White Lightning
Sunshine to moonshine100 total reviews
Comment from LIJ Red
I suppose a syllable wizard says every is ev'ry. I might say sunshine brightens up each joyous day. Moonshine tends to make nights dark and stormy anymore. It's all "scared liquor" made on the run. Excellent 5/7/5.
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I suppose a syllable wizard says every is ev'ry. I might say sunshine brightens up each joyous day. Moonshine tends to make nights dark and stormy anymore. It's all "scared liquor" made on the run. Excellent 5/7/5.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, LIJ Red, for taking time to read my poem. Yes, I went back and forth on that second line and finally had to get out the dictionary, which I honestly never do, and was reassured it was okay. Who woulda thunk it? Isn't it funny how us old southern boys can be thinking about the sun and the moon, and get sidetracked with moonshine? Your kind words, comments, and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from MacMhuirich
LOL, what a hoot, that ol moonshine can sure brighten up the night. Love the artwork and the whole presentation is wonderful. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
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LOL, what a hoot, that ol moonshine can sure brighten up the night. Love the artwork and the whole presentation is wonderful. Best wishes for the contest.
Bless you
John
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, John, for taking time to read my poem. It's hard to imagine why anyone would be writing about the sun and the moon, and then, end up sidetracked on moonshine. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Mary Wakeford
A clever play on words with this 5-7-5, and the image congers up hillbilly whiskey fermenting in an old barn in the Smokey Mountains. You've created that imagery in ten words! Well done!
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A clever play on words with this 5-7-5, and the image congers up hillbilly whiskey fermenting in an old barn in the Smokey Mountains. You've created that imagery in ten words! Well done!
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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It's hard for even an ol' southern boy like me to imagine how I started off writing about the sun and the moon and got sidetracked on moonshine. Of course, I must admit, it's happened before. Many years ago. Thank you so much for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about sunshine or moonlight. Humorous and funny picture. The sunshine brightens the day but the moonlight is better. Lol.
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A very well-written poem about sunshine or moonlight. Humorous and funny picture. The sunshine brightens the day but the moonlight is better. Lol.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Sandra, for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from joannakruk
Hehe a fun piece with an ideal picture to add. Some revel in the sunny disposition of the day, others require the enhancement of a brew to elicit that carefree sensation. A great piece
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Hehe a fun piece with an ideal picture to add. Some revel in the sunny disposition of the day, others require the enhancement of a brew to elicit that carefree sensation. A great piece
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Ye ha! Yep, there is nothing better than something to elicit libations and sensations! Thank you so much Joanna, for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from Nika2016
This is as stereotypical and insulting as using the N word. Obviously you have not traveled through the areas.. Look at my photo ...and then in the mirror...Who looks more like moonshine?
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This is as stereotypical and insulting as using the N word. Obviously you have not traveled through the areas.. Look at my photo ...and then in the mirror...Who looks more like moonshine?
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Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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What in the world are you talking about? There is nothing insulting or derogatory said or intended in this piece. I'm not an outsider making fun of moonshiners dear, I'm an old down home, country boy from Kentucky. And I can assure you that we really don't give a damn what other people think of our ways of life. So don't jump to stupid ass conclusions! It was meant to be fun, and if it's funny to me who grew up in the culture, then it damn sure should be funny to judgemental outsiders.
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Do people really perpetuate stereotypes of themselves...stupid ass, or otherwise? This was posted ten minutes after I posted a SERIOUS peace about the area.. Your pic is the stereotype..
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Well, dear, with an IQ of 176, I'm definitely not a stupid ass, or otherwise. You should just chill out and relax. I figured from the nasty review that I touched a nerve but, personally, I think your reaction was ridiculous. If I were a skinny person, I would never call a fat person, fat. I don't use the N word, nor would I use any other word in a derogatory way toward anyone. But joking about life and stereotypes is a means of entertainment, enjoyed around the world. And I can promise you that no one I know would have ever seen themselves or been offended by my cute and innocent poem and cartoon. Have a wonderful day!
