Mom Makes the Best Supper
It's a dog-eat-dog world out there.. sometimes.32 total reviews
Comment from Realist101
Oh Dean...oh, Dean...geez! This is egregiously gory. I do believe 'the boys in the basement' have a firm hold on you. This has a great sense of doom. Great dialogue too. Deliciously gross! However...You've effectively ruined my appetite for pizza tonight! :D (Which is a good thing after all!)
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Oh Dean...oh, Dean...geez! This is egregiously gory. I do believe 'the boys in the basement' have a firm hold on you. This has a great sense of doom. Great dialogue too. Deliciously gross! However...You've effectively ruined my appetite for pizza tonight! :D (Which is a good thing after all!)
Comment Written 26-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2015
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Heh-heh, so sorry about that, Susan. Hopefully you've recovered enough when turkey time rolls around, LOL...
Thanks for the comments.
~Dean
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Sadly, my appetite returned in full force Dean!I am sooooo miserable! Back to the normal fare tomorrow. :) Hope you had a nice turkey day. S.
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I did, and it sounds as if you did too. I'm very happy to hear it!
~Dean :}
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:)
Comment from Delahay
You are truly a very sick and twisted individual. I like that. I guess Ritchie was REALLY upset about poor Spaz wasn't he? I wonder how He's going to explain things to Dad.
I assume that the truth you are referring to is that neither of the countries who launched retaliatory strikes was responsible for the first bombs?
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2014
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You are truly a very sick and twisted individual. I like that. I guess Ritchie was REALLY upset about poor Spaz wasn't he? I wonder how He's going to explain things to Dad.
I assume that the truth you are referring to is that neither of the countries who launched retaliatory strikes was responsible for the first bombs?
Comment Written 09-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2014
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Yep, that's exactly what I meant, Ward. And I think that's similar to the way in which it will actually occur, hopefully after I'm dead and long gone.
Thanks for the R&R. Much appreciated. :)
Comment from Michaelk
When I first read this story it struck me as over the top. I'm sure Freud would have a field day with the fact that the kid ate his mother. But as I read it again I realized that it's not any gorier or more macabre than dozens of other stories I've read on thus site. I guess the kid killing his mother after she had done all that to keep them alive, struck a nerve. I have no tolerance for punk kids who show no respect to their parents.
(Sorry, I'll get down off my soapbox)
Your story was well written, characters were believable, and the twist at the end was great, especially with the father's line.
The story was
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2014
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When I first read this story it struck me as over the top. I'm sure Freud would have a field day with the fact that the kid ate his mother. But as I read it again I realized that it's not any gorier or more macabre than dozens of other stories I've read on thus site. I guess the kid killing his mother after she had done all that to keep them alive, struck a nerve. I have no tolerance for punk kids who show no respect to their parents.
(Sorry, I'll get down off my soapbox)
Your story was well written, characters were believable, and the twist at the end was great, especially with the father's line.
The story was
Comment Written 08-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Michael. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review it.
Much obliged. :}
~Dean
Comment from Imogen JH
My initial thought were that is was a bit weak. A few questions.
What relevance was giving the exact time to the story?. I thought it would have some relevance, but it didn't
The family went looking for the father in the devastated city. Couldn't find him and returned home, but it took him weeks to get home. Why? How come?
Their starving, but eating a dog is somehow a moral dilemma after eating rats?
No sorry, the plot is so weak I just don't buy it. It wasn't horrifying enough and as a result, I didn't care about the characters plight.
I know the story has a limited word count. I give you credit for writing something readable within that narrow frame, but it had potential to be stronger. A stronger plot and you could have removed all questions.
That said, you did carry the emotion of your characters well. I liked the way the mother tried to hide what she had done. That came across very well indeed.
No setting out issues, No noticable SPAG's. Nice complimentary picture.
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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2014
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My initial thought were that is was a bit weak. A few questions.
What relevance was giving the exact time to the story?. I thought it would have some relevance, but it didn't
The family went looking for the father in the devastated city. Couldn't find him and returned home, but it took him weeks to get home. Why? How come?
Their starving, but eating a dog is somehow a moral dilemma after eating rats?
No sorry, the plot is so weak I just don't buy it. It wasn't horrifying enough and as a result, I didn't care about the characters plight.
I know the story has a limited word count. I give you credit for writing something readable within that narrow frame, but it had potential to be stronger. A stronger plot and you could have removed all questions.
That said, you did carry the emotion of your characters well. I liked the way the mother tried to hide what she had done. That came across very well indeed.
No setting out issues, No noticable SPAG's. Nice complimentary picture.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2014
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:}
~Dean
Comment from JackiO
Heavens alive!
That was brilliant in a very macabre sort of way!
The imagery was revolting and brutal - Great!
A story well told, I do have to wonder though how dad would feel or what he would do
when he discovers he has devoured his wife?
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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Heavens alive!
That was brilliant in a very macabre sort of way!
The imagery was revolting and brutal - Great!
A story well told, I do have to wonder though how dad would feel or what he would do
when he discovers he has devoured his wife?
Comment Written 08-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014
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Yeah, can't you just imagine the look on his face, heh-heh? Bet bet he won't think too much of mom for this supper once he does find out.
Thanks so much for the outstanding review, JackiO. I sincerely appreciate it! ~Dean
Comment from Macsween
Excellent. Great short story with a delicious twist. I've been off the site for a while and it's good to see that you are still writing awesome stories. Good luck in the contest.
