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Viewing comments for Chapter 62 "An Buachaill Agus Cailin Sin"possible selections for inclusion in book project
21 total reviews
Comment from boxergirl
Great job, Mikey, with your story poem...I love the freedom poetry gives us writers, to be able to weave together our words in different ways...and you do it so well!
I love when a writer opens up and gives a peek into his/her soul...we are who we are and should be proud.
Presentation is also engaging .:-)
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Great job, Mikey, with your story poem...I love the freedom poetry gives us writers, to be able to weave together our words in different ways...and you do it so well!
I love when a writer opens up and gives a peek into his/her soul...we are who we are and should be proud.
Presentation is also engaging .:-)
Comment Written 08-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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I so agree with you. There's nothing I love more than just writing exactly what I want the way I want to do it. This is such a write. I'm so pleased you like it. Even more so, of course. Yes, this is really straight from the heart. Thanks so very much. I really appreciate it. mikey
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a lovely tale of a relationship written in whatever you want to call it--a lovely form. The story is beautiful as two lost souls come together to find happiness which is what we all truly deserve. Wonderful wording and progression through the story. A most enjoyable poem, my friend. Potlatch later. Until then~Debbie
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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This is a lovely tale of a relationship written in whatever you want to call it--a lovely form. The story is beautiful as two lost souls come together to find happiness which is what we all truly deserve. Wonderful wording and progression through the story. A most enjoyable poem, my friend. Potlatch later. Until then~Debbie
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Thanks so much, Debbie. I'm delighted you enjoyed this. Truly from my heart, so your approval means the world. :))
Yep, Potlatch. WHOO HOOOO! Scary!!!! Wouldn't miss it. mikey
Comment from ciliverde
This is beautiful, Mikey. I think you must have a very romantic soul - well, you have the soul of an Irishman! My grandmother would have liked you - Marie Meenehan, from Connemara.
The whole poem is a complex, fascinating journey with this boy and girl, but I'd have to name this stanza as my favorite (and the one after as my second favorite)
"In the hidden clover-covered meadow of forever,
a boy of sullen disposition happened on a girl.
She pierced him keenly with the greenest eyes
that saw so deep inside
through every puzzle and facade--
and poorly manufactured wall she saw it all
and looked way in ...
past the complex maze into the hiding place,
the shiv'ring trembling room,
the secret room he thought so safe."
Don't we all have that complex maze, hiding well that shivering room? The secret room, and some people look at us and see right into it...
Those people are precious! If you happen upon one, do not let them go!!
Wonderful :)
Carol
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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This is beautiful, Mikey. I think you must have a very romantic soul - well, you have the soul of an Irishman! My grandmother would have liked you - Marie Meenehan, from Connemara.
The whole poem is a complex, fascinating journey with this boy and girl, but I'd have to name this stanza as my favorite (and the one after as my second favorite)
"In the hidden clover-covered meadow of forever,
a boy of sullen disposition happened on a girl.
She pierced him keenly with the greenest eyes
that saw so deep inside
through every puzzle and facade--
and poorly manufactured wall she saw it all
and looked way in ...
past the complex maze into the hiding place,
the shiv'ring trembling room,
the secret room he thought so safe."
Don't we all have that complex maze, hiding well that shivering room? The secret room, and some people look at us and see right into it...
Those people are precious! If you happen upon one, do not let them go!!
Wonderful :)
Carol
Comment Written 07-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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What beautiful words to hear. I'm so pleased you enjoyed and truly honored you think grandma Meenehan would like me. Thank you.
