Comment from write hand blue

Excellent

Hi Dean. A graveyard is not the best of places for a shortcut especially for a young girl.

That looks like a replica medieval battle axe you show in your animation. Much more effective than those wider bladed ones used for executions.

One is left wondering a little at the end. Did she end up as a garden ornament? I wonder.

Another of your little pumkins--oops, I mean little gems. lol

:) Mel.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015

Well, thank you, Mel. I often like to leave the endings of my flash fiction -- horror or otherwise -- open for reader interpretations. I've found it works out much better for me that way. She may have gotten away, but then again, her head may have ended up impaled on a stake. I leave that open for you to decide.
Being new to the area, she'd realized too late the the hunchback's shortcut traveled past a cemetery.

Oops! Heh-heh... ~Dean

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

Another chilling story. I think, I have chill all through me, and it has little to do with chill in the air (pun intended). Serves Jeannie right for taking advice from strangers. And how could a young girl walk through a cemetery at night by herself?

Morbid visuals of the man with the ax. And that dripping orange paint...

Tou are in your element, Dean.

 Comment Written 03-May-2015

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reply by the author on 05-May-2015

Thanks for taking time away from your own work to read and review one of my own, Yelena. I appreciate it very much, as always. ~Dean

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

A girl should never take directions from an odd looking hunchbacked fellow in the first place. That never ends up well, especially when it leads past a cemetery. Pumpkins, ok they're not pumpkins. A girl could lose her head. A good tiny horror take.

 Comment Written 02-May-2015

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reply by the author on 03-May-2015

No, Tom, they shouldn't. Oh when will they ever learn?
Thanks for taking time out to read and review the story. I very much appreciate that...~Dean

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

This is another good addition.

A large, odd looking hunchbacked fellow assured her it was the quickest way from school to her family's quaint little home on Elm Street. (Now why would Jeanie take the advice of a gentleman with this description????)

 Comment Written 02-May-2015

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reply by the author on 02-May-2015

Too trusting, I guess? Who knows why people do what they do in horror stories and on film. I've never been able to figure it out.
Thanks for the review, Barbara...~Dean :}

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi Dean,

So many 'shortcuts' seem to lead to some permanent place in perdition. You'd think people would learn. Especially to avoid houses on streets named 'Elm' and in towns named things like Amity ...

Patrick

 Comment Written 02-May-2015

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reply by the author on 02-May-2015

Hah, yeah, you'd think so, right?
Thanks for your review, Patrick. I greatly appreciate it. ~Dean

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Oh dear, a shortcut that went awry. Since I get scared going to the basement, I don't think I would ever try a shortcut. Loved your story. Scary, creepy and fun.

Blessings
AJanet

 Comment Written 01-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-May-2015

Thanks for reading it, Janet. I very much appreciate your comments. ~Dean

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hey Dean good one...I enjoyed it...if that is0 the right phrase!

Ah...the book...since I am not around much...what is it about and would you want one of my stories? I would be honoured...
padumachitta

 Comment Written 01-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-May-2015

Thanks, padu, and heck yeah I'd like you to contribute to the book. I just ask that the stories be between 100-500 words in length, and have a horror theme. Other than that, the ball's completely in your court...:}

~Dean

Comment from Dustybones

Excellent

I like your thinking and the courage to write of such, what I'd call, the dark shadows of the mind. Do your brain's thoughts keep you awake at night?

 Comment Written 01-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-May-2015

Nope...I sleep like a baby, Dustybones, heh-heh...
I'm glad you enjoyed this tiny terror tale, and I hope you remain interested in reading all the stories in this series. Your comments are greatly appreciated, my friend. :)
~Dean

Comment from GE Parson

Excellent

Bro.Dean,
I'm going to hae to stop reading your writings; I'm starting to have night mares, waking up in a sweat, hearing voices that are not coming from visible human body. LOL

Just kidding! But I think a Psychiatrist would have an exciting time analyzing what makes you tick.

I think my house is haunted, as my wife an d I both see a shadow of a lady float past certain corner of our living room.

We had a psychic come and try to cast her out, and he ended up on his back crumple in a corner of an adjoining room. We did not hear her speak but he said she told him to get his
ass back were he came from; that she wasn't hurting any one.

Anyway have a lovely day
Your riend,Jerry

 Comment Written 01-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-May-2015

Holy haunted houses, Jerry! That's more than just a ghost, my friend. Ghosts don't usually exhibit physical violence. Poltergeists, yes. Demonic entities, absolutely. That's some scary stuff, my friend. Be careful!

A couple of psychiatrists have had a crack at trying to figure out what makes me tick. They all gave up. They say nothing is wrong with me at all, that I'm as emotionally stable as anyone else they knew. But I wonder sometimes myself, heh-heh.

Thanks for reading and reviewing my story, and for sharing your own personal experience as well. I just might create a story based off of it sometime.

God bless, and have a wonderful weekend... ~Dean ;)

reply by GE Parson on 02-May-2015

I'm looking foward to it.
Yeah, I know you are right, but as long as we leave her alone i do n not fear anything from her.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

I love the audio for this. What a creepy thing to see. The poor girl. I liked the imagery in this. Great shiver factor. I think I am going to try to pen one of these. I'm not really good with the computer but I will try to get it to you. Good job on this project. Horror is your calling. Gretchen

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Thanks, Gretchen. After my heart attack left me dead for over three minutes, I began to write the dark stories I do now. Not until I came to FanStory in 2013 did I write poetry. Gungalo coaxed me into writing my first poem here. Otherwise I would have been writing stories.

I hope you do try to write a story and add it to the book. Good luck with it... ~Dean