I Cast No Shadow
Short Story20 total reviews
Comment from nordicgirl
This was truly the best entry. Imagine a fully sentient soul trapped in a shadow able to move around and visually witness your killer get away with it. No one notices the shadow pointing or hears the shadow screaming for justice, it has no voice.
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This was truly the best entry. Imagine a fully sentient soul trapped in a shadow able to move around and visually witness your killer get away with it. No one notices the shadow pointing or hears the shadow screaming for justice, it has no voice.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2014
Comment from Eric1
I found this to be an excellent submission for this flash horror competition, You have set the story very well in so few words, a bit confused over mums, are they tablets?. good luck my friend
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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I found this to be an excellent submission for this flash horror competition, You have set the story very well in so few words, a bit confused over mums, are they tablets?. good luck my friend
Comment Written 14-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014
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The tablets are Tums. Mums is a brand of halfway decent Champagne. A little better than the Cold Duck that I usually buy. Glad you liked it. Thanks for the good wishes!
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It was my pleasure Micheal, thanks for the explanation.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
Wow, leave a great hook at the end so you could turn this into a novel very easily. A horror/thriller can make the not shadow into somebody to get Pierre!
Great story. I enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
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Hi,
Wow, leave a great hook at the end so you could turn this into a novel very easily. A horror/thriller can make the not shadow into somebody to get Pierre!
Great story. I enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 13-Nov-2014
Comment from Cosmic2011
I really enjoyed this story. It gave you the who, but not the why, when, and how. I also like that it is told from the perspective of the victim who understands everything that has happened, but cannot voice her complaints...and let's not forget the slight humor. Kudos!
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I really enjoyed this story. It gave you the who, but not the why, when, and how. I also like that it is told from the perspective of the victim who understands everything that has happened, but cannot voice her complaints...and let's not forget the slight humor. Kudos!
Comment Written 13-Nov-2014
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mystery Writer
Very nice. Horror on the chilled side. I love the concept of the 'dead body' as narrator. Seems that creep husband is going to get away with it. I wonder if one feels frustrated after death? Well penned, fast paced, only essential wording. Your story held my interest and entertained all the way through. Such a small word count to set a scene, provide a conflict and the conclusion. I love the touch of the Mums and wilted rose, the cheap high heels (and vanity even after death) ... I would just hate to be murdered wearing the wrong shoes. lol Horror, thriller and on 'the landing. Well done. A very good flash fiction. I wish you the best of luck for the contest. Warm Regards - Lovi xoxo
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Hi Mystery Writer
Very nice. Horror on the chilled side. I love the concept of the 'dead body' as narrator. Seems that creep husband is going to get away with it. I wonder if one feels frustrated after death? Well penned, fast paced, only essential wording. Your story held my interest and entertained all the way through. Such a small word count to set a scene, provide a conflict and the conclusion. I love the touch of the Mums and wilted rose, the cheap high heels (and vanity even after death) ... I would just hate to be murdered wearing the wrong shoes. lol Horror, thriller and on 'the landing. Well done. A very good flash fiction. I wish you the best of luck for the contest. Warm Regards - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 13-Nov-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Pretty creepy. The body has no shadow. Amazing theory? Your souls has went into your shadow. The pretender pretends you are sleeping. The body has no shadow. I doubt anyone has anything like this. How was she killed? Know this was yours by the writing style. Creative and imaginative. A different take on horror. Count your doubloon. do loco
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Pretty creepy. The body has no shadow. Amazing theory? Your souls has went into your shadow. The pretender pretends you are sleeping. The body has no shadow. I doubt anyone has anything like this. How was she killed? Know this was yours by the writing style. Creative and imaginative. A different take on horror. Count your doubloon. do loco
Comment Written 13-Nov-2014
Comment from bob cullen
This is such a good read.
Hope there is a follow-up and Pierre gets what he deserved.
I know the word count restricts too much detail, but I would like to know Pierre's motive.
Good luck in the contest
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This is such a good read.
Hope there is a follow-up and Pierre gets what he deserved.
I know the word count restricts too much detail, but I would like to know Pierre's motive.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 13-Nov-2014
Comment from jpduck
Very nicely done; a good piece of writing. I slightly have the impression that the prompt, that you have lost your shadow, was a minor inconvenince, dealt with by the throw-away line 'My shadow, which I have somehow entered'. Then mentioned at the end by the observation that your corpse does not have a shadow. Apart from that, it would feel like a much more comfortable piece of flash fiction if it was your ghost - call it what you will - that observes the post-mortem events. The problem, of course, is not yours, but belongs to the rather daft requirement of the Prompt. It will be interesting to see if any of the competitors are able to give the concept of losing your shadow a meaningful interpretation. I rather doubt it, somehow.
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Very nicely done; a good piece of writing. I slightly have the impression that the prompt, that you have lost your shadow, was a minor inconvenince, dealt with by the throw-away line 'My shadow, which I have somehow entered'. Then mentioned at the end by the observation that your corpse does not have a shadow. Apart from that, it would feel like a much more comfortable piece of flash fiction if it was your ghost - call it what you will - that observes the post-mortem events. The problem, of course, is not yours, but belongs to the rather daft requirement of the Prompt. It will be interesting to see if any of the competitors are able to give the concept of losing your shadow a meaningful interpretation. I rather doubt it, somehow.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2014
Comment from LIJ Red
I'm short on lore, here. Have we a soul doomed to wander forever as a disembodied shadow, or a zombie about to rise and slaughter, or a weredemon of some kind? The story is well written
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I'm short on lore, here. Have we a soul doomed to wander forever as a disembodied shadow, or a zombie about to rise and slaughter, or a weredemon of some kind? The story is well written
Comment Written 13-Nov-2014
Comment from K. Lorraine
Great imagination in writing this short. The flow was wonderful... I could see the body without a shadow... loved the excitement and suspense. Seems like the perfect murder without being caught plot. Good luck in the contest.
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Great imagination in writing this short. The flow was wonderful... I could see the body without a shadow... loved the excitement and suspense. Seems like the perfect murder without being caught plot. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2014