Comment from Kingsland

Good

The poem as written is good. But it's not a 5-7-5 poem. That would be three lines, of 5 syllables, 7 syllables and then 5 again. Of which this is not. The poem is very good and has a good message, but it doesn't meet the criteria of the contest... John

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014

oh okay !! i did nt knw
anywyzz thnx fr the complement :)

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Thank you for remembering 9/11. What a sad day for all. I enjoyed your poem. In the line "none quiet knows . . . ", the word "quiet" needs to be "quite," Also this poem has more than 3 lines in the format 5/7/5. Did you intend it for that contest? Anyway, good poem. Good luck. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014

thnk u very mch :) i knw it has 3 lines bt i did nt understand it dat time so made a mistake :)thnx fr help

Comment from adewpearl

Good

good use of rhyming couplets and a thoughtful remembrance of this terrible tragedy, but you have misunderstood the rules for the 5/7/5 contest/format
You need to write a poem that is only 3 lines long
Line one has 5 syllables
Line two has 7 syllables
Line three has 5 syllables
The 4 rating is because of the contest rules, not because of the thoughtful poem
Brooke

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2014

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reply by the author on 13-Aug-2014

thnk u very mch
yeah !!! i did nt undrstnd the rules that time..:) thnx fr help