tanka (branches knotted and gnarled)
tanka20 total reviews
Comment from me_tudor
This is a really nice poem. It makes me think of my mother in law in her old age now all gnarled and knotted. Sometimes I feel that way too.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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This is a really nice poem. It makes me think of my mother in law in her old age now all gnarled and knotted. Sometimes I feel that way too.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from ChowChow
Hi again Debbie... Is this poem about an old tree or you? I can see both in it. The tree you chose is truly very old. But you are younger. But can still be in a worse situation. Please get back to me. chowchow
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Hi again Debbie... Is this poem about an old tree or you? I can see both in it. The tree you chose is truly very old. But you are younger. But can still be in a worse situation. Please get back to me. chowchow
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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This is about both comparing a natural image with how I feel after one thing after the next has gone wrong the last 2 months. I am trying to dig my self out of depression, but in the fall when I get depressed it is hard Thank you for your kind words and support. hugs. Debbie
Comment from Dawny53
Nice work, Debbie, and congratulations on your ribbon! Your writing is inspiring.. reminding your reader that giving up hope should never be considered! Thanks for sharing..
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Nice work, Debbie, and congratulations on your ribbon! Your writing is inspiring.. reminding your reader that giving up hope should never be considered! Thanks for sharing..
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you so very much, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
branches knotted and gnarled
I can relate to that line especially. But bent and twisted, I'm still me inside, and you are still you. The outside shell of a person may not be perfect, but it's the inside that makes a person what she is. And you're a beautiful one, Debbie. :)
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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branches knotted and gnarled
I can relate to that line especially. But bent and twisted, I'm still me inside, and you are still you. The outside shell of a person may not be perfect, but it's the inside that makes a person what she is. And you're a beautiful one, Debbie. :)
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much for your kind words. I really need them today. Huge, my friend~Debbie
Comment from donaldww
I like the concrete image you present in the fist part of the poem, observe that they are reaching for something, and then tying that back to the idea of holding on to hope.
I was wondering if that same message could be delivered without introducing I'll, which is in future tense. I was thinking something like this (with a few other suggestions):
gnarled branches
reach toward the sun
unable to grasp and hold
yet they never give up
holding on to hope
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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I like the concrete image you present in the fist part of the poem, observe that they are reaching for something, and then tying that back to the idea of holding on to hope.
I was wondering if that same message could be delivered without introducing I'll, which is in future tense. I was thinking something like this (with a few other suggestions):
gnarled branches
reach toward the sun
unable to grasp and hold
yet they never give up
holding on to hope
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 30-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2014
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Donald, a few month ago I would have whole-heartedly agreed with you, but the ribbons editor has encouraged me to make them more personalized. I wrote it first without it, but on rereading,, added it. I do thank you for reviewing and your suggestions. Have a blesses day~Debbie
Comment from emrpoems
Well written words of wisdom. strong message of courage determination and hope.
Reminds me of the saying where there's a will - there's a way
Well paired picture and poem
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Well written words of wisdom. strong message of courage determination and hope.
Reminds me of the saying where there's a will - there's a way
Well paired picture and poem
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Waishali Deshmukh
Simple and inspiring thought conveyed so beautifully. Good alliteration in the first and the last line. I like the idea 'holding on to hope'. A good job done.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Simple and inspiring thought conveyed so beautifully. Good alliteration in the first and the last line. I like the idea 'holding on to hope'. A good job done.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from JW
Interesting poem.
In reading it, it reminded me of the last few years with my mother. Arthritis twisted her fingers and toes not unlike what knots do to trees.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Interesting poem.
In reading it, it reminded me of the last few years with my mother. Arthritis twisted her fingers and toes not unlike what knots do to trees.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
This picture poem pair echo each other in a very beautiful way. Life does not give up easily until it's purpose is achieved. This is a keeper. So, thanks for sharing. Bob
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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This picture poem pair echo each other in a very beautiful way. Life does not give up easily until it's purpose is achieved. This is a keeper. So, thanks for sharing. Bob
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you so very much, Bob. I appreciate your review and stars. Take care, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Jay Squires
Excellent! Both the poem and the picture. The will to live is indwelling in all of God's creations, whether rooted to the soil or rooted to a base of determination and boundless courage.
You are the latter, dear Debbie.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Excellent! Both the poem and the picture. The will to live is indwelling in all of God's creations, whether rooted to the soil or rooted to a base of determination and boundless courage.
You are the latter, dear Debbie.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2014
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Thank you, my kind friend~Debbie