Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I relished your selection of the animated bridge art and the reinforcing choice of Elvis' class song. I admired your word play with "hold them grail," "Son rise" and "paradise found". I liked feeling "special" at the end as well! Smiles- Joan

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

-smile-...Mademoiselle.
well you are special...I know...-smile-
you tell that horn player he's a lucky man...-wink-...love Michael

reply by Joan E. on 21-Oct-2016

He's at a Dodgers' game compliments of our son--so, he truly is lucky! Sweet dreams- Joan

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

I wish somebody take me out to the ball game...dammit...-smile-

reply by Joan E. on 21-Oct-2016

Your turn will come--our son actually got two free tickets for charging so many AMTRAK train tickets--sometimes being a rail buff pays off. Enjoy the end of the week- Joan

Comment from amada

Exceptional

Wow, dearest Michael, my friend. Wow and wow! Sometimes I feel exactly how you write it..."somebody's on My side so special I'm made." I Know He will give me nothing more that I can bear. Lovely and powerful lines. Love it!

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016

Hey you...-smile-
I wasn't expecting you...what a wonderful surprise.
no...not if "we" do what were meant to...and bare each others burdens. people find God in other people. and thats how its supposed to be...-smile-...how are you Happy feet...you seem better no...? always love for you....Michael

reply by amada on 21-Oct-2016

So clever of you...yes, of course, we find God in other people as well. I am doing better and writing a little more. I just posted about my friend Lois, next door. Love ya!

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2016

thats my step Moms name...did you move to Ferndale...?

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

This is a well-written poetic voice. It is unique in its poetic style and has a good thoughts process in its thoughts. I found no errors to speak of in it. It was a pleasure to have read and written this response for it... John

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016

Hey John...-smile-....why I thank you Sir....been working a lot....just seeing if I can still sink.....anyway thank you. love Michael

Comment from RGstar

Exceptional

Like the connection of bridge faith and water and the love perceived.
Good collective wording that lends well to your theme.

''soo special you're made''

I would keep the last line simple as this should be a line of remembrance and you do not want raised eyebrows, in wondering, at this stage of the write.
I would make ''soo'' 'so' which binds well without thought.


''loves Me...
somebody's on My side
so special I'm made ''

In your own cryptic style, the above is beautifully said. One of my favorite parts of the write. Only you could write it in that way... which is an art form within itself. Good poetic content, diverse from others in regards to connection with faith, the write nicely bound together throughout.
Bravo.

My best wishes.
Six stars.
Have a great day, my friend.
RG

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2016

Hey Star...-smile-
thanks Bro...I know its rather simple...been ah not able to sink lately. raised eyebrows is a concern for sure...it s fixed. thanks man. always love...Michael

reply by RGstar on 20-Oct-2016

You got it, my brother,
best wishes