Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Texas Rendezvous"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
3 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Yes you still have my interest and I found it not only intriguing but a little romance put in to take care of that side of us.lol
Very nicely done, no problems noted . It kept my attention and the conversation kept it interesting.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Yes you still have my interest and I found it not only intriguing but a little romance put in to take care of that side of us.lol
Very nicely done, no problems noted . It kept my attention and the conversation kept it interesting.
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Life offers many angles. Am trying to capture some of them in this book so it is not just one thing only. Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Comment from Jonadab Ezerie
You showed the reader instead of telling.You are a talented author in my opinion and I think you shouldn't ever stop writing and you should write or bring us your work more often.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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You showed the reader instead of telling.You are a talented author in my opinion and I think you shouldn't ever stop writing and you should write or bring us your work more often.
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come.
Comment from Stephanie Kastner
I like the storyline. It kept my attention. I could imagine Cody up there close to the stage enjoying the action. And I enjoyed the interaction between Beth and the sheriff. I liked how they were talking business, and at the same time, falling into the throws of passion.
Just a few grammatical notes:
Although he did not know any of the famous Performers (don't think performers needs to be capitalized) who's (this should be whose-who's means 'who is')
Intently listened (listening) to the music, he politely applauded...
Sheriff Daniels (Daniel's) distinguished Peace Officer career proved otherwise. (This should by possessive.)
He knew Guttierrez was a blatant lier, (liar)--spelling error.
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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I like the storyline. It kept my attention. I could imagine Cody up there close to the stage enjoying the action. And I enjoyed the interaction between Beth and the sheriff. I liked how they were talking business, and at the same time, falling into the throws of passion.
Just a few grammatical notes:
Although he did not know any of the famous Performers (don't think performers needs to be capitalized) who's (this should be whose-who's means 'who is')
Intently listened (listening) to the music, he politely applauded...
Sheriff Daniels (Daniel's) distinguished Peace Officer career proved otherwise. (This should by possessive.)
He knew Guttierrez was a blatant lier, (liar)--spelling error.
Comment Written 05-May-2016
reply by the author on 07-May-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story, and appreciate the catches. Stay tuned. Much more to come.
