Sticks and Stones
Flash Fiction44 total reviews
Comment from amahra
This was really confusing for me. I read it a couple of times and couldn't make out if he committed suicide or was murderer ed. Maybe I need to read it again and update this.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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This was really confusing for me. I read it a couple of times and couldn't make out if he committed suicide or was murderer ed. Maybe I need to read it again and update this.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Thanks for taking the time to review. Yeah I only had five hundred words to get it all in so this one takes mental leaps by the reader. It's kind of a psych/supernatural vibe, if that helps at all.
Comment from pafaust
Charlie is obviously in the wrong line of work if he doesn't have the stomach to remove his personal feelings from the task at hand. I was worried that he wouldn't go through with it. I don't know why I've just made it sound like I had anything against Frank. I'm sure he was a lovely person. Your story had a good amount of intrigue and was fun to read. Sorry...I can't offer any suggestions to improve it. I thought it was great.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Charlie is obviously in the wrong line of work if he doesn't have the stomach to remove his personal feelings from the task at hand. I was worried that he wouldn't go through with it. I don't know why I've just made it sound like I had anything against Frank. I'm sure he was a lovely person. Your story had a good amount of intrigue and was fun to read. Sorry...I can't offer any suggestions to improve it. I thought it was great.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Charlie comes to a point where he identifies with hi victim's so much that he is basically in their head. That's why he is so sad, he feel their despair. Thanks for the awesome review.
Comment from kiwijenny
Words are worse than sticks and stones......
Well written....saddest note....good attention to detail
Well done.......................
God bless
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Words are worse than sticks and stones......
Well written....saddest note....good attention to detail
Well done.......................
God bless
Comment Written 29-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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So true, sometimes they are. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
Wow! That was an awesome story. By the time I got to the end of it, I was wishing that there was more to read. That's when you know it's a winner.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Wow! That was an awesome story. By the time I got to the end of it, I was wishing that there was more to read. That's when you know it's a winner.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Wow. Awesome. I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for taking the time to read and review, it is much appreciated.
Comment from Eric1
Hi DB, I am probably way off the mark here my friend, but here goes, Charlie gets into Franks head,and sort of hypnotises him into thinking that all his family are dead and that he should kill himself as well. Yes I know, way off the mark, but hey my friend it's all i've got, great story however, and I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Hi DB, I am probably way off the mark here my friend, but here goes, Charlie gets into Franks head,and sort of hypnotises him into thinking that all his family are dead and that he should kill himself as well. Yes I know, way off the mark, but hey my friend it's all i've got, great story however, and I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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You have actually hit the bulls eye! Thank you for the awesome review!
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Well that's something I suppose, brilliant story by the way, I really enjoyed reviewing it!
Comment from José Ángel
Although it took me to read it fluently, I liked it enough (and not because the text is bad, I have a bit tired eyes and just called me for a job, but I found it interesting and so I continued). My congratulations, I knew it would be worthwhile to continue reading your work. A hug from Chile
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Although it took me to read it fluently, I liked it enough (and not because the text is bad, I have a bit tired eyes and just called me for a job, but I found it interesting and so I continued). My congratulations, I knew it would be worthwhile to continue reading your work. A hug from Chile
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Jose, Thanks for taking the time to read and review. It is much appreciated.
Comment from lindalcreel
Wow, this guy seems to have a conscious despite being a murder for hire, or at least I'm assuming that's what he is. I wonder what ole Frank did to deserve such a fate. You did a great job of bringing the reader into the story without giving up too much information. I hope you do well in this contest.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Wow, this guy seems to have a conscious despite being a murder for hire, or at least I'm assuming that's what he is. I wonder what ole Frank did to deserve such a fate. You did a great job of bringing the reader into the story without giving up too much information. I hope you do well in this contest.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Thanks Linda, I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for taking the time to read and review. It is appreciated.
Comment from Max Edon
This was very interesting and fun to read. You kept my interest up. But if he used poison, why did he need a knife? I liked the ending.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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This was very interesting and fun to read. You kept my interest up. But if he used poison, why did he need a knife? I liked the ending.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Thanks Max, for the great review. The knife was to sharpen the pencil, that wrote the note, the poison was only figurative.
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You are welcome
Comment from Muffins
Charlie is a sad mess. Assassination by imagination. This is the type of guy that builds things like this in his system then goes postal. This story is high level. I had to read it twice to get the meaning but once I got it I understood. It's scary to think that one may work besides a Charlie.
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Charlie is a sad mess. Assassination by imagination. This is the type of guy that builds things like this in his system then goes postal. This story is high level. I had to read it twice to get the meaning but once I got it I understood. It's scary to think that one may work besides a Charlie.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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Muffins, you got it. Thanks for the great review.
Comment from bertodi
yes, well this is not at all as way out as some out there might think it is- suicides are being created it is called a trial and it will be a hundred years or more before this technology is openly reported and used, but it is happening NOW and I know some of the suicide victims- well written. don't know if you know how close to the truth you actually are-
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yes, well this is not at all as way out as some out there might think it is- suicides are being created it is called a trial and it will be a hundred years or more before this technology is openly reported and used, but it is happening NOW and I know some of the suicide victims- well written. don't know if you know how close to the truth you actually are-
Comment Written 28-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2014
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WOW, Conspiracy theorist. Thanks for the awesome review.
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no theory, but whilst enough rumours go around, people will not be sure..I am not given to theory or rumour.