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Oh, and by the way, I didn't have to travel the area. I live in the area, born, raised, and darn proud of it. Humor around the world pokes fun at stereotypes and themselves. It's the people who spend a lifetime with this giant chips on their shoulder looking for a reason to be angry or hate that causes all the problems in this world. And I'm not being mean. I'll pray for you!
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Oh....you do that...pray..
..I live here too..That is the point.
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and isn't this why Charley Hebo happened?
Wow...IQ 176...You should be at MENSA not FanStory....The nerve you hit was posting the picture right after I posted my essay and I do not believe any of what you have said...and btw..I am not mean either...have a good day...
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First off, I never saw your post, so how would I know to post any picture that conflicts with your paranoia. Second off, I don't even like you, so I have to reason to tell you anything but the truth. You are a nasty, angry, person, whom I'll continue to pray for so that you don't keep going around attacking people from the cesspool in your mind. Good day
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You live here too? What are you talking about? Good Lord! You are absolutely nuts! Go away and leave me alone!
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You are the one who keeps sending messages...Get lost..
Comment from Pyrrho
I assess this as excellent because of your pun. As puns go, it is not overly impressive, but it is better than no pun at all. Slainte, as we Scots say.
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I assess this as excellent because of your pun. As puns go, it is not overly impressive, but it is better than no pun at all. Slainte, as we Scots say.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much for taking time to read my poem. Yes, I guess people from different areas view things in different ways, which can be interesting, but also can make it hard for others to understand the humor in something. I'm an old southern U.S. boy who grew up in moonshine whiskey country. It wouldn't be too surprising for someone from around here to start writing about the sun and the moon, and get sidetracked on moonshine. Your comments and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
Comment from royowen
I really like this 5/7/5 entry in this sunshine or moonlight? Contest, this is a beauty, with the great, contrasting use of both the opposite in the prompt, very clever, inspired use of language to create such a good entry, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
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I really like this 5/7/5 entry in this sunshine or moonlight? Contest, this is a beauty, with the great, contrasting use of both the opposite in the prompt, very clever, inspired use of language to create such a good entry, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Roy, for taking time to read my little, silly poem. I can't even imagine how I started out writing about the sun and the moon, and ended up sidetracked on moonshine. Of course, being an ol' southern boy myself, those kinds of things have been known to happen. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
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Most welcome dear friend
Comment from dannielleduran
There's some Haiku I can enjoy! That is funny and it definitely made me smile. Its nice not to have to look for ways to say great syllable structure and the such. Great job.
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There's some Haiku I can enjoy! That is funny and it definitely made me smile. Its nice not to have to look for ways to say great syllable structure and the such. Great job.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, DannielleDuran, for taking time to read my poem. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. You know, it's even hard for me to understand how I was writing about the sun and the moon, and got sidetracked on moonshine. I appreciate you! :-)
Comment from starkat
Moonlight with moonshine and guarantee every day is a sunshiny day no matter the weather or time of day. This is a wonderful, humorous take on the contest prompt. The funny artwork of the happy, drunk hillbilly helps emphasize your well chosen words. That's some pretty good moonshine that feller's drinkin'. He's tipsy and lovin' it.
Enjoyed your humorous 5-7-5 that incorporates both sunshine and moonlight. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Cheers ... ;-)
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Moonlight with moonshine and guarantee every day is a sunshiny day no matter the weather or time of day. This is a wonderful, humorous take on the contest prompt. The funny artwork of the happy, drunk hillbilly helps emphasize your well chosen words. That's some pretty good moonshine that feller's drinkin'. He's tipsy and lovin' it.
Enjoyed your humorous 5-7-5 that incorporates both sunshine and moonlight. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Cheers ... ;-)
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Comment Written 02-Aug-2016
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2016
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Thank you so much, Art, for taking time to read my little, silly poem. It's hard for even me to imagine how I started out writing about the sun and the moon, and then ended up sidetracked on moonshine. LOL! Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. :-)
