To Last Forever
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Playhouse"Poems by Michael
11 total reviews
Comment from Amber Fatone
This is so adorable, and I love the energy in this poem, when the moment is right, just go for it I guess. Thank you for sharing, I can't wait to tea more, I know where to find you ð???
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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This is so adorable, and I love the energy in this poem, when the moment is right, just go for it I guess. Thank you for sharing, I can't wait to tea more, I know where to find you ð???
Comment Written 11-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2016
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I'll draw you a detailed map as soon as I get home.....or I'll come to you......whatever works...for you my love....-eye batting-.....-smile-.....wow.....life sure is surprising every once in a while....deep breath ..,.release. In love Michael
Comment from RGstar
My friend, how did I miss this, I have had a few probs to take care of. How happy this made me. Not just the image, but the words locked on. A beautiful write, my friend, so deserve your entry to POM, your time is nigh.
Bravo. I have no sixes, but know that it is worth.
RG
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2016
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My friend, how did I miss this, I have had a few probs to take care of. How happy this made me. Not just the image, but the words locked on. A beautiful write, my friend, so deserve your entry to POM, your time is nigh.
Bravo. I have no sixes, but know that it is worth.
RG
Comment Written 02-Oct-2016
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2016
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well I dont know Star....but its a question pink elephanting to be asked at the next stock holders meeting...aha...ah no biggie bud my ego's bigger than alll this....lol....yes for sure this time...my popularity is on the rise in case you hadn't noticed. -smile-...just messing...I was nominated...at least someone with some power has got some sense...-wink-...love Michael
Comment from MissMerri
This is a clever and creative poem, demonstrating your unique abilities and talent with words. Somehow, and I've never been able to figure out how, you are able to build a mood with not only the choice of words, but by the arrangement of the words together, so that the music of the sounds becomes a huge part of the beauty of your poetry. You have internal rhyme, alliteration, repetition of key phrases, all of which add to the pleasure of reading this poem.
An example of some of my favorite lines..
play a long... song
something sweet taste
like luck ubiquitous adjusts
soft lighting chorus or stage center in love
music never stops
The music of your poetry never stops.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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This is a clever and creative poem, demonstrating your unique abilities and talent with words. Somehow, and I've never been able to figure out how, you are able to build a mood with not only the choice of words, but by the arrangement of the words together, so that the music of the sounds becomes a huge part of the beauty of your poetry. You have internal rhyme, alliteration, repetition of key phrases, all of which add to the pleasure of reading this poem.
An example of some of my favorite lines..
play a long... song
something sweet taste
like luck ubiquitous adjusts
soft lighting chorus or stage center in love
music never stops
The music of your poetry never stops.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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thats where I start... a mood. usually I find a song that...triggers a memory...thus the mood. I'm very happy you came by Meadow...-smile-...you been making me all kind a happy lately...and I feel most special because of you...-smile- thank you for so much more...you make me. You're in with the best...here...and quite frankly any I've ever read. Thats not "talk" Merri....you are....I've known it for some time now. Youre home run power every time up....and its the fool who bets against that...-wink-...youre so damn cool....love you up...Michael
Comment from fionageorge
I thoroughly enjoyed this delightful little journey in that lovely story of playing house, with cat and mouse. Great video clip is so delightful, but your well chosen and well structured words stand on their own. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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I thoroughly enjoyed this delightful little journey in that lovely story of playing house, with cat and mouse. Great video clip is so delightful, but your well chosen and well structured words stand on their own. Warmest regards, Marijke :o)
Comment Written 24-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Hi Marijke...-smile-
ah just some more boy girl stuff...aka poetry...aha...thank you Beautiful...happy you enjoyed with me. love Michael
Comment from Moon baby
Well, I loved the video of the two little kids kissing! You really are talented, this is the second review I have done on your work and I am impressed. I often wonder how people come up with their inspiration that sparks their creativity. Whatever it may be your poetry and use of words flow great and your choice of words impeccable. I enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Well, I loved the video of the two little kids kissing! You really are talented, this is the second review I have done on your work and I am impressed. I often wonder how people come up with their inspiration that sparks their creativity. Whatever it may be your poetry and use of words flow great and your choice of words impeccable. I enjoyed it!
