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2016 GYPSY's HAIKU

Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Haiku (cold evening)"
a published book of haiku

21 total reviews 
Comment from Ulla
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Hola Gitana, como estas? Wow I liked this haiku a lot and with a fantastic satori line.As you know I have been to Japan many times and I am so taken with their culture. I also found this haiku quite funny. Muy bien escrito. Un abrazo y un besito de to amiga, Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 27-May-2016


reply by the author on 27-May-2016
    Hola, bonita,

    Yes, I know you know what haiku really is and it's a joy to have you read my haiku.

    You can appreciate haiku is not just a short poem, it's an art that requires deep thought and creativity. The creativity is very important to me. I'm an artist.

    My haiku are not always good, by far, but when I get it, they are great fun. I'm glad you got the meaning.

    The simplicity and delicate beauty of Japanese culture fascinates me.

    Gracias, Ulla. *tu Amiga gitana, MariVal*
Comment from Gloria ....
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Wonderful haiku, Gypsy. All the requisite parts of a haiku, least as much as I know is all there, and yes indeed cold evening is definitely a winter kigo.

You do them up really classy and they are most enjoyable,

Gloria

 Comment Written 27-May-2016


reply by the author on 27-May-2016
    Thank you for the kind and smart review. Not many know what haiku is about in fs.

    Thank you very much.

    *gypsy hugs*
Comment from Mark Valentine
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Fantastic satori. It completely changes the POV of the poem (at least that's my read) - I can just see the wife thinking to herself - "Thank God he's gone for the night, now I get a break". You are the master of the haiku, my friend.

 Comment Written 26-May-2016


reply by the author on 26-May-2016
    Thank you, Mike :) *red face* I love haiku poetry. It's a pleasure to find the right words and then the matching artwork.

    I am glad you got the meaning I intended. Everybody else feels sorry for the wife or go into a long story about relationship....blah, blah, blah. It's just a freaking poem. LoL But you got it, wow hoo, good for you, my haiku and satori sabi friend. :)

    *gypsy hugs*
Comment from Douglas Paul
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I like this one, Gypsy. I just wrote my first Haiku for the contest so I am beginning to appreciate how hard these are to do well. Have a great evening, my friend

 Comment Written 26-May-2016


reply by the author on 26-May-2016
    Thank you very much my friend. I am grateful for you and your review. *gypsy hugs*
Comment from krys123
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Hello Gypsy;
- there could be many of multiple intentions and different concepts of this writing. When a person leaves a light on their expecting company but even though the wife has a day off for a night off than she leisurely is waiting for something. I feeling this as sexual overtones but I could be probably wrong.
-the first two lines adeptly grammatically interconnected and have an imagery that is very distinctly clear and definitively expressive and vividly descriptive.
- third line or satori gives the writing that our moment are the spontaneous expression of the concept and summarizes the relativity of that concept very well.
-thank you for sharing and posting and may the Lord be with you always.
Alex

 Comment Written 26-May-2016


reply by the author on 26-May-2016
    Thank you very much my friend. I am grateful for you and your review. *gypsy hugs*
reply by krys123 on 26-May-2016
    You are welcome dear friend.
    Alex
Comment from ciliverde
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Beautiful presentation and poem, Gypsy. This one just resonates with the feel of the cold night, and that light shining in the Geisha's room. Her warmth to make up for the cold outside, and the wife's time to herself (finally!)

Well done!
Carol

 Comment Written 26-May-2016


reply by the author on 26-May-2016
    Thank you very much my friend. I am grateful for you and your review. *gypsy hugs*
Comment from BeasPeas
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A beautiful presentation for this flowing haiku. Some cultures allow a man to enjoy more than one woman. We American women are not of that bent. Marilyn

 Comment Written 26-May-2016


reply by the author on 26-May-2016
    You got my same kind of thinking. I am so grateful I live in the USA. Women are abused all over the world.
    This was more of a fun and satire on human relations and the cold night. Basho, the best haikkuist in history, said that the relationship between nature and humans is very important in haiku, of the opinion that nature is only about trees.

    I hope you are feeling better. Thank you very much, my friend. I am grateful for you and your review. *gypsy hugs*
reply by BeasPeas on 29-May-2016
    We are indeed fortunate to live in the States. That's why everybody wants to come here. Women in some countries are treated horribly and there is nothing they can do about it.
Comment from robyn corum
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I like the imagery you're painting here, Gypsy. The wife gets the night off while the hubby visits the geisha girl. But I noticed you said the kigo was 'winter' while that word wasn't actually used. Did you make a revision?

 Comment Written 26-May-2016


reply by the author on 26-May-2016
    No, I meant cold nights=winter.

    I'm learning haiku from Japan sources and this is a well known fact there.

    The book, the haiku seasons, by William higginson, it's the latest book I'm reading. Basho, the best haikuist master in history said the same thing. You don't have to spell out the name of the season, just a reference to something from it-- cold nights is winter. There are tons of sites and Japanese education resources online. Just type haiku seasons or kigo in your search engine.

    Thank you for the lovely review sweetie pie.
    *gypsy hugs*
reply by robyn corum on 26-May-2016
    gotcha!
Comment from MizKat
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Hi Gypsy,

Again you've written another Haiku poem. You sure are great at writing them too.

I enjoyed reading it and am waiting to read more of your work. Thanks for sharing.

Kat

 Comment Written 26-May-2016


reply by the author on 26-May-2016
    Thank you for the review and kind words.
    *gypsy hugs*
reply by MizKat on 26-May-2016
    You're very welcome. Kat
Comment from barkingdog
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Mmm. A little action on the side, I see.
Nice internal rhyme with light and night.
This is one to think about.
In a way the Geisha might be appreciated if the husband is insatiable. The wife would need a night or several off. haha


 Comment Written 26-May-2016


reply by the author on 26-May-2016
    Yes, you're right. Thank you for the review and kind words. *gypsy hugs*