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Astatula (Final Edition)

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A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?

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Comment from Ulla
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Hi there, yes it is indeed a pretty bad day for Cody, but quite natural for a young boy who is playing around.
What was that Sheriff Daniels told his young troopers = what was it Sheriff Daniels had told his young troopers
Horseplaying with couple boys around him....= horseplaying with a couple of boys around him
Best regards. Ulla:)

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this little tale.
Comment from Aqua2021
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Wow, this was sure was an unpredictable adventure Cody had. A good play with words in places, I couldn't find any flaws. I would love to see more added to this. :) Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this little story.
Comment from prettybluebirds
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Excellent. The story itself is great but you have a strange way of putting you sentences together. It makes it hard to follow at times. It is good work so maybe it is just me.

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 Comment Written 24-Jul-2016

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
    Glad you enjoyed this little tale.