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Astatula (Final Edition)

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A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?

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Comment from Lynn27
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Another good chapter here.

I am still a bit perplexed about the hospital season procedures about dealing with Cody. I just have a hard time as a reader that a nurse is gonna stand there and have a conversation first about her patient before taking care for the patient.



 Comment Written 25-Jun-2016

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
    You have never seen a nurse talk to family members? You have only seen them walk into the room quiet as a church mouse and tend to the patient then leave? Would that not make the family members wonder what the nurse's problem was and demand the nurse be replaced for a more compassionate one?
reply by Lynn27 on 26-Jun-2016
    I dealt with serious condition where I was hospitalized. The first thing the staff did check on me and then did talk to my family members. I have seen this done with family members.

    Cody is in coma that's serious business. His montiors should be going off since he woke up too.

    I'm trying to help you to make this a better story. I like the nurse and she is trying to calm him.

    Logically this doesn't work. This is a simple fix. Why don't you the nurse bring another nurse with her. Before, you ask, yes I have seen this done countless of times.



Comment from judiverse
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I'm frustrated. I thought I had written a review for this, but it comes up blank. Great characterization in this. You really show Daniels' devotion to Cody and frustration that his recovery isn't going faster. Mama Rosie may be a great nurse, but she was too ungrammatical for me, given the education required to be a nurse. You don't give a physical description of her in this part, and that might have helped somewhat. judi

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2016

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this. Your comments and support appreciated.
reply by judiverse on 26-Jun-2016
    You're very welcome. judi
reply by Anonymous Member on 29-Jun-2016
    You're very welcome. judi
Comment from barkingdog
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Corrections and Suggestion:
-"Here in the real world(,) Sugar,"
-ride of your life(,) Sheriff.
-"There you go(,) Sheriff!"
-forget how to sing(,) Sheriff.

You might consider her using 'sir' or eliminating 'Sheriff' in one place.

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2016

reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments, support, and edits appreciated.
Comment from foxangie123
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Great job, additional chaptering. It is true that at times we have to give those we love breathing room and then see if they know how to use it. Great job.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2016

reply by the author on 03-Jul-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Much more to come so stay tuned.
Comment from MizKat
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Hi Brett,

This is a nicely written chapter of your book. I'm happy to hear that Cody's Lead Nurse is taking good care of him and that the ex Sheriff is finally showing his gratefulness for her comforting friendship.

Kat

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2016

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
reply by MizKat on 04-Jul-2016
    I look forward to reading more. Kat
Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
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This is a great story that brings forth the human emotions when something good happen, then as quickly as it came it disappears. Mama Rosie is right that nature takes it's time in bringing a comatose patient back to reality.

Well done once again Brett,,,,,,,,Jim

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2016

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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I could not wait to get to this next chapter.
Excellently written.
Keeps me coming back formore and more.
You keep interest with each chapter leading to the next.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2016

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Comment from MTF1955
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You truly make the reader love these characters. Mama Rosie's compassion and wisdom jump from the page. Also the sheriff's frustration and his love for Cody. A job well done. Mary

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2016

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Comment from misscookie
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I enjoyed reading this chapter i felt as though the was a strong
bound with him and the nurse concerning the boys heath. some times it just take a few words to ease someone fears or doubts,
thank you for sharing.
Cookie

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2016

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    Thanks misscookie!
reply by misscookie on 04-Jul-2016
    Your'e very welcome. have a blessed day.
    Cookie
Comment from Sankey
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Good work and I love the great way you tell how factual it all is with Coma patients and all that. I am sure it is all correct. No spags and looking for more great story. Thanks again.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2016

reply by the author on 04-Jul-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.