Old age
A free style poem20 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
A poem with stong emotion in its cryptic imagery of growing old. How it creeps up unrealized until its there. Great symbology in the representation of lost capability.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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A poem with stong emotion in its cryptic imagery of growing old. How it creeps up unrealized until its there. Great symbology in the representation of lost capability.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely weekend , Ine
Comment from Sonjalee
I do not know anyone who smells her coat. Maybe when it is wet the wet wool has a smell,
As men age they are not as attentive to his wife's looks thus the shine of her hair.
I think he is just thinking about dying in no organized manner. And old people do not drink as much water as they should-do any of us? I am giving it a 5 because I am not good at reviewing thiss type of poem. I don't want you to be docked onmy account
I like the art but the poem is ot my style. I do not understand it well .
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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I do not know anyone who smells her coat. Maybe when it is wet the wet wool has a smell,
As men age they are not as attentive to his wife's looks thus the shine of her hair.
I think he is just thinking about dying in no organized manner. And old people do not drink as much water as they should-do any of us? I am giving it a 5 because I am not good at reviewing thiss type of poem. I don't want you to be docked onmy account
I like the art but the poem is ot my style. I do not understand it well .
Comment Written 24-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely weekend , Ine. Thanks very much for the lovely six.
Comment from bertodi
I had to read it several times- firstly my ex dumped us after 25 years marriage so I was trying out getting old with a partner- then I was trying to feel what you were saying- I find it a bit puzzling- some of it, increasing thirst, less water? I have put my own spin on it - maybe not as you intended- the elderly get dry mouths in the night, and one often has to give them a drink at night or they get up and get one-actually, it is quite interesting, dryness is one of the Human Research type of torments- they remote-dry the mouths of severely handicapped people, as you may know they slaver-- but when used on normal people it is quite uncomfortable, however I soon realised and merely got a drink of water-- how cruel humans are to use what is part of nature- I am almost 70 and can empathise.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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I had to read it several times- firstly my ex dumped us after 25 years marriage so I was trying out getting old with a partner- then I was trying to feel what you were saying- I find it a bit puzzling- some of it, increasing thirst, less water? I have put my own spin on it - maybe not as you intended- the elderly get dry mouths in the night, and one often has to give them a drink at night or they get up and get one-actually, it is quite interesting, dryness is one of the Human Research type of torments- they remote-dry the mouths of severely handicapped people, as you may know they slaver-- but when used on normal people it is quite uncomfortable, however I soon realised and merely got a drink of water-- how cruel humans are to use what is part of nature- I am almost 70 and can empathise.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely weekend , Ine
Comment from misscookie
I love the artwork you choose for your poem
And your words are so true
I relate your words not only to aging and to flowers.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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I love the artwork you choose for your poem
And your words are so true
I relate your words not only to aging and to flowers.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely weekend , Ine
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You're very welcome. Have a blessed day
Cookie
Comment from Joan E.
Hydration is critical and removes toxins--drink as much water as you can--8 glasses per day is a good goal. Your line "her small hands, hesitant her mouth" is very visual and evocative. Warm regards- Joan
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Hydration is critical and removes toxins--drink as much water as you can--8 glasses per day is a good goal. Your line "her small hands, hesitant her mouth" is very visual and evocative. Warm regards- Joan
Comment Written 23-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely weekend , Ine
Comment from Pili Pubul
Not all have the luxury to reach old age, the young suffer and die too.
But your poem is excellent and very moving , good style
emotion and expressive . Take care. Pili
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Not all have the luxury to reach old age, the young suffer and die too.
But your poem is excellent and very moving , good style
emotion and expressive . Take care. Pili
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely weekend , Ine
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You are so welcome. Enjoy your day. Pili
Comment from amada
This is a startling poem,living with less water. Surreal. I guess old age affect us all in different ways. Your lines are
honest and sincere.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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This is a startling poem,living with less water. Surreal. I guess old age affect us all in different ways. Your lines are
honest and sincere.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely weekend , Ine
Comment from l.raven
Ine, this is a wonderful poem...I love the way you worded it...there truly is so much that is not the same...but new memories that can be made....so very very well written sweet girl...Love it!!! Love Linda xxoo luff
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Ine, this is a wonderful poem...I love the way you worded it...there truly is so much that is not the same...but new memories that can be made....so very very well written sweet girl...Love it!!! Love Linda xxoo luff
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely weekend , Ine
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you too Ine...xxoo
Comment from krys123
Ine,
I enjoyed this very interesting poem and the picture I found to be some very interesting but I understood that it was a very ambiguous for a self improvement poem.
What is it about this line when you mentioned about dying; "Dying because of increasing thirst, live with less and less water."? Their particular line truly loses me.
I see you for sharing this and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Ine,
I enjoyed this very interesting poem and the picture I found to be some very interesting but I understood that it was a very ambiguous for a self improvement poem.
What is it about this line when you mentioned about dying; "Dying because of increasing thirst, live with less and less water."? Their particular line truly loses me.
I see you for sharing this and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely weekend , Ine
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You are so sincerely welcome.
Alex
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. Age sneaks up on us. We may notice our smells goes first. Our eyes sight becomes weak and the list goes on. We grow old in our own way. We still thirst for life but we get less and less of it. Great work.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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I love the picture. I love the poem. Age sneaks up on us. We may notice our smells goes first. Our eyes sight becomes weak and the list goes on. We grow old in our own way. We still thirst for life but we get less and less of it. Great work.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2014
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Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely weekend , Ine