Comment Written 24-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Hey Baby...-smile-
ha...yea thats kinda neat...I was attracted right away. wow....well thank you...I'm in negotiations with Loyd's of London right now to insure my mind...haggling over the deductible at present...should I lose it. haha...thank you for thinking so...big hug love Michael
Comment from winnona
YYour well-chosen artwork and background color along with the music, complete the poem and turn it into an experience instead od just a poem. your well-chosen words flow together and combining send the message of the poem to the reader.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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YYour well-chosen artwork and background color along with the music, complete the poem and turn it into an experience instead od just a poem. your well-chosen words flow together and combining send the message of the poem to the reader.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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wow...well thanks Winnona...-smile-
I saw you in that movie with Richard Gere ...you made me cry....-smile-
anyway I hope youre feeling better in heaven...aha...love to you Michael
Comment from Sis Cat
I enjoyed this poem about the cat and mouse antics of a couple kissing. They could be kids or this could be a metaphor for an adult couple engaged in a tumultuous romance. I enjoyed the fragmentation of your words and their modern feel. You combined ring around the rosy playfulness with seriousness.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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I enjoyed this poem about the cat and mouse antics of a couple kissing. They could be kids or this could be a metaphor for an adult couple engaged in a tumultuous romance. I enjoyed the fragmentation of your words and their modern feel. You combined ring around the rosy playfulness with seriousness.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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ha...hey there...-smile- ...yes its about human behavior....can be very peculiar at times...aha..thanks man. love Michael
Comment from Leineco
the cat meowed
the mouse went squeak
linguistic guesstimates commenced
evolving process burgeons
ululations and grimaces,
susurrations
and giggles exchanged
edging in toward heaven's gate
Ken and Barbie playing house
pink mustang and pink abode;
anatomically constrained
measure distance to a kiss
champagne bubbles tickle noses
strains of music
score the dance
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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the cat meowed
the mouse went squeak
linguistic guesstimates commenced
evolving process burgeons
ululations and grimaces,
susurrations
and giggles exchanged
edging in toward heaven's gate
Ken and Barbie playing house
pink mustang and pink abode;
anatomically constrained
measure distance to a kiss
champagne bubbles tickle noses
strains of music
score the dance
Comment Written 23-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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damn right he squeaked...what else did you think would happen. I mean its not like you havent been through this part of the woods before Leinko...yea...yea thats right burgeoning ...big...you better believe...ululations...my God...yes...yes..suffer'n susurattions...yes...giggle all you want its okay..its fine....where almost there...heavens gate....wha...wait wait...ken and... barbie....-headshake-...nono not here...ana...who...anatomically constrained....-headtilt-.. Leinko...this aint poetry....sorry. hey listen....love Michael
Comment from Joan E.
I remember reaching across the aisle and kissing a boy in the second grade--a bit older than the tykes in the picture! I've never smoked--so, I don't know about the cigarettes!! I enjoyed your tercets and echoing sounds toward the end. Smiles- Joan
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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I remember reaching across the aisle and kissing a boy in the second grade--a bit older than the tykes in the picture! I've never smoked--so, I don't know about the cigarettes!! I enjoyed your tercets and echoing sounds toward the end. Smiles- Joan
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Comment Written 23-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2016
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no wonder you started teaching French...might as well get paid for it...aha...good evening Mademoiselle....never you mind....the kid in second grade certainly does... -smile-....hey listen I was...well I was wondering if you were still tutoring...call me...lets keep it touch....love Michael
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I retired from real jobs eight years ago, and have never looked back! I hope you have a restful, first Fall weekend when it arrives- Joan
Comment from tfawcus
Love it! An early starter, not lacking in confidence! I guess that comes later, in teenage years. It sure can be a game of cat and mouse at times.
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reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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Love it! An early starter, not lacking in confidence! I guess that comes later, in teenage years. It sure can be a game of cat and mouse at times.
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Comment Written 22-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2016
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ha...-smile-...well alright that makes three of us...lets party...aha...yes Sir innocent intentions are bold only to the more experienced at disappointment ....appreciate the look see. love michael
