Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Banty Rooster"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
13 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
I have no more stars to give.
This chapter is a little to much for me Even though it was a great read.
I pray the next review will be much Milder ... you know what I mean
Cookie
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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I have no more stars to give.
This chapter is a little to much for me Even though it was a great read.
I pray the next review will be much Milder ... you know what I mean
Cookie
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story misscookie. Keep those comments and reviews coming. They are appreciated.
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Will do, my friend.
Cookie
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Brett. Your story sure has given me a new outlook on clowns, mate lol.
"Yea, you're Mark Bannister...aka Pee-Pot the Pretend, Wannabe, Clown!" (Hahahaha! Love it!)
"You'll do a whole lot more than cry long before I'm done with you(,) Cody!"
"Backhanding Cody one more time(,) Bee-Bo told him,"
Very tense and well-constructed thriller. Let's see what happens, if and when the sheriff arrives. From a jealous boy to a physcho clown is a very interesting transition, one might say.
Great job buddy.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
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G'day Brett. Your story sure has given me a new outlook on clowns, mate lol.
"Yea, you're Mark Bannister...aka Pee-Pot the Pretend, Wannabe, Clown!" (Hahahaha! Love it!)
"You'll do a whole lot more than cry long before I'm done with you(,) Cody!"
"Backhanding Cody one more time(,) Bee-Bo told him,"
Very tense and well-constructed thriller. Let's see what happens, if and when the sheriff arrives. From a jealous boy to a physcho clown is a very interesting transition, one might say.
Great job buddy.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2016
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Cody does have quite a character, especially when he is a fighting mad little banty rooster.
Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Brett, I like the story and it has great imagery. Cody has a vivid imagination with names and as young as he is his defiance is admirable. I think you could show more rather than telling what is happening. Looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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Hi Brett, I like the story and it has great imagery. Cody has a vivid imagination with names and as young as he is his defiance is admirable. I think you could show more rather than telling what is happening. Looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 11-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments and support appreciated.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Excellent writing and the description you used made it seem like we were watching it happen and the madder we get.
I look forward to each and every chapter. No problems noted
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Excellent writing and the description you used made it seem like we were watching it happen and the madder we get.
I look forward to each and every chapter. No problems noted
Comment Written 10-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this side of Cody's character.
Little bugger is not afraid of much of anything because of all the abuse he suffered from Earl Anthony Schroder, his father, in Palo Pinto at the beginning of Astatula.
Your comments and support definitely appreciated.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
I hope I got your name right. This is an interesting part of your book although sad too for the little boy. It's wonderful at how brave he is though for being so young. I will be looking forward to reading more of your work.
Kat
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Hi Brett,
I hope I got your name right. This is an interesting part of your book although sad too for the little boy. It's wonderful at how brave he is though for being so young. I will be looking forward to reading more of your work.
Kat
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Of course you got my name right. I am still Brett Matthew West. A minor glitch with my Publisher here in Nashville does not change that. Only when I can use my pen name. Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Stay tuned. Much more to come.
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I love reading your work. They are always very nice to read. Kat
Comment from MTF1955
That was an amazing chapter. I see my little man has still got the fight in him. You go Cody. We're a;ll pulling for you to nail the clown right in his big, fat red nose. Great job.Mary
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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That was an amazing chapter. I see my little man has still got the fight in him. You go Cody. We're a;ll pulling for you to nail the clown right in his big, fat red nose. Great job.Mary
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Cody is not done. Not by a long shot. You can beat on him all day long and he will keep coming back for more. Stay tuned to find out what his next little trick is.
Comment from judiverse
Cody has a lot of spirit and does his best to stand up to Bee-Bo. Unfortunately, Boo-bo has him tied down. Sounds like Bee-Bo is an old hand at this kidnapping business. Cody is confident that Daniels will come to his rescue, but it sounds like that's just what the pretender-clown wants. He makes no secret of his evil intentions, either. Cody realizes he's really dealing with some demented creature. Wonder what Daniels' plan of attack will be, if he figures out where Cody is being held. Great story. judi
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Cody has a lot of spirit and does his best to stand up to Bee-Bo. Unfortunately, Boo-bo has him tied down. Sounds like Bee-Bo is an old hand at this kidnapping business. Cody is confident that Daniels will come to his rescue, but it sounds like that's just what the pretender-clown wants. He makes no secret of his evil intentions, either. Cody realizes he's really dealing with some demented creature. Wonder what Daniels' plan of attack will be, if he figures out where Cody is being held. Great story. judi
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Your comments, support, and the 6 Stars appreciated.
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You're very welcome, and best of luck with your novel. judi
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You're very welcome, and best of luck with your novel. judi
Comment from create4christ
Evil!! You have done a really good job showing what an EVIL man BeeBo is...I can't wait to see what Sheriff Brock Daniels does to him. I don't condone disrespect, but that little Cody made me proud. I found myself rooting for him...I HATE when people hurt children. Btw, what happened to Beth? One little typo...
P13 - believe (.) What
As always, ANXIOUSLY WAITING! Thanks for sharing. ..Penny
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Evil!! You have done a really good job showing what an EVIL man BeeBo is...I can't wait to see what Sheriff Brock Daniels does to him. I don't condone disrespect, but that little Cody made me proud. I found myself rooting for him...I HATE when people hurt children. Btw, what happened to Beth? One little typo...
P13 - believe (.) What
As always, ANXIOUSLY WAITING! Thanks for sharing. ..Penny
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story.
Cody has a lot of spunk.
You can beat on him all day long and he keeps coming back for more.
So< Bee-Bo better watch out!
Comment from Challah1202
I found this to be suspenseful and gripping. I didn't see any thing to criticize. Clowns have gotten a bad reputation as a figure kids are attracted to and vulnerable to. My granddaughter doesn't like them. I think they can be threatening with lots of make up and weird costumes. I'm sure there is more to the story. Write on. The dialog is very good and moves the story along well.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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I found this to be suspenseful and gripping. I didn't see any thing to criticize. Clowns have gotten a bad reputation as a figure kids are attracted to and vulnerable to. My granddaughter doesn't like them. I think they can be threatening with lots of make up and weird costumes. I'm sure there is more to the story. Write on. The dialog is very good and moves the story along well.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Stay tuned. Much more to come.
Comment from mfowler
Bravo, this is easily the best written chapter of the book which I've read. The tone of defiance and ego maniacal threats is perfectly balanced between Cody's belligerence and the clown's violent responses. Your language is great, dialogue is powerful, in character, and on the money. You've done well to return to past tense, third person. It gives the story a sense of the real. You've. Done a great job on the editing, only one tiny nit. So glad I had a sixer left, Brett. This is really mature writing.
SPAG
chose his attack...choose.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Bravo, this is easily the best written chapter of the book which I've read. The tone of defiance and ego maniacal threats is perfectly balanced between Cody's belligerence and the clown's violent responses. Your language is great, dialogue is powerful, in character, and on the money. You've done well to return to past tense, third person. It gives the story a sense of the real. You've. Done a great job on the editing, only one tiny nit. So glad I had a sixer left, Brett. This is really mature writing.
SPAG
chose his attack...choose.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Glad you enjoyed this portion of the story. Third person does allow me to do some of the things I wanted to do in this story more easily. Your comments and support appreciated.
