Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 59 "Disease and Deception"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
17 total reviews
Comment from Sasha
I am so sorry it has taken me so long to get to this...recuperating from my injury has occupied all my time. I am also pleased I am not as far behind as I feared. Great job with this chapter. I anxiously await Cicero's fate. I know he already has the plague, but a nice painful death would be fine with me.
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I am so sorry it has taken me so long to get to this...recuperating from my injury has occupied all my time. I am also pleased I am not as far behind as I feared. Great job with this chapter. I anxiously await Cicero's fate. I know he already has the plague, but a nice painful death would be fine with me.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from robina1978
I have never heard of the red plague, only the black one. They are all looking for each other, but got caught by Cicero's men and soldiers. Julia and Valerius are safe for the time being.
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I have never heard of the red plague, only the black one. They are all looking for each other, but got caught by Cicero's men and soldiers. Julia and Valerius are safe for the time being.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2014
Comment from emrpoems
Another of your well written chapters
Good use of descriptive language
Goo use of natural dialogue
you know how to hold the interest of the reader and you do it well
An enjoyable read
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Another of your well written chapters
Good use of descriptive language
Goo use of natural dialogue
you know how to hold the interest of the reader and you do it well
An enjoyable read
Comment Written 17-Dec-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: Well written, full of suspense and action. What happened to Abramus and the red spots? I missed a few when I was replying to all my reviews...yours must take days...and you are sooooo busy writing! I am learning from you and Dean on writing stories...Brooke and Honeycomb on poems. OOOPPS, you are everywhere, I liked your polar bear.
I like the wolves in the stories so much like the Native Americans with their spiritual guides of wolves. The victory is in the truth and light.
God bless your Christmas season! flylikeaneagle
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Michael: Well written, full of suspense and action. What happened to Abramus and the red spots? I missed a few when I was replying to all my reviews...yours must take days...and you are sooooo busy writing! I am learning from you and Dean on writing stories...Brooke and Honeycomb on poems. OOOPPS, you are everywhere, I liked your polar bear.
I like the wolves in the stories so much like the Native Americans with their spiritual guides of wolves. The victory is in the truth and light.
God bless your Christmas season! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 17-Dec-2014
Comment from amahra
This was a fine chapter, though I failed to keep up. I loved the part the wolf played in the beginning of the chapter. It made me want to read more. It was an excellent leading paragraph.
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This was a fine chapter, though I failed to keep up. I loved the part the wolf played in the beginning of the chapter. It made me want to read more. It was an excellent leading paragraph.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2014
Comment from Joe_P
You have a good story line. The scenes change more frequently than before. The story moves quickly, and there is increased tension and suspense. I wonder what will become of Cicero.
Joe
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You have a good story line. The scenes change more frequently than before. The story moves quickly, and there is increased tension and suspense. I wonder what will become of Cicero.
Joe
Comment Written 17-Dec-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Whoop, indeed. Won't be long now before the soldiers and Cicero are neutralized, I hope. Let's get to the happy ending wiht Julia and Valerius... some huggy kissy face with bells and fireworks! :)
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Whoop, indeed. Won't be long now before the soldiers and Cicero are neutralized, I hope. Let's get to the happy ending wiht Julia and Valerius... some huggy kissy face with bells and fireworks! :)
Comment Written 17-Dec-2014
Comment from CR Delport
Seems like Cicero is not so brave on his own. Good idea from Valerius to draw the soldiers away. I hope that everyone who has the pox will be okay. Mike, another fine writen chapter. Good job.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
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Seems like Cicero is not so brave on his own. Good idea from Valerius to draw the soldiers away. I hope that everyone who has the pox will be okay. Mike, another fine writen chapter. Good job.
Have a great day.
Christelle.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
Comment from Gloria ....
I dig it, Mikey. I'm always up for some D&D providing that it's dungeons and dragons and not disease and deception. Holy mackerel, you've hit them hard!
The dialogue works really well in this setting and time line. They had yet to learn the value of contractions, plus the church definitely wielded an enormous power of persuasion over the masses.
Lots of action and overall, a great read.
Gloria
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I dig it, Mikey. I'm always up for some D&D providing that it's dungeons and dragons and not disease and deception. Holy mackerel, you've hit them hard!
The dialogue works really well in this setting and time line. They had yet to learn the value of contractions, plus the church definitely wielded an enormous power of persuasion over the masses.
Lots of action and overall, a great read.
Gloria
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
Comment from Michaelk
Did I miss a chapter? What are the red sores?
I love when you do chapters like this, broken up into small segments. It really makes the action seem that much quicker. It also gives the chapter a rhythm like a drumbeat. I thought when you first planned on having villagers overwhelm soldiers that it would not go well. fantastic twist for valerius to use his horn to draw away the soldiers. When you first mentioned seeing the romans and persians fighting, I thought valerius was having a flashback to a previous life.
Great, action packed chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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Did I miss a chapter? What are the red sores?
I love when you do chapters like this, broken up into small segments. It really makes the action seem that much quicker. It also gives the chapter a rhythm like a drumbeat. I thought when you first planned on having villagers overwhelm soldiers that it would not go well. fantastic twist for valerius to use his horn to draw away the soldiers. When you first mentioned seeing the romans and persians fighting, I thought valerius was having a flashback to a previous life.
Great, action packed chapter.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2014
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I don't remember if I hinted at them last chapter or not. I think a brief mention. The red sores are small pox. But, they didn't call it that back then. I realized as the action started that the villagers didn't stand a chance like you say. Cleverness was needed. I knew Valerius had his horn, just waiting for the right time to use it. :) Rare planning ahead on my part! It was a flashback of sorts though the soldiers were really there. The ability to play is from a previous life. mikey