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2016 GYPSY's HAIKU

Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "haiku ( amber light over )"
a published book of haiku

9 total reviews 
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
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Very beautiful entry into the "Write a Haiku" contest. Excellent accompanying artwork. Meets all requirements according to the guidelines above. Great satori. Loved this read very much. Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 12-Jun-2016
    Thank you very much for the lovely and positive and helpful feedback and excellent review. I appreciate it. :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A well-written haiku. The poppies blooms in your Sumner time. It us a wondrrful scene to look at when the amber light cover them in eary morning or at sunset.

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
    Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from JennC
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Great job with this haiku. Your syllable count is spot on, and the artwork you chose to accompany your poem is perfect for your words. Very well done. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
    Thank you, Jenn
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Oh, this is six worthy haiku if ever I've read it, Anonymous Poet. My only regret for having read this beautifully rendered, perfectly constructed haiku is that I have none left to award you for your outstanding entry.
That's okay, however, because if I were a betting man (and I'm not), I'd say you have the winner here.
This is truly stunning, and it is how haiku should be done, but often isn't.
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 Comment Written 10-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
    Wow! What an awesome review. Thank you very much, Dean. I don't need six stars, knowing that you like is good enough for me. :)
reply by Dean Kuch on 10-Jun-2016
    The pleasure was all mine. It's a beautifully written haiku.
    ~Dean
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
    thank you, Dean, it's always good to hear from you
Comment from Eternal Muse
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I have to give it a six. This is fantastic. Your stunning picture draws a reader in, but the poem stands on its own.

Phenomenal artistic presentation and the picture of red poppies.

Two interconnected lines of imagery and a striking satori in line 3.

This may be the winner. Loved it.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
    Wow! What an awesome review. I am grateful that you took the time to read and review my haiku.I appreciate the lovely six stars as well. Thank you, yeltel :)
Comment from c_lucas
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This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2016
    I am grateful that you took the time to read and review my haiku.
Comment from Sambangi
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This is a nice nature poem using haiku format. I liked the picture as well. My only suggestion is, I have not seen depicting two different scenes in the fragment of a sentence in many haiku poems I read before. As I know, a single moment in the present tense is to be captured. Here you have captured two things light falling and cricket singing. Third line is fine, but I sincerely think there is some scope for improvement here as well.
Wish you all the best

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
    Thank you.
Comment from RodG
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Perfect poem/picture combo. Your imagery captures the details and the mood of this scene very well. The speaker seems "captivated" both literally (the fenced in yard) and figuratively.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016
    Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from Selina Stambi
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The first line brings a spectacular picture to my mind's eye. Amber light ... exquisite!

Best wishes for the contest.

Sonali


fenced poppies field .. how about ... fenced poppy field?

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2016


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2016


    Thank you for the review and kind words.