Macsween
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014
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Excellent. Great short story with a delicious twist. I've been off the site for a while and it's good to see that you are still writing awesome stories. Good luck in the contest.
Macsween
Comment Written 08-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014
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Thanks so much, Macsween. I'm glad you enjoyed this, and as always, I appreciate your review. :}
~Dean
Comment from amahra
Wow! Mom makes the best supper. He said a mouth full. LOL! Sorry couldn't resist that play on words. I really enjoyed this ghastly story. Only you could tell it so well. Liked all of the art work you chose also, Great job, Dean.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Wow! Mom makes the best supper. He said a mouth full. LOL! Sorry couldn't resist that play on words. I really enjoyed this ghastly story. Only you could tell it so well. Liked all of the art work you chose also, Great job, Dean.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Thanks, amahra. I cut some of the photos that were there originally. A bit too graphic for most tastes, I think. (no pun intended)...LOL
Comment from write hand blue
Hi Dean, never thought I would be able to help you with a text problem. I had the same problem. What you do is highlight the grey word and reselect the text colour. One word at a time. Ok?
I wrote a story about one of the twenty odd suitcase bombs that went missing in Ukraine where Russia had the assembly plant. This was when the cold war ended in the early nineteen nineties. Your story reminded me of it.
Yes cannibalism is the last resort in extreme survival situations. Most people are capable if not everyone. This was proven in the Andes air crash in the 1980s.
That was a nice twist at the end, Hannibal Lectore would approve I'm sure. LOL.
'My Mum makes the best supper.' a good play on words.
How is Richie going to talk his way out of that one I wonder?
Good luck with the writing prompt... :) Mel.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Hi Dean, never thought I would be able to help you with a text problem. I had the same problem. What you do is highlight the grey word and reselect the text colour. One word at a time. Ok?
I wrote a story about one of the twenty odd suitcase bombs that went missing in Ukraine where Russia had the assembly plant. This was when the cold war ended in the early nineteen nineties. Your story reminded me of it.
Yes cannibalism is the last resort in extreme survival situations. Most people are capable if not everyone. This was proven in the Andes air crash in the 1980s.
That was a nice twist at the end, Hannibal Lectore would approve I'm sure. LOL.
'My Mum makes the best supper.' a good play on words.
How is Richie going to talk his way out of that one I wonder?
Good luck with the writing prompt... :) Mel.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Got it, Mel, and thanks! I have been wracking my tired old brain trying to figure it out! In my latest poem, some text has vanished completely in the new FS, but shows up in the old. I suppose they'll get all of the bugs worked out eventually. I certainly hope so.
As for the prompt, I lost by one vote. Better than coming in last, I suppose, right? And we can't win 'em all (although we can certainly try our damnedest to! LOL)
Thanks for the info on the text, as well as the review.
~Dean
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My pleasure.
Comment from padumachitta
Hey Dean. Ah the good old eat the dog thing..hot dog, dog on a stick, corn dog, chilli dog...
I understand your frustration with the new editor..I just posted and spent more time fighting with the posting of it than the damn tenses...
I liked the feel to this story, the grittiness and of course the switch around at the end.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Hey Dean. Ah the good old eat the dog thing..hot dog, dog on a stick, corn dog, chilli dog...
I understand your frustration with the new editor..I just posted and spent more time fighting with the posting of it than the damn tenses...
I liked the feel to this story, the grittiness and of course the switch around at the end.
padumachitta
Comment Written 07-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Thanks, padu, I'm glad you got an opportunity to read it for me. I'm about to check out your latest story here in a few minutes.
I like the look of the new site, but the damn thing keeps wanting to dick with my formatting. It's very frustrating, but more than that, it makes no sense.
Thanks again for the R&R. Watch for mine real soon. :)
~Dean
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Hi...I also like the look of the new site. But my old laptop just can't handle it. And...well, I hate it when my text is different colour than I want..
he ho...
about to eat dinner...egss, no dogs...no spam, no mystery meat...:-)
pc
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No "mystery meat" is always a good thing at my house, padu, heh-heh...
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:-)
dog in a tin, or spam, was always a camping trip groan....
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I sill like SPAM to this day. I put it in my meatloaf, and make SPAM omelets with green peppers and onions in them. Delicious! :)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
OMG! Dean, that was so...OMG!!! I really did not expect that! Richie could eat his mum, but not his dog? I suppose there is some sense in that, I have been told, by someone, that human flesh tastes a lot like chicken. This story is so good, really is up to your high standard, I am glad I saw it on here, I've been out for the count for a few days, with the flue. Not nice. Good luck in the contest, my friend. It is superb. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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OMG! Dean, that was so...OMG!!! I really did not expect that! Richie could eat his mum, but not his dog? I suppose there is some sense in that, I have been told, by someone, that human flesh tastes a lot like chicken. This story is so good, really is up to your high standard, I am glad I saw it on here, I've been out for the count for a few days, with the flue. Not nice. Good luck in the contest, my friend. It is superb. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 07-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2014
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Thanks very much, Sandra, and I'm sorry you've been feeling poorly. I had a bout with the flu, which eventually changed into pneumonia, just a few weeks ago, and It's not fun, that's for sure!
Thanks for the complimentary review and six star rating. I am very grateful, and I hope you get to feeling better soon!
Hugs <3 ~Dean