To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 31 "Exotic "Poems by Michael
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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Michael, thank you for pointing me in this direction so I could read this one. It was a lovely mosaic of emotional and imagery. Some great lines here, loved the "oxygen optional", and so many more. You have a way of writing that is unique to you, even as it captures the reader I am wondering about the steps in the dance, the breathless coils of closeness. You did a great job my friend. You have a certain choppiness that reminds me of the dance steps themselves, you weaved that well into every line. I haven't danced a tango in a while, this makes me want to put on my dancing shoes and do one. It is a dance of heart and soul, that I often lose myself in, the exertion often leaves you breathless in many ways. You capture that perfectly.
Thank you for the honour.
hugs
m
xo
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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Dear Michael, thank you for pointing me in this direction so I could read this one. It was a lovely mosaic of emotional and imagery. Some great lines here, loved the "oxygen optional", and so many more. You have a way of writing that is unique to you, even as it captures the reader I am wondering about the steps in the dance, the breathless coils of closeness. You did a great job my friend. You have a certain choppiness that reminds me of the dance steps themselves, you weaved that well into every line. I haven't danced a tango in a while, this makes me want to put on my dancing shoes and do one. It is a dance of heart and soul, that I often lose myself in, the exertion often leaves you breathless in many ways. You capture that perfectly.
Thank you for the honour.
hugs
m
xo
Comment Written 14-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2016
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yea...under Mojo's rise...wasn't bad either huh...? -headwag-....-smile-...ahhh I remembered our first and wondered if could top stage left...so I figured I'd better burn it down...-headwag-....I certainly hope youre impressed this could cost me a few years. haha
yea...the song is perfect....I'm real happy with the way this turned out....you and me breathless... I've made a wish Mo....you should know....-smile-...no...thank you. always love...Michael
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LOL. you never give up:)
Haven't worn my dancin shoes for a while now...
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ah its not a problem Dear...dust have never touched them...I polish them with kisses every night....so... may I see your foot Cinderella.....-smile-
Comment from Ginger Banks
This has interesting associations in many differing aspects, i like the way you've written itthat way. The flow is somewhat choppy, but it works and that's what counts. Thank you for sharing the wonderful poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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This has interesting associations in many differing aspects, i like the way you've written itthat way. The flow is somewhat choppy, but it works and that's what counts. Thank you for sharing the wonderful poem.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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ah huh...well if we didn't know "choppy" wed never feel soothing. so its for the better...this ocean of emotion we sojourn....-smile- thanks Ginger. love to you...michael
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You're welcome, and you're right about the choppy. :o)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello :)
Your poem left me breathless... OMG It's not just the well-chosen words, it is the stunning presentation as well.
I love the free verse style in which you tell your story. Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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Hello :)
Your poem left me breathless... OMG It's not just the well-chosen words, it is the stunning presentation as well.
I love the free verse style in which you tell your story. Well done!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2016
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Hello...-smile-
-fanme- man...wooo...handwave-....ahaha....thank you Beautiful....I feel a lot better....-smile-....love to you Michael
Comment from Galactia
This is an exceptional write absolutely brilliant my favourite stanza is stanza 4, with the hot sparticus looking hot stud. Favourite line....stunning under mojo's rise. It was spicy hot and funny, can't wipe the smile off my face. Enjoyed it immensely
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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This is an exceptional write absolutely brilliant my favourite stanza is stanza 4, with the hot sparticus looking hot stud. Favourite line....stunning under mojo's rise. It was spicy hot and funny, can't wipe the smile off my face. Enjoyed it immensely
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 26-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Hi Tia...-smile-
ahha....well me either ...now. thank you Sweetheart. love to you Michael
Comment from Sis Cat
I enjoyed this dance of words and depth of passion. You use a sensual language of seduction to describe this dangerous liaison. I can feel the movement of the lovers
"basic instincts cathedral
worships may I cherish...
this tangos inflamed crescendo."
You use the tango as a metaphor for sex: "confident gladiator count on coming soon." This is one of the clearest and most passionate, well-crafted poems I have read of yours. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016
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I enjoyed this dance of words and depth of passion. You use a sensual language of seduction to describe this dangerous liaison. I can feel the movement of the lovers
"basic instincts cathedral
worships may I cherish...
this tangos inflamed crescendo."
You use the tango as a metaphor for sex: "confident gladiator count on coming soon." This is one of the clearest and most passionate, well-crafted poems I have read of yours. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016
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that is correct....-smile-
appreciate you saying so Sir....big love to you man. Michael
Comment from Lisa Deverick
breathless- oxygen optional once again.... This is exquisite! I love the free verse style in which you tell your story. Awesome wordage used throughout- well done!
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016
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breathless- oxygen optional once again.... This is exquisite! I love the free verse style in which you tell your story. Awesome wordage used throughout- well done!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2016
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now you're talking...-smile-
thank you for for enjoying Lisa....love to you Michael
Comment from Crennan87
This poem is beautiful. I especially enjoyed that you included the song so that we could understand where the writers mind was coming from. Very well written.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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This poem is beautiful. I especially enjoyed that you included the song so that we could understand where the writers mind was coming from. Very well written.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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Well thank you...-smile-
yea...I was listening to it when I wrote it...i've written for it before...years go somewhere in the treasure of my portfolio...-smile-....love to you ...Michael
Comment from CEO2020
Most of the poem doesn't make sense to me but the flow of the words are excellent. I like the last part of the poem, that shows the level and quality you posses as a poet.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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Most of the poem doesn't make sense to me but the flow of the words are excellent. I like the last part of the poem, that shows the level and quality you posses as a poet.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
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the tango...can be "likened" to fencing. at least I saw it so. the woman..."striking" seriously dressed to kill. the man..."defending"...and leading on to high pitched crescendo....finally "earning" the surrender. -smile-....the beginning...was him.....remembering. love to you Michael
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Thank you for showing me the light. I understand the poem clearly now.
If you have time I would like you review on my recent short story called The Verdict .
Thanks
Comment from Wghads
I didn't really understand this to much but it was different to me which is not bad just kinda need to understand it more I'll reread it a few times and see if I can understand it
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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I didn't really understand this to much but it was different to me which is not bad just kinda need to understand it more I'll reread it a few times and see if I can understand it
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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ah its kind of like life...my poetic development....I tend to write in the moment...and very few are figured exactly or immediately. -smile-...anyway...please to meet you...Michael
Comment from Lady Ophelia
I loved your opening verse, the sunset swallowing the day is such evocative imagery. The entire poem was full of good imagery, and I got the sense of the feeling that was trying to be conveyed. There was a story behind that emotion, but it came second to the feeling of the moment. Very sensual and powerful as a whole. Great work!
Love that you included a Fleetwood Mac song! :)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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I loved your opening verse, the sunset swallowing the day is such evocative imagery. The entire poem was full of good imagery, and I got the sense of the feeling that was trying to be conveyed. There was a story behind that emotion, but it came second to the feeling of the moment. Very sensual and powerful as a whole. Great work!
Love that you included a Fleetwood Mac song! :)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2016
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thats "exactly" right....
and aint that life's truth. Thank you Lady...-smile-...love to you Michael
