Comment from Susanne M. Psyris

Exceptional

I thoroughly enjoyed this work. The couplets are wonderfully written and the sequence is sound and strong. I wish you best of luck in the contest...this is a good contender to take it! Hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014

I just got home from a hard day from work and your review has really made my night. I am so glad you liked my poem and thank you for the generous rating!!

Comment from K. Lorraine

Excellent

This poetic piece was poignant and perfect in every way. Beautifully written and exquisite rhyme. The subject matter was dark and deep, but then, you did follow the contest rules. Good luck in the contest...

 Comment Written 04-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Nov-2014

Thank you so much for this kind and thoughtful review. It is encouraging, and thank you for rooting for me in the contest!!!

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

solid rhyming couplets - I particularly like demise/exercise
creep/whisk away - strong action verbs add to the dramatic intensity of the death scene
Brooke

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Thank you again Brooke!!

Comment from mikemagine

Excellent

Very good. Me? I'll get gunned down after a police officer mistakes me for Big Foot.

Or I'll die laughing after learning I have a terminal illness...yep, laughter. I can be very, very dark...

Mike

 Comment Written 03-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Nov-2014

Dark humor is healing. ANYTHING that makes you smile is healing. And you made me smile today.. Thank you!

reply by mikemagine on 03-Nov-2014

You are very right! Humor is so necessary! Dark humor, as you say, is often best!

Cheers!