Wow. When I read you say that the people who see right into the maze are precious and to never let them go, I realize that you are speaking the absolute truth. I will totally take that to heart. Wonderful advice. Thanks for the great review. mikey
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, it's amazing how you can just hear the words forming in your head...as you put them to post...one of the reasons I love reading you...your poet are real...all of these words to meet that girl...and you make it sound...well...real...sigh...I mean like it really is...ya know???...loved reading this sweet boy...very well written...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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HI Michael, it's amazing how you can just hear the words forming in your head...as you put them to post...one of the reasons I love reading you...your poet are real...all of these words to meet that girl...and you make it sound...well...real...sigh...I mean like it really is...ya know???...loved reading this sweet boy...very well written...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 06-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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How totally weird that the title reads "Boy And Girl That". I wonder why? That isn't the title. Hmm. I think Google is translating it or something. Anyway, I'm thrilled you liked this so much and it sounds real to you. It is real, well, kind of real to me and maybe to someone else perhaps, maybe. LOL Thanks so much, Queen of Irish Mysterious Sweetness and Possible LOVE. :)) mikey xxoo
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OMG LMAO...you really are very smart ya know...LOL...Heart Of Gold you...thank you for a wonderful reply...and you are sooooo welcome...big smile back at ya... love Linda xxoo
Comment from seaglass
I'm Irish too and I wouldn't want anyone to think me a bigot but secretly I know we are superior. (:
I love your tale of bonding with the right person and lasting love following. Too bad a few of us (actually a lot of us) had to sample unworkable connections before finding An Buachaill Agus Cailin Sin--Gaelic
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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I'm Irish too and I wouldn't want anyone to think me a bigot but secretly I know we are superior. (:
I love your tale of bonding with the right person and lasting love following. Too bad a few of us (actually a lot of us) had to sample unworkable connections before finding An Buachaill Agus Cailin Sin--Gaelic
Comment Written 06-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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I was just bein' a wee bit diplomatic, lassie. :))
So pleased you liked this. Yes, I suppose it was a tough search, but it makes the finding all the sweeter, yes?
Thanks so much, mikey
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One has to endure the worse to appreciate the best.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Creative writing is whateverinthehellwechooseittobe. So that looks like a run-on word, resembling what many may call the blunder of a run on sentence, but to me, it says and does exactly what the hell ever that I want it to. So it to, is creative writing, and no one else has to like, dislike, or understand. We are to write for ourselves, very contrary to what the stiff shirts would have us believe. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Creative writing is whateverinthehellwechooseittobe. So that looks like a run-on word, resembling what many may call the blunder of a run on sentence, but to me, it says and does exactly what the hell ever that I want it to. So it to, is creative writing, and no one else has to like, dislike, or understand. We are to write for ourselves, very contrary to what the stiff shirts would have us believe. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Love that word. Yep, doing what ever the hell we want is something we both agree on. This is certainly one where I did that. LOL Glad you liked this. I do too. Thanks a million. mikey
Comment from Gloria ....
Ah so beautiful is the title. Gaelic is it? Is your new name Micahel also Gaelic? It's one language I've always had some difficulty with.
You have told a beautiful story about a boy and girl. You've worked in their backstories with an adept and accomplished pen. We know why the Irish fates would draw these two together and especially in that secret room.
It's a soul-mate finding poem of wondrous proportions.
I really enjoy your presentation techniques and different meters. This is a wonderfully innovate and romantic poem, Mav. I truly hope you win the contest.
My only regret is that I cannot six it. :((
But happy days to you,
Ange. :
Gloria
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Ah so beautiful is the title. Gaelic is it? Is your new name Micahel also Gaelic? It's one language I've always had some difficulty with.
You have told a beautiful story about a boy and girl. You've worked in their backstories with an adept and accomplished pen. We know why the Irish fates would draw these two together and especially in that secret room.
It's a soul-mate finding poem of wondrous proportions.
I really enjoy your presentation techniques and different meters. This is a wonderfully innovate and romantic poem, Mav. I truly hope you win the contest.
My only regret is that I cannot six it. :((
But happy days to you,
Ange. :
Gloria
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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I am so very pleased you enjoyed this, Angel. I actually misspelled my own name. What can I say? LOL
You fully understand everything I'm trying to impart and I'm delighted you understand. This is for a most amazing and worthy Irish girl indeed. You're praise and approval trumps a six any day. As far as the contest, I've already won.
Thanks so much.
Maverick
Comment from Taffspride
A beautiful poem full of Celtic lore. and a very good entry for the story in a poem contest. I feel sure this can be related distantly to one of the Celtic legends, or perhaps could become one.
I so enjoyed reading it Mikey. Your story tells of love that blossoms.
There was only one spot where I stumbled.
as though she need not make a sound.
(it was as though her presence there sufficed)
you used the words 'as though' twice, which slowed me down as I read it aloud.
I am in awe of your talent for the Gaelic. My grandparents spoke it fluently, my mother could speak a little, and understood more. As for me... it is Welsh.
