Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "Coma - Part Three"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
15 total reviews
Comment from Word Junkie
Hi Brett,
This Brock Daniels is quite a character. The writing in this chapter is clear and easy to follow, and dialogue is distinct and believable. Description is good.
It does sound like this town is full of busybodies, but that's what makes a story interesting.
I look forward to reading more.
Write on,
Lana
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Hi Brett,
This Brock Daniels is quite a character. The writing in this chapter is clear and easy to follow, and dialogue is distinct and believable. Description is good.
It does sound like this town is full of busybodies, but that's what makes a story interesting.
I look forward to reading more.
Write on,
Lana
Comment Written 20-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come so stay tuned.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
A nice interlude to tell feelings and support that he has as sheriff and guardian of Cody.
Brock is not finished yet and I don't think Cody would let him.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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A nice interlude to tell feelings and support that he has as sheriff and guardian of Cody.
Brock is not finished yet and I don't think Cody would let him.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Comment from Lynn27
Another great chapter you have here, Brett. I was pulled in by your words and found myself wanting to Cody to wake up. Wondering how his marriage is going to be impacted by this? Here's his job?
I'm glad he's getting sleep at the end of the chapter.
Lynn
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Another great chapter you have here, Brett. I was pulled in by your words and found myself wanting to Cody to wake up. Wondering how his marriage is going to be impacted by this? Here's his job?
I'm glad he's getting sleep at the end of the chapter.
Lynn
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Comment from create4christ
I really like this story...but I must have missed something. Did you start over? Last I read, you were sheriff and Cody was fine...And I don't remember a Beth.
As always, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
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I really like this story...but I must have missed something. Did you start over? Last I read, you were sheriff and Cody was fine...And I don't remember a Beth.
As always, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2016
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Missing is the second Cody Schroder book, so yes, I did start another book. Astatula is the first book. Glad you are enjoying them.
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So, where can I read Chapter One - Parts 1 & 2
Comment from MTF1955
Another great chapter. I'm with Brock. I want Cody to wake up. He's one of my favorite characters on this site.You've make your characters real and I am invested in their future. Write on. Mary
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Another great chapter. I'm with Brock. I want Cody to wake up. He's one of my favorite characters on this site.You've make your characters real and I am invested in their future. Write on. Mary
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story., Much more to come.
Comment from Ginger Banks
An excellent read, I'm impressed with your ability to capture the emotions of each character in each scene. I like the fact you've given Brock a helper, Beth, to enable him some down-time. As you stated in your chapter this is something all caregivers need whether they'll admit to it or not. I didn't see any necessary changes, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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An excellent read, I'm impressed with your ability to capture the emotions of each character in each scene. I like the fact you've given Brock a helper, Beth, to enable him some down-time. As you stated in your chapter this is something all caregivers need whether they'll admit to it or not. I didn't see any necessary changes, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come.
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You're welcome. :)
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well I say it is time for the little guy to wake up.
I'm sure that Brock will change his mind about his
job as soon as everything gets back to normal. He
didn't need the extra pressure while Cody was in a coma.
Wake up Cody! xx Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Well I say it is time for the little guy to wake up.
I'm sure that Brock will change his mind about his
job as soon as everything gets back to normal. He
didn't need the extra pressure while Cody was in a coma.
Wake up Cody! xx Nancy
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story,. Much more to come.
Comment from foxangie123
Awesome. The very best part that I picked up on while reading this I feel is the most important-a caregiver has a huge responsibility and it is so very tiring. Way to go and I look forward to more.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Awesome. The very best part that I picked up on while reading this I feel is the most important-a caregiver has a huge responsibility and it is so very tiring. Way to go and I look forward to more.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come so stay tuned.
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
Brett, this is such a compelling story of a man who was Sheriff and resigned because he was wanting to be at Cody's bedside. Brock will stay there until his young charge wakes up from his coma. His job as Sheriff was certainly very important to him, but Cody means more. He sees how the residents are still wanting him to return, but at this moment, he cannot.
You entertain us with getting into Brock's mind and relating to us his thoughts and feelings. A wonderful chapter in your book.
Take care Brett and enjoy this day,,,,,,,Jim
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Brett, this is such a compelling story of a man who was Sheriff and resigned because he was wanting to be at Cody's bedside. Brock will stay there until his young charge wakes up from his coma. His job as Sheriff was certainly very important to him, but Cody means more. He sees how the residents are still wanting him to return, but at this moment, he cannot.
You entertain us with getting into Brock's mind and relating to us his thoughts and feelings. A wonderful chapter in your book.
Take care Brett and enjoy this day,,,,,,,Jim
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come so stay tuned.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
Sorry I don't have any six stars left otherwise I would have given them to your work. You did a great job telling about Cody and how much Brock cares about him. I'll be looking forward to Cody finally breaking free of being comatose.
Kat
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Hi Brett,
Sorry I don't have any six stars left otherwise I would have given them to your work. You did a great job telling about Cody and how much Brock cares about him. I'll be looking forward to Cody finally breaking free of being comatose.
Kat
Comment Written 17-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
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Thanks for saying my comments are appreciated. Kat
