Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Chomo"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
9 total reviews
Comment from Sankey
Going backwards in your story. Still sorry I never caught it from the start. Good storytelling. Some suggestions. had given her [to] (for) the Sheriff.
Cody had no concept (of just)how this situation would play out.
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Going backwards in your story. Still sorry I never caught it from the start. Good storytelling. Some suggestions. had given her [to] (for) the Sheriff.
Cody had no concept (of just)how this situation would play out.
Comment Written 26-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Glad you are enjoying this story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from DonandVicki
I did enjoy reading this instalment of your story, you know how to keep the writing fresh and keep the reader wanting to come back for more. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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I did enjoy reading this instalment of your story, you know how to keep the writing fresh and keep the reader wanting to come back for more. Well done.
Comment Written 24-May-2016
reply by the author on 29-May-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Stay tuned. Much more to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
No Judge in his right mind would hand
over a child to a child molester.I don't
think Cody or Beth and the sheriff have
anything to worry about. Brock seems to
know how to handle problem boys. LOL
Good job Brett. Nancy
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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No Judge in his right mind would hand
over a child to a child molester.I don't
think Cody or Beth and the sheriff have
anything to worry about. Brock seems to
know how to handle problem boys. LOL
Good job Brett. Nancy
Comment Written 22-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Glad you are enjoying this story. Stay tuned much more to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Bret,
This chapter of your book has really interested me. I'm so glad that you are sharing it with those who are on FanStory. I'm sure that everyone else who is reading it is liking it too. I look forward to the next chapter.
MizKat
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Hi Bret,
This chapter of your book has really interested me. I'm so glad that you are sharing it with those who are on FanStory. I'm sure that everyone else who is reading it is liking it too. I look forward to the next chapter.
MizKat
Comment Written 22-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Glad you are enjoying this story. Much more to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
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Yes, I'm enjoying your story and look forward to reading more. Kat
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OH, no is the deputy going to win and where did he come up with this character? Is he really a relative? and what does the deputy have up his sleeve?
Wow you have taken this to a whole new level
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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OH, no is the deputy going to win and where did he come up with this character? Is he really a relative? and what does the deputy have up his sleeve?
Wow you have taken this to a whole new level
Comment Written 22-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Glad you are enjoying this story. Stay tuned. Much more to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from aryr
It is easy to sense frustration and maybe anger in the beginning note by Cody.
An interesting twist having Cody and Matt change into the jailhouse jumpers- an obvious good way to teach lessons.
I am wondering how Rickie could even consider getting Cody with his background.
Good writing, great descriptions, just the right amount of intrigue to entice the reader to keep reading. Great picture of childhood innocence. Thank you.
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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It is easy to sense frustration and maybe anger in the beginning note by Cody.
An interesting twist having Cody and Matt change into the jailhouse jumpers- an obvious good way to teach lessons.
I am wondering how Rickie could even consider getting Cody with his background.
Good writing, great descriptions, just the right amount of intrigue to entice the reader to keep reading. Great picture of childhood innocence. Thank you.
Comment Written 22-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Glad you are enjoying this story. Much more to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
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I eagerly anticipate the next chapter.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett, I've been away from the story for a bit. We are in the midst of our cherry picking so very busy with that. Well it appears that Cody is heading towards more trouble, and I just wonder whether it is a family relation at all. Hopefully the sheriff and Beth can put a stop to that. Well written chapter and I'm looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Hi Brett, I've been away from the story for a bit. We are in the midst of our cherry picking so very busy with that. Well it appears that Cody is heading towards more trouble, and I just wonder whether it is a family relation at all. Hopefully the sheriff and Beth can put a stop to that. Well written chapter and I'm looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 22-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Glad you are enjoying this story. Stay tuned. Much more to come. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from LisaD123
This is an entertaining and well-structured chapter that keeps the reader hooked to find out what is going on. The characters are carefully crafted and the dialogue enables the reader to gain insight to what the characters think and feel. The dialogue is also authentic and realistic. The setting is carefully created without detracting the reader's attention from the plot. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-May-2016
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This is an entertaining and well-structured chapter that keeps the reader hooked to find out what is going on. The characters are carefully crafted and the dialogue enables the reader to gain insight to what the characters think and feel. The dialogue is also authentic and realistic. The setting is carefully created without detracting the reader's attention from the plot. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-May-2016
reply by the author on 22-May-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this chapter. Your comments, insights, and support are appreciated. Stay tuned. Much more to come.
Comment from misscookie
You are filled with surprises my friend.
Just when I think things are about to get little better for the boy.... Up jumps the rabbit with more bad news.
Until next time.
Cookie
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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You are filled with surprises my friend.
Just when I think things are about to get little better for the boy.... Up jumps the rabbit with more bad news.
Until next time.
Cookie
Comment Written 22-May-2016
reply by the author on 23-May-2016
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Glad you are enjoying this story, misscookie. Your comments and support appreciated. That ole rabbit may jump up again before it is all over.
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That's what a great writer does. keep the reader guessing what going to happen next....LOL
Cookie
