Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

river runs

where left-leaning trees expand

ex-stream equality



A clever use of words in this short piece, Gypsy.


Margare

 Comment Written 10-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2016

Thank you, Margaret :)

Comment from Unspoken94

Excellent

Excellent Haiku and not much can be said but the
image is clearly found in the words. I think I even
understand the color scheme. -Bill

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016

Thank you, Bill, you are very kind and I am grateful for reading and reviewing my poem. :)

Comment from MelB

Excellent

I like the color scheme and that you didn't do a traditional syllable count. I tried one of these before and it was a disaster, so leery to try another.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016

Hello Mel :) I love haiku, to me it's so simple and beautiful and you get to be creative. To me, they are like little puzzles that you have to figure out. I guess we will have our favorite type of poem. :) I think they are easy.

Thank you very much for your excellent review!

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Gypsy,

Your poem is written very well and I really enjoyed what you said in it. I never could understand how to write a haiku poem and even though you told what each line means I wouldn't be able to write one. LOL

Kat

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016

Hello Kat :) Thank you very much for your lovely review, I am grateful you took the time to read and review my poem. Thank you!

reply by MizKat on 09-Jan-2016

You're very welcome. I like reading them. Kat

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Gypsy;
-you mention a kigo or a reference to seasonal concept and I don't prevalently see that in your writing?
-The satori however is definitely one that summarizes the conceptual theme of your writing and also gives that spontaneity reflection of your conceptual theme or an aha moment.
-Two of your lines are definitely grammatically interconnected and give an imagery that is exquisitely expressive and vividly described.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Gypsy.
Alex

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016

Hello, Alex :) The trees are 'expanding' thus it's Spring. It may bee too obscure to grasp, I'll take a look.
Thank you very much for your lovely review, I am grateful you took the time to read and review my poem. Thank you! Peace be with you.

reply by krys123 on 10-Jan-2016

You are very welcome Gypsy.
Alex

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your river haiku. The color scheme is awesome. Good job on the syllable count. I see no changes. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016

Hello, Jan :) Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. I appreciate your excellent review and kind words.

Comment from pbroussard209

Excellent

I like these Japanese style poems, I love nature and I love that these poems incorporate the rawness and beauty of nature. Ex-streamly well written.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016

Hello :) I appreciate your excellent review and kind words.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

This is a beautiful haiku. Great imagery and nice satori line. Good haiku form in less than 17 syllables.

~~teresa~~

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016

Thank you, Teresa :)

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That is so well done, I love the way you have painted the picture in the colours of your theme, the blue river, the green of the trees, all coming together perfectly with the last beautiful line. Excellent, my friend. xsx Sandra

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016

Thank you, Sandra :) I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

Comment from teols2016

Excellent

Nice imagery. I am generally not a fan as this type of poem doesn't give you much to say, but you did say a lot. Well done.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2016

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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2016

Thank you, Teols :)