a look at the rhymes and wording and try to make it less forced. The repetition of the first stanza as the last is a poetic technique to add emphasis. Thank you so very much. Have a good day, my friend~Debbie
Comment from prefabmouse
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Very true words and wonderful advice.I loved the way you structured the poem as well as the deep and introspective words you strung together.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
    Thank you much, my friend~Debbie
Comment from JW
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Your poem provides some good advice. Perhaps if everyone followed it, the world would be a better place.

Thanks for sharing this. JW

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
    Thank you much. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment from krys123
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Debbie;
it is amusing that you mention mumsy (Lois) And her excellent book which I had to great pleasure of reading.
Your writing on the elevation and enrichment of the self is not only well written but also inspirational and enlightening.
These rhyming couplet quatrains were done very well in the rhyming was neither forced nor labored and your rhythm flowed smoothly throughout your poem.
Your imagination is very inventive and creative in this poem in your imagery is descriptive and expressive throughout.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone you to read and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
    Thank you. It is a great book although I must confess I haven't yet read every word, but I am working on it. Have a great day, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
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Gently spoken words are easier to hear that harsh and loud ones. I truly like the admonitions within this poem as well as the flawless execution of form.
Well done, my friend,
love, Carolyn

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2014
    Thank you, my friend. Hugs, Debbie
Comment from Jean Lutz
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Yes, let us write while we still can. We all have stories waiting to be told. The stream in the picture reminds me so much of a tiny branch that ran through our property as I grew up. It fed into a creek nearby. So often I fished or dreamed on that creek. I was sure it flowed to a great big world waiting to be explored. I've seen the world -- now can I travel that creek back?

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
    I know what you mean. Thank you for the kind review, my friend~Debbie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I have often wondered about what happened to the old saying 'if you can't say something nice about somebody, don't say anything at all'? I grew up with that and taught my boys that, but it doesn't seem to fly in today's society. I enjoyed reading your poem, again you speak from wisdom.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
    yes, that seems to have been forgotten. Too bad. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi Debbie,

Nice message in this poem, my friend, and the photo aids in the serenity as well. Carrying on the green formatting, presents an overall beautiful work.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
    Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Jay Squires
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An aphorism in the first two lines of this wonderful poem:

"Please speak gently your words
Only then they will be heard"

Worthy of the masters of the far East! Remarkable poem, Debbie. Fully worthy of a 6!

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2014

reply by the author on 13-Jul-2014
    Thank you again, Jay. Looking forward to reading yours~Debbie