Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Guardian"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
4 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Somehow this gives the reader the hint of a twist coming: "But, for Pete's sake, let them go home with someone else." More insight about the characters. The reader will be right with your for the backstory: "So, let's slow down a mite, and tell you how I became Cody's guardian, at a much more relaxed pace." Good use of allusions & onomatopoeia. The reader leans closer. : "I am asking you to do the right thing for you, as well as for Cody Schroder," Now the reader is in it for the long haul.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Somehow this gives the reader the hint of a twist coming: "But, for Pete's sake, let them go home with someone else." More insight about the characters. The reader will be right with your for the backstory: "So, let's slow down a mite, and tell you how I became Cody's guardian, at a much more relaxed pace." Good use of allusions & onomatopoeia. The reader leans closer. : "I am asking you to do the right thing for you, as well as for Cody Schroder," Now the reader is in it for the long haul.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
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Thanks.
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***Smile ***
Comment from Ricky1024
discover Guardian Brentwood Armory cell phone read my family enjoyed it seemed an image right as I was reviewing it was almost as if I was living it very interesting I believe in guardian angels I believe that the very first one Michael was also named Jesus to Christ and ask Jesus to Christ he knew when he passed away and before what he was in for to die on the sins of the rosy cross for Humanity activity you are thanks for this Ricky 1024 and well and wel
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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discover Guardian Brentwood Armory cell phone read my family enjoyed it seemed an image right as I was reviewing it was almost as if I was living it very interesting I believe in guardian angels I believe that the very first one Michael was also named Jesus to Christ and ask Jesus to Christ he knew when he passed away and before what he was in for to die on the sins of the rosy cross for Humanity activity you are thanks for this Ricky 1024 and well and wel
Comment Written 29-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Nicely written and an interesting piece. Not sure where you are going with this but I'll try to keep up for the ride.
If it get confused, I'll ask. Ihave a hard time remembering from one chapter to the next when so far between.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Nicely written and an interesting piece. Not sure where you are going with this but I'll try to keep up for the ride.
If it get confused, I'll ask. Ihave a hard time remembering from one chapter to the next when so far between.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this part of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from misscookie
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
And there was not a dull moment in it
I'm glad Beth made up your mind and things are working out just fine.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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You captured my attention from the first line to the last
And there was not a dull moment in it
I'm glad Beth made up your mind and things are working out just fine.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 23-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this miss cookie. Keep those reviews coming!
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I will try my best to keep my poems coming.
Cookike
