2016 GYPSY's HAIKU
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Red Ink"a published book of haiku
19 total reviews
Comment from Bollie
This is a really powerful poem that tugs at the heartstrings. It captivated my attention from the beginning to the very last word. The photo combined with the red colored verse really brings the emotion of the poem to life. REALLY REALLY GREAT JOB !!!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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This is a really powerful poem that tugs at the heartstrings. It captivated my attention from the beginning to the very last word. The photo combined with the red colored verse really brings the emotion of the poem to life. REALLY REALLY GREAT JOB !!!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Hello, Bollie, thank you very much for the review.
Gypsy
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You're very welcome, Gypsy.
Have a wonderful night.
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You're very welcome, Gypsy.
Have a wonderful night.
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You're very welcome, Gypsy.
Have a wonderful night.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Well done. my friend. I am glad you have enjoyed some of Basho's fine work. You have creatively used rain to make a political statement. Well written, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Well done. my friend. I am glad you have enjoyed some of Basho's fine work. You have creatively used rain to make a political statement. Well written, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Thank you sweetie pie. I feel grateful for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Ulla
Hola Gitana, como estas? Me ha gustado este haibun. It's a fantastic haibun, with a very forceful aha moment.Terrible news, but a wonderful write. I'm very taken with this form of poetry. Un abrazo de tu amiga, Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Hola Gitana, como estas? Me ha gustado este haibun. It's a fantastic haibun, with a very forceful aha moment.Terrible news, but a wonderful write. I'm very taken with this form of poetry. Un abrazo de tu amiga, Ulla:)))
Comment Written 26-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2016
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Gracias guapa. I love haibun, most Japanese poetry. I appreciate your review, Ulla, you are very kind. Mwah!
tu amiga la gitana
Comment from Joan E.
I am pleased that you were inspired to create a haibun. I admired the revelation in the verse that the soulmate had died. Your satori is quite poignant. Well done- Joan
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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I am pleased that you were inspired to create a haibun. I admired the revelation in the verse that the soulmate had died. Your satori is quite poignant. Well done- Joan
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you, I am grateful for your kind review. Take care.
Gypsy
Comment from djsaxon
Stunning from go to whoa. The prosimetric is awesome. Concose, as the form demands, but with a haunting flow that draws the reader to the haiku. Truly in awe of this. Cheers - DJ
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Stunning from go to whoa. The prosimetric is awesome. Concose, as the form demands, but with a haunting flow that draws the reader to the haiku. Truly in awe of this. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 25-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Thank you very much, DJ. I love the pretty six stars but I love you more.
If I just came on too strong, remember that I am a bloody Spaniard. LOL
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Sure as shit hope you are good with the castanets!
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LoL you bet your English butt I am good with the bloody castanets!
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I just noticed that I wrote, '''your English butt....'' but you are Australian. I'm sorry about that. LoL
Comment from Lisa Deverick
I have been reading several of these lately, and after reading yours, I finally 'get' the idea of a haibun poem. This is beautifully tragic and your well chosen words make me feel. When a writer can make me 'feel;' , I consider that success. Well done Sister Ninja!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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I have been reading several of these lately, and after reading yours, I finally 'get' the idea of a haibun poem. This is beautifully tragic and your well chosen words make me feel. When a writer can make me 'feel;' , I consider that success. Well done Sister Ninja!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Hello, Little sister ninja,
I wish you would have been here today. I had to be rushed to the hospital for a severe attack due to medicine interaction. It was horrifying and I thought I was going to die.
Thank you for the kind words about the haibun and for the awesome six stars. I love you,, Sister Ninja :)
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I would have SO been there if I lived closer!! Glad you are safe now.You are NOT allowed to die! It is against the sister ninja SOG's and Ninja Protocol. LOL- just saying... Be safe- and get better Friend.
I love you too (big hug)
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LOL already then, no dying around here, or my ninja sister is going to whip my butt.
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You got that right Sis! haha
Comment from judiverse
This is so powerful, and the reader can easily visualize the scene. It's a shame when news of a death has to be delivered. The messengers are sad when they have to do it, too. The questions asked seem quite logical and the word choices are dramatic. The concluding Haiku adds to the drama. It states in brief form what the situation is and the emotional impact it has. Gypsy, I don't know if others feel this way, but I had my speaker on and when I heard the sounds of the rain, it was distracting. I did turn the sound off to concentrate on the haibun. judi
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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This is so powerful, and the reader can easily visualize the scene. It's a shame when news of a death has to be delivered. The messengers are sad when they have to do it, too. The questions asked seem quite logical and the word choices are dramatic. The concluding Haiku adds to the drama. It states in brief form what the situation is and the emotional impact it has. Gypsy, I don't know if others feel this way, but I had my speaker on and when I heard the sounds of the rain, it was distracting. I did turn the sound off to concentrate on the haibun. judi
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Okay, Judi, I will check the music. When I posted it it was very soft low music but something they get loud after. I am sorry for the distraction.
Thank you for the lovely review,
gypsy
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You're welcome. Just something to think about. judi
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I already took the music off. You were right, it was too loud.
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You're welcome. Just something to think about. judi
Comment from Annette Gulliver
Your words certainly convey the emotions of one who has lost somebody they loved.
Light and bright one moment, then darkness and despair.
Great artwork and sound effects to match,
:) Annette
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Your words certainly convey the emotions of one who has lost somebody they loved.
Light and bright one moment, then darkness and despair.
Great artwork and sound effects to match,
:) Annette
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Hello, Annette, thank you very much and peace be with you..
gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
The is an exceptional haibun, Gypsy. So much emotional depth and breadth in your thoughts and presentation.
Super job with this Poetry Potlatch offering.
Gloria
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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The is an exceptional haibun, Gypsy. So much emotional depth and breadth in your thoughts and presentation.
Super job with this Poetry Potlatch offering.
Gloria
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Hello, Gloria, thank you very much for the review and your kind words. You are an awesome reviewer. God bless you.
gypsy
Comment from BeasPeas
Gypsy, this is very well done with striking presentation and potent content. Sadly it happens too often. These lines are excellent:
"A second ago the world was perfect. The sun was out and the sky was clear, not a cloud in sight. Now all's changed..."
Marilyn
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Gypsy, this is very well done with striking presentation and potent content. Sadly it happens too often. These lines are excellent:
"A second ago the world was perfect. The sun was out and the sky was clear, not a cloud in sight. Now all's changed..."
Marilyn
Comment Written 24-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2016
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Hello, Marilyn, thank you very much for the review and your kind words. You are an awesome reviewer. God bless you.
gypsy