Comment from BruceMiller

Excellent

I am a fan of the 5-7-5, and I do like yours. It has me questioning the final word. Is this a dual entente? The driver's crush on someone/something or the driver crushes the garbage. I don't think I'm making an sense--it just trash talk. lol Cheers.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016

The last line is a play on words -- just as the last line of your review. Thanks, Bruce.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

Well homebody's got to do it right? I hear that trash truck drivers get paid pretty good and at times finds a valuable or two on the rout.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016

OMG. I'd hate to be so desperate as to poke around in garbage. If they are, they may be looking for prescription drugs--good money for them on the side.

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

Oh, that is so very cute, my friend. A well written 5-7-5 with the perfect picture to accompany it. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016

Thanks, Debbie.

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Yeah, and it's his truck's latest "CRUSH" too!
Ever waited around and watched to see what the back of one a' those garbage trucks does to anything thrown in the back of it? it ain't pretty, LOL.

Good stuff, Spit...
~Dean ;)

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016

What a horrible way to die! Smelly too.

reply by Dean Kuch on 13-Mar-2016

Yes...Very!, LOL. ;)

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

I love how you can take something so inane as garbage and turn it into a delightful, humorous, and fun 5-7-5. This is a superb entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best. Thanks so much for the laugh.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016

You're welcome. It's more of a senryu than a 5-7-5. But it's all I could up with.

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Ha ha ha! Great pun on CRUSH, dear Shari. This made me chuckle aloud. Goo job--with the pretty garbage bag description adding subtle satirical oomph too. Fine alliteration of both G and P and good consonance of S as well.Great presentation.

Smiling,
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 Comment Written 12-Mar-2016

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2016

Thanks for getting it. Not everyone did. Appreciate your noting the poetic devices.

reply by rama devi on 13-Mar-2016

It's such a good pun. Amazing some did not get it.