Tiny Tales of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 1003 "Bus Ride"Multi-authored book of flash/micro horror fiction
8 total reviews
Comment from evilynne
A very well written scary tale of terror, fun reading. It fits the category of terror tales quite well. Hope to read more of your stuff soon. Evi
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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A very well written scary tale of terror, fun reading. It fits the category of terror tales quite well. Hope to read more of your stuff soon. Evi
Comment Written 07-Oct-2015
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2015
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On a new moon is another flash semihorror I wrote. Thanks you very much for reading and reviewing!
Comment from racheal dubois
I still enjoying reading the chapters of tiny tales of horror. You are very good at knowing what point your readers are hooked, and when you will end it just leaving enough curiosity for more.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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I still enjoying reading the chapters of tiny tales of horror. You are very good at knowing what point your readers are hooked, and when you will end it just leaving enough curiosity for more.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Mr. Dark
Holy crap, sir! LOLOL! You find another chapter in Dean's Tiny Tales book and you expect a nice, neat, simple nightmare, not a condensed dystopian epic! Not something that actually makes you ponder and think LOL! So much going on in so few words... That alone is highly enviable, but the imagination that went into this! I loathe to think what fever inspired this. The setting of the highway and the bus was perfect, and the end, with the reveal of the shattered bus... Well played, sir.
A fetid witch's brew of mythology, religion, legend, old wive's tales, and psychedelia. More than suited for a Tiny Tale, even if it is far more intelligent than simple ghosts and ghouls :) And tell the truth, you were pandering to Dean, weren't you? This is exactly the kind of shit that Dean's a virtual expert on, unlike most of us who have to occasionally rely on wikipedia to clarify things LOL!
Brilliant, Red.
--Sara
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Holy crap, sir! LOLOL! You find another chapter in Dean's Tiny Tales book and you expect a nice, neat, simple nightmare, not a condensed dystopian epic! Not something that actually makes you ponder and think LOL! So much going on in so few words... That alone is highly enviable, but the imagination that went into this! I loathe to think what fever inspired this. The setting of the highway and the bus was perfect, and the end, with the reveal of the shattered bus... Well played, sir.
A fetid witch's brew of mythology, religion, legend, old wive's tales, and psychedelia. More than suited for a Tiny Tale, even if it is far more intelligent than simple ghosts and ghouls :) And tell the truth, you were pandering to Dean, weren't you? This is exactly the kind of shit that Dean's a virtual expert on, unlike most of us who have to occasionally rely on wikipedia to clarify things LOL!
Brilliant, Red.
--Sara
Comment Written 27-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing, and the encouraging words! The chief source of horror in the human subconscious. A little hard to awaken, sometimes....
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! G'day Red, you are a genius mate. That is one hell of a killer twist in this one. This should have been a contest entry as I'm sure it would have won. I loved it, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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Hahahaha! G'day Red, you are a genius mate. That is one hell of a killer twist in this one. This should have been a contest entry as I'm sure it would have won. I loved it, cheers Fez
Comment Written 12-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015
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Broad is the road to damnation, they say. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Comment from JaseDR85
Your dialog was very snappy and well paced along with the story. Everything painted a clear picture I didn't find myself confused on who was talking. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Your dialog was very snappy and well paced along with the story. Everything painted a clear picture I didn't find myself confused on who was talking. Nicely done.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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I played fast and loose with theology and demonology, I know. Thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Dean Kuch
"The barren scrub of the wide median strip and rolling hills were empty but for the waves of dancing heat."...........Excellent descriptive narrative here, Red. it really sets the scene well...
Many people believe Beelzebub to be synonymous with Satan. According to demonology's lore, however, when Satan first rebelled, he recruited several very powerful seraphim, Beelzebub among them, to fight at his side. Once he took up his new residence in Hell, Beelzebub learned to tempt men with pride. When summoned by witches or sorcerers, he appeared in the form of a fly, because "Lord of the Flies" was his forte, as it were. He'd acquired it by visiting a plague of flies upon the harvest of Canaan, or, perhaps, simply because flies were once believed to be generated in the flesh of decaying corpses. Another tale suggests that God created every creature, except the fly -- which was made by the Devil.
