2016 GYPSY's HAIKU
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "haiku (black hole chokes)"a published book of haiku
14 total reviews
Comment from Linda Engel
Cool beans.
Leave it to you to make this sexy and cute. Even better...it really happened.
Great notes and thanks you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Cool beans.
Leave it to you to make this sexy and cute. Even better...it really happened.
Great notes and thanks you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2016
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Thank you, Girlfriend :) You are very kind and I'm in your debt for taking the time to read and review my poem, I am so happy you liked it. :)
(gypsy hug)
Comment from Unspoken94
Is there a possible Freudian slip in this piece?
You crafted a wonderful Haiku, although I thought
Haiku's were not supposed to be illustrated.
I am relieved to know that there was an actual black
hole did indeed choked on a star while deep throating.
Bill
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2016
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Is there a possible Freudian slip in this piece?
You crafted a wonderful Haiku, although I thought
Haiku's were not supposed to be illustrated.
I am relieved to know that there was an actual black
hole did indeed choked on a star while deep throating.
Bill
Comment Written 15-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2016
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Hello, Bill :) I was looking for pictures of stars and I found that article with the heading--black hole chokes on the star. It's crazy but I guess it really happened. I thought it was funny, that is why I wrote the haiku.
I love to write haiku and I am learning a lot about them. Most of the rules for haiku were created in our western world. Haiku is a Zen concept, it's spiritual and based in nature, but to Zen, everything is nature, so everything can be haiku. You are right, for haiku is better if you don't use a picture because the words are supposed to give a mental picture. I just decided to add artwork for fun. Creating visual effect for my poems is a lot of fun.
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review. :)
gypsy
Comment from judiverse
This poem is really creative. No wonder the Star Trek gang was so eager to explore outer space. I like your reference to Sexy Supernova. Great alliteration there, too, with Sexy Supernova. The third line is amusing. You certainly have your own approach to outer space. Maybe you should start writing scripts about it. Great artwork. judi
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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This poem is really creative. No wonder the Star Trek gang was so eager to explore outer space. I like your reference to Sexy Supernova. Great alliteration there, too, with Sexy Supernova. The third line is amusing. You certainly have your own approach to outer space. Maybe you should start writing scripts about it. Great artwork. judi
Comment Written 14-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Hello, Judi :) I never thought about writing scripts, I may try that. Hello, Barb LOL A lot of writers are relating to this poem, I included. :) I am so grateful to you for taking your valuable time to read and review my poem. You are very kind.
(gypsy hug)
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You're sincerely welcome. Virtual hug back. judi
Comment from krys123
Gypsy;
-I got a chuckle out of this one as it had a very highly celestial and sexual overtones.
-The first two lines are grammatically interconnected with an imagery that is exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive.
-The satori and gives your writing that spontaneity of effectiveness or an aha moment and summarizes the relativity of the conceptual theme.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Gypsy;
-I got a chuckle out of this one as it had a very highly celestial and sexual overtones.
-The first two lines are grammatically interconnected with an imagery that is exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive.
-The satori and gives your writing that spontaneity of effectiveness or an aha moment and summarizes the relativity of the conceptual theme.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 14-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Hello, Alex I am so grateful to you for taking your valuable time to read and review my poem. You are very kind.
(gypsy hug)
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Nature is everything, so of course you can write about it. And you have, lol, this is a really good one. I didn't know about that black hole, I am going to use your link and read about it. I love anything to do with outer-space. Well done, Gypsy, this was a very interesting read. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Nature is everything, so of course you can write about it. And you have, lol, this is a really good one. I didn't know about that black hole, I am going to use your link and read about it. I love anything to do with outer-space. Well done, Gypsy, this was a very interesting read. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 14-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Hello, Sandra :) I am so grateful to you for taking your valuable time to read and review my poem. You are very kind.
(gypsy hug)
Comment from a.w.brooks
A great piece and I don't know, But I do know I would choke on a star LOL. I would love to be able to go out and go through a black hole need something like that here. Well thanks for the read and Love the photos I love this kind of stuff
A.W.Brooks
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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A great piece and I don't know, But I do know I would choke on a star LOL. I would love to be able to go out and go through a black hole need something like that here. Well thanks for the read and Love the photos I love this kind of stuff
A.W.Brooks
Comment Written 14-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Hello, Tony, Thank you for reviewing for my, you are very kind. (gypsy hug)
Comment from MizKat
Hi Gypsy,
You sure are writing all kinds of different poems lately. They are interesting to read. When I read this one my mind was on something else. Not a black hole and a star. LOL
Lat
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Hi Gypsy,
You sure are writing all kinds of different poems lately. They are interesting to read. When I read this one my mind was on something else. Not a black hole and a star. LOL
Lat
Comment Written 14-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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LOL ...another person said that. Thank you for the review and kind words.
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I don't remember what I said so I don't know what the other person said. OH, I just saw "black hole chokes" so now I know. LOL
Comment from Dean Kuch
Super Novas are definitely mysterious, no doubt about it. Things that are mysterious are often seen as sexy. As far as sex in relation to the black hole in question here, well..., I won't even go there, heh-heh.
Your presention is awesome, as always, darlin'. Your haiku is well within the syllabic requirements of the form.
Good stuff, Gypsy.
Dean~~>
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Super Novas are definitely mysterious, no doubt about it. Things that are mysterious are often seen as sexy. As far as sex in relation to the black hole in question here, well..., I won't even go there, heh-heh.
Your presention is awesome, as always, darlin'. Your haiku is well within the syllabic requirements of the form.
Good stuff, Gypsy.
Dean~~>
Comment Written 14-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Hello, Handsome, LOL thank you for not going there..... LOL You know, the funny thing is that I read an article about a black hole IN SPACE that choked on a star. They explained how it happened but they got me on.... black hole choke on a star. LOL I enjoy adding a little humor here and there. And you know how much fun I have creating presentations. Since I joined FS, you have been a profound influence and inspiration to master the craft of artistic presentations. It is a pleasure to read your words, "your presentation is awesome, as always, darlin'." 'darlin' ....my all time favorite.
Thank you for the awesome review :)
<~~Gypsy
Comment from chcbeck
Great play on words accompanied by great imagery, I say accompanied as the words do speak for themselves. A impactful poem.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Great play on words accompanied by great imagery, I say accompanied as the words do speak for themselves. A impactful poem.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Hello, chcbeck, thank you for your thoughtful review and kind words. They're much appreciated :)
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Gypsy Blue Rose, this is a very good haiku you have written. It is provocative and descriptive at the same time with the limited syllables allowed. I think the two pictures you have attached to this piece is fantastic, brilliant colours..A most enjoyable read indeed.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Gypsy Blue Rose, this is a very good haiku you have written. It is provocative and descriptive at the same time with the limited syllables allowed. I think the two pictures you have attached to this piece is fantastic, brilliant colours..A most enjoyable read indeed.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2016
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Hello, DD, thank you for your thoughtful review and kind words. They're much appreciated :)