Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Shelley Scarecrow Resurrected"A collection of my children's poems
13 total reviews
Comment from Just2Write
What a lovely innovate take on a job, Steve. It's easy to see why this one was a winner. Glad I took some time to back in your portfolio to have a look. I'll try to get to a couple more in the next while.
Just one suggestion:
Once I stood tall and splendid (consider changing to:)
I Once stood tall and splendid (for better iambic flow)
Rose
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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What a lovely innovate take on a job, Steve. It's easy to see why this one was a winner. Glad I took some time to back in your portfolio to have a look. I'll try to get to a couple more in the next while.
Just one suggestion:
Once I stood tall and splendid (consider changing to:)
I Once stood tall and splendid (for better iambic flow)
Rose
Comment Written 04-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Rose.
Hacked out in a hurry to make the contest deadline! Good spot for that line - I will make the change.
Nearly all of my children's pieces are now in the FS book 'Steve's Poems for Kids'. I surprised myself to find how many there were and reminded myself of some stuff I had written!
Steve
Comment from Joan E.
Many kudos on your well-deserved win. I enjoyed your rhymed couplets in these humorous, rhythmic quatrains plus your descriptive storytelling and use of alliteration. Thank you for sharing your cute granddaughter and her pal too. Here's to scarecrows! Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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Many kudos on your well-deserved win. I enjoyed your rhymed couplets in these humorous, rhythmic quatrains plus your descriptive storytelling and use of alliteration. Thank you for sharing your cute granddaughter and her pal too. Here's to scarecrows! Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Joan. yes, there is something magical about scarecrows, isn't there?
Steve
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Yes, the Wizard of Oz got it right! Smiles- Joan
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Congratulations on winning this contest. I love your creative response to the prompt. Great poem for a child. Darling photo. Well penned!
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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Congratulations on winning this contest. I love your creative response to the prompt. Great poem for a child. Darling photo. Well penned!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2014
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Just Pete
Great rhyming and an entertaining poem. Love the humour in this, it keeps the poem flowing and so easy to read. Best of luck in this contest - Pete
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Great rhyming and an entertaining poem. Love the humour in this, it keeps the poem flowing and so easy to read. Best of luck in this contest - Pete
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Pete - glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
A scarecrow brought to life through personification, some great words, rhythm, and rhyme. What a life, what a work ethic, Shelly has. I feel I know him. Very enjoyable read, even better aloud. You have a winner here, no doubt. Kenny
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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A scarecrow brought to life through personification, some great words, rhythm, and rhyme. What a life, what a work ethic, Shelly has. I feel I know him. Very enjoyable read, even better aloud. You have a winner here, no doubt. Kenny
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Kenny, thanks for the great review.
Comment from Karen B.
Well written and so much fun to read. Love the photo, that's one adorable granddaughter you have. :) Wonderful imagery with the patched up pastel britches and the stitches in the britches. Excellent entry in the contest. Best wishes in the voting booth!
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Well written and so much fun to read. Love the photo, that's one adorable granddaughter you have. :) Wonderful imagery with the patched up pastel britches and the stitches in the britches. Excellent entry in the contest. Best wishes in the voting booth!
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Karen - glad you enjoyed.
Comment from Bill Schott
The return of Shelley Scarecrow turns out to be a really cool poem. In its seven stanza of rhyming couplets we get the rise and fall and rise of one of our under-appreciated heroes.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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The return of Shelley Scarecrow turns out to be a really cool poem. In its seven stanza of rhyming couplets we get the rise and fall and rise of one of our under-appreciated heroes.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Bill
Comment from Judy Couch
This is excellent. I love it. It takes a litte different approach to the prompt than most and that's good. I think it's worth six stars but I don't have them left.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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This is excellent. I love it. It takes a litte different approach to the prompt than most and that's good. I think it's worth six stars but I don't have them left.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Judy.
Different is good in my eyes too.
Comment from gypsycaravan
What a precious poem and so well done. Extremely clever to use the job of a scarecrow rather than a job of a human. Your poem was easy to read and flowed nicely for me. I am not a poet so can only judge content and how it sounded when I read it aloud. Good job. Luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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What a precious poem and so well done. Extremely clever to use the job of a scarecrow rather than a job of a human. Your poem was easy to read and flowed nicely for me. I am not a poet so can only judge content and how it sounded when I read it aloud. Good job. Luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks, gc - glad you enjoyed.
Comment from TAB_that's me
and an important job it is for shelley the scarecrow. Great fun poem for the prompt. Too bad shelley had to stay out all winter, cold and alone though. Good luck to you.
Teresa
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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and an important job it is for shelley the scarecrow. Great fun poem for the prompt. Too bad shelley had to stay out all winter, cold and alone though. Good luck to you.
Teresa
Comment Written 01-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2014
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Thanks, Teresa.
We had about a month of storms and felt pretty guilty every time we saw poor old Shelley face down in the mud, but it really wouldn't have been worthwhile resurrecting her till the weather improved.