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Comment from --Turtle.
Read through this poem, I don't know Latin, I don't know the form, or much about poetry...
but I read through this poem several times. I thought things like, a sense of spirit and rejoicing, a sense of the new day coming, a sense of exsistance and then the night returning again with a contentedness about it.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Read through this poem, I don't know Latin, I don't know the form, or much about poetry...
but I read through this poem several times. I thought things like, a sense of spirit and rejoicing, a sense of the new day coming, a sense of exsistance and then the night returning again with a contentedness about it.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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It's a form that I invented, with the help of Pantygynt. I don't really know Latin either, but I don't let that stop me - ha ha. I do hope to learn it though, and I do know a little. Thank you :))
Carol
Comment from LIJ Red
I tried to put together a brief overheard conversation in Latin for a story once.
I was so unsure of my results I gave it up. Love the web translators, but don't trust them. Anyway, this is an excellent response to the challenge.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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I tried to put together a brief overheard conversation in Latin for a story once.
I was so unsure of my results I gave it up. Love the web translators, but don't trust them. Anyway, this is an excellent response to the challenge.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2016
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The web translators can indeed lead one astray! Even when consulting ancient Christmas songs in Latin. I hoped Gynt would chime in, and indeed he did, so one line had a post-edit:))
Wish I had learned Latin in school!
Thanks Red :))
Carol
Comment from Sis Cat
I am giving you a six on this Trio of Sapphonic Triads. They each stand alone and work together, and it partly inspired my haiku suite. Each Sapphonic is hand-crafted to deliver beauty and contemplation. You start with the sound of bells of Christmas morn, to be replaced by angels rejoicing, and conclude with stillness and peace. The more I look at your poem and contemplate it, the more I appreciate its craft. This is very well structured and it has been my great pleasure to read and enjoy it.
Thank you, thank you very much for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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I am giving you a six on this Trio of Sapphonic Triads. They each stand alone and work together, and it partly inspired my haiku suite. Each Sapphonic is hand-crafted to deliver beauty and contemplation. You start with the sound of bells of Christmas morn, to be replaced by angels rejoicing, and conclude with stillness and peace. The more I look at your poem and contemplate it, the more I appreciate its craft. This is very well structured and it has been my great pleasure to read and enjoy it.
Thank you, thank you very much for sharing.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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Wow, thank you so much. This makes me very happy, coming from an accomplished writer like yourself. You may not know, but I invented the Sapphonic Triad form, along with my friend Jim (Pantygynt on this site). I'm very interested to see your Haiku suite. Thanks again! :))
Carol
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I knew that there was something special about your poem because it stood out in execution from the Sapphonic Triad I have read from others. The quality leaped up with yours.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Carol, what a lovely composition of poems. I think you've got the Latin right. I had it in both school and college. Really liked your poem. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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Hi Carol, what a lovely composition of poems. I think you've got the Latin right. I had it in both school and college. Really liked your poem. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2016
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Thanks so much! I wish I had taken Latin, instead of French. I appreciate your review :))
Carol
Comment from Joan E.
You and pantygynt are such overachievers--choosing all three quotes! Thanks for the Latin translation of the words you wove into your poem--my grasp is definitely less than yours. I enjoyed your rhymes and rhythmic flow. Happy holidays- Joan
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2016
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You and pantygynt are such overachievers--choosing all three quotes! Thanks for the Latin translation of the words you wove into your poem--my grasp is definitely less than yours. I enjoyed your rhymes and rhythmic flow. Happy holidays- Joan
Comment Written 19-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2016
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Thank you Joan, and I'd also like to thank Google Translate, and Youtube for putting the lyrics in Latin of a few of those old, traditional Christmas songs (the best kind, in my opinion).
Wishing you a very Happy Holiday, Joan!
Carol
Comment from Just2Write
I'm not familiar with Latin - so you'll need someone else to jump in on that point - but you did very well with the rest of the poem(s)
I tried my first one of these today. I'm hopeful I was on the right track.
You have created a great form here, Carol. This was a pleasure to read - and it's great seeing some of the quotes that others have written that are still an inspiration to writers and readers alike.