Well, this was certainly a "thinking man's" Tiny Terror Tale, Red. There are a lot of references to Greek Dionysian society, Ialdabaoth, the Gnostic Demiurge, and other relatively obscure acknowledgments which will soar high over the heads of those who aren't into these sorts of things.
Good story, and I appreciate your contribution to the book.
~Dean
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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"The barren scrub of the wide median strip and rolling hills were empty but for the waves of dancing heat."...........Excellent descriptive narrative here, Red. it really sets the scene well...
Many people believe Beelzebub to be synonymous with Satan. According to demonology's lore, however, when Satan first rebelled, he recruited several very powerful seraphim, Beelzebub among them, to fight at his side. Once he took up his new residence in Hell, Beelzebub learned to tempt men with pride. When summoned by witches or sorcerers, he appeared in the form of a fly, because "Lord of the Flies" was his forte, as it were. He'd acquired it by visiting a plague of flies upon the harvest of Canaan, or, perhaps, simply because flies were once believed to be generated in the flesh of decaying corpses. Another tale suggests that God created every creature, except the fly -- which was made by the Devil.
Well, this was certainly a "thinking man's" Tiny Terror Tale, Red. There are a lot of references to Greek Dionysian society, Ialdabaoth, the Gnostic Demiurge, and other relatively obscure acknowledgments which will soar high over the heads of those who aren't into these sorts of things.
Good story, and I appreciate your contribution to the book.
~Dean
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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I'm glad this was not a flatulent flop-I thought about moving Kitty, Kitty to the book, but this story idea came creeping, looked like a 500 word thing, so I went that route. Of course the God Damned Independent, being an angel, should have been more
knowledgeable about the hierarchy of Hell. I went through a phase reading some Gnostic literature, a dizzying mass of imagination gone ballistic...contributing was my pleasure and thanks for reading and reviewing.
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The pleasure was all mine, my friend. Great work!
~Dean
Comment from Cybertron1986
There is a lot of desciption here that brings the reader down to earth. I love the flow of dialogue. I learned some new slang in the process. Was this taken from a personal experience, or did you think of this yourself because, I can't help but say how accurate the circumstances are which led to the demise at the end.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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There is a lot of desciption here that brings the reader down to earth. I love the flow of dialogue. I learned some new slang in the process. Was this taken from a personal experience, or did you think of this yourself because, I can't help but say how accurate the circumstances are which led to the demise at the end.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Just my imagination and some borrowing from several classics, like the flick Jacob's Ladder, and the Owl Creek Bridge story. Yes, my characters were careless in their talk about the hierarchy of Hell, as Beelzebub and Lucifer are separate entities...
thanks very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Gloria ....
Red, interesting allegory of a dystopian society--a Greek Fraternity. That could be truly frightening for misfits.
Again the acronym GDI should be spelled out in the first instance rather than in the author notes as some readers may not know what that stands for.
Bode's Goddoom flew right past me, so if you would please explain that to me, I'd be forever grateful.
It looks like the Babylonians got their asses kicked.
Great stuff and an excellent albeit esoteric inclusion in the Tiny Book.
Gloria
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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Red, interesting allegory of a dystopian society--a Greek Fraternity. That could be truly frightening for misfits.
Again the acronym GDI should be spelled out in the first instance rather than in the author notes as some readers may not know what that stands for.
Bode's Goddoom flew right past me, so if you would please explain that to me, I'd be forever grateful.
It looks like the Babylonians got their asses kicked.
Great stuff and an excellent albeit esoteric inclusion in the Tiny Book.
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015
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An artist named Vaughn Bode, back in the hippy/Nam years, created a cultic place called Deadbone Mountain, a character called Cheech Wizard and a vast, mysterious god called Goddoom who looked like a roving thundercloud....from the era of Mister Natural, strolling with his giant shoes...maybe I forget how old I am...thanks so much for reading and reviewing...
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I remember Mister Natural and keep on truckin'. Also Robert Crumb was a favourite cartoonist of mine and right after him the Fabulous Furry Freak Brothers. After bible stories (purchased from a door-to-door salesman) comic books were where I picked up most of my "information". There wasn't even a public library in the small mining town I lived in. Never heard of Vaughn Bode before though, so thank you. :)