There could be no doubt in any-one's mind but I think these lines are the most telling.
I won't waste my precious time by speaking obv'ous things.
You should know it is quite clear
where I choose to abide.
And your closing lines perfect.
Such souls are this boy and that girl.
You see, they are Irish.
Erin Go Bragh
I will just say Cymru Am Byth, it means the same.
and after all we are all Celts.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
iechyd da
Ann
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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A beautiful poem full of Celtic lore. and a very good entry for the story in a poem contest. I feel sure this can be related distantly to one of the Celtic legends, or perhaps could become one.
I so enjoyed reading it Mikey. Your story tells of love that blossoms.
There was only one spot where I stumbled.
as though she need not make a sound.
(it was as though her presence there sufficed)
you used the words 'as though' twice, which slowed me down as I read it aloud.
I am in awe of your talent for the Gaelic. My grandparents spoke it fluently, my mother could speak a little, and understood more. As for me... it is Welsh.
There could be no doubt in any-one's mind but I think these lines are the most telling.
I won't waste my precious time by speaking obv'ous things.
You should know it is quite clear
where I choose to abide.
And your closing lines perfect.
Such souls are this boy and that girl.
You see, they are Irish.
Erin Go Bragh
I will just say Cymru Am Byth, it means the same.
and after all we are all Celts.
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
iechyd da
Ann
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Oh, thanks for pointing out that little spot. I've been going back here and there to make little improvements, so I'll look at that for sure. I'm so thrilled you enjoyed this and you are totally on the same page with me. I love the parts you singled out. Indeed we are all Celts. What a wonderful review. I'm so pleased. Thank you, mikey
Comment from Rubylou
A beautiful love story-two lonely souls find each other then finding they are meant for each other. Age old tale yet and so relatable. Your creative style adds to the whimsy ( I hope that's the right word) and engaging feel of the piece.
"In my soul I feel this is our first grand lover's dance." ( should it be lovers' ) as there are two of them? (I may be reading the line incorrectly. I do that sometimes. LOL) I absolutely love this line. It is romantic and magical.
Great author's notes; and thank-you for the Gaelic lesson.
Rubylou
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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A beautiful love story-two lonely souls find each other then finding they are meant for each other. Age old tale yet and so relatable. Your creative style adds to the whimsy ( I hope that's the right word) and engaging feel of the piece.
"In my soul I feel this is our first grand lover's dance." ( should it be lovers' ) as there are two of them? (I may be reading the line incorrectly. I do that sometimes. LOL) I absolutely love this line. It is romantic and magical.
Great author's notes; and thank-you for the Gaelic lesson.
Rubylou
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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I think you're right, lovers'. Whimsy sounds good to me. I'm so pleased you singled out that line. When it occurred to me I was so happy because it was EXACTLY what I wanted to say. Wow. I'm so happy you liked this, this piece means a lot to me. Thanks so much. mikey
Comment from robyn corum
Mikey,
I adored this. The thing was to picture it read as a production of sorts, on stage or on radio. And the narrator has one of those beautiful melodic voices. And then! The piece must be read quite rapidly, with barely a gasp (not gasp, though) for air. Well, a very steady pace. It is so much fun! I don't think the last part is needed at all, myself -- the gold. I think the love story tells it all. No wait. I do like to think this is eternal. Nevermind. Go ahead. *smile*
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Mikey,
I adored this. The thing was to picture it read as a production of sorts, on stage or on radio. And the narrator has one of those beautiful melodic voices. And then! The piece must be read quite rapidly, with barely a gasp (not gasp, though) for air. Well, a very steady pace. It is so much fun! I don't think the last part is needed at all, myself -- the gold. I think the love story tells it all. No wait. I do like to think this is eternal. Nevermind. Go ahead. *smile*
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 06-May-2016
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Aww. Thanks, Robyn. I'm truly pleased you liked this. It's so very much my natural style and I do mean all of this rather sincerely and stuff.:)) You're exactly right about how to read this. YES!!!! I was thinking of doing a reading. Take a deep breath and GO! I'm pretty sure I could do it in one breath. I might pass out though. LOL Gotta have the gold, that's the part that chokes ME up a bit. Thanks so much. You can read my mind anyway, so of course you know everything about this. mikey