Rose.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2016
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I'm not familiar with Latin - so you'll need someone else to jump in on that point - but you did very well with the rest of the poem(s)
I tried my first one of these today. I'm hopeful I was on the right track.
You have created a great form here, Carol. This was a pleasure to read - and it's great seeing some of the quotes that others have written that are still an inspiration to writers and readers alike.
Rose.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2016
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Thank you, I do like the form, and Pantygynt helped me with the Latin. He had it in school, and I would have asked him when I posted but it was the middle of the night in his corner of the world :))
I will look at yours now!
Carol
Comment from w.j.debi
Nicely done. Combing quotes artistically and having them flow together to make sense is quite a talent. Good use of enjambment to bring all the lines together and move from one thought to another.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
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Nicely done. Combing quotes artistically and having them flow together to make sense is quite a talent. Good use of enjambment to bring all the lines together and move from one thought to another.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
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Thank you! I was totally unmotivated by the quotes at first, but with this potlatch, you have to sally forth and try to write anyway. The results are often interesting :))
Thanks for reading all my latest works! I appreciate it,
Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
I like not knowing if something I read is right or wrong. That way I don't waste time worrying about mistakes, and believe it or not, I can enjoy it just as much as if it were perfectly correct. LOL! We don't have to know everything or always be right. I mean, I watch people every day who drive themselves crazy trying to prove to everyone they know more than anyone else about everything. When in truth, they do a much better job of proving just the opposite. LOL! Thanks for another fine poem, Latin and all. :-)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2016
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I like not knowing if something I read is right or wrong. That way I don't waste time worrying about mistakes, and believe it or not, I can enjoy it just as much as if it were perfectly correct. LOL! We don't have to know everything or always be right. I mean, I watch people every day who drive themselves crazy trying to prove to everyone they know more than anyone else about everything. When in truth, they do a much better job of proving just the opposite. LOL! Thanks for another fine poem, Latin and all. :-)
Comment Written 18-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2016
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Lol, you're like me. I always preferred going to Mass if it was in a different language. When in Europe, I heard mass in Hungarian and Latin (at the Vatican!!) and I quite enjoyed it that way. When I was a kid, I never listened anyway, ha ha. Sorry, I'm nothing if not irreverent.
Wishing you a wonderful holiday!!
Carol
Comment from BeasPeas
Very nicely composed and rhymed using all three quotes. Your reference to Latin and spirituality is welcomed and well done. Image is striking and perfect for your piece. Marilyn
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
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Very nicely composed and rhymed using all three quotes. Your reference to Latin and spirituality is welcomed and well done. Image is striking and perfect for your piece. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2016
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This sort of thing is my favorite part of the holidays (other than the Holly King and the old mythology) I like the traditional, old songs done in Latin. So beautiful!
Carol
Comment from Leineco
Being of Catholic upbringing, I found the addition of Latin
phrases added a certain amount of gravitas to this triptych :-)
There's just something grand about hearing Christmas hymns
sung in such an ancient and vowel laden language.
And I love that the heart of each triad can be culled and excerpted
to produce such a dulcet canto
The sacred sound
of ancient bells
on hallowed ground,
where fealty dwells...
washed out the moon
in waves of light;
a morning hewn
in rose and white.
Beloved peace
and stillness; let
my end be just
so sweet and still.
Beautifully done Carol :-)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2016
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Being of Catholic upbringing, I found the addition of Latin
phrases added a certain amount of gravitas to this triptych :-)
There's just something grand about hearing Christmas hymns
sung in such an ancient and vowel laden language.
And I love that the heart of each triad can be culled and excerpted
to produce such a dulcet canto
The sacred sound
of ancient bells
on hallowed ground,
where fealty dwells...
washed out the moon
in waves of light;
a morning hewn
in rose and white.
Beloved peace
and stillness; let
my end be just
so sweet and still.
Beautifully done Carol :-)
Comment Written 18-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2016
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Thank you SO much, I just love the old, traditional Christmas songs in Latin, and this was a way of expressing that. I love that you said it has gravitas, which makes me very happy.
Gaudete Noel!!
Carol
