Poetry For Christmas, pen 10
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Bethlehem's Star"assorted styles of poems about Christmas
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Comment from frogbook
A beautiful retelling of the Christmas story with a haunting ending noting the plans sometimes gone awry in this world. Beautiful presentation also.
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A beautiful retelling of the Christmas story with a haunting ending noting the plans sometimes gone awry in this world. Beautiful presentation also.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2016
Comment from AnnaLinda
Dawn,
This is a very touching Christmas poem you have penned.
I must admit that your third stanza is my favorite where
you stepped away from the traditional scene and made
it very personal. Beautiful!.
Very nice ending couplet as well. This is a sonnet, no?
Hey, you will never have to worry about me critiquing
your sonnets...lol
Thank you for this wonderful Christmas gift.
Linda
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2016
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Dawn,
This is a very touching Christmas poem you have penned.
I must admit that your third stanza is my favorite where
you stepped away from the traditional scene and made
it very personal. Beautiful!.
Very nice ending couplet as well. This is a sonnet, no?
Hey, you will never have to worry about me critiquing
your sonnets...lol
Thank you for this wonderful Christmas gift.
Linda
Comment Written 23-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2016
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Er, uh, um...no, not exactly a sonnet...LOL. It started OUT to be an Italian sonnet, BUT...you know...hahaha - by the second line that bratty muse took over and did exactly as she pleased. (*grin*).
Thank you so much for this lovely review, Linda. I'm so pleased you liked it, especially that the third stanza is your favorite - it's mine, too.
Merry Christmas!
Dawn
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Yes, I think poems are better when we let our muse take over. Thanks for allowing her that freedom
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Thank YOU for your kind encouragement. :)
Comment from krys123
Merry Christmas and a joyous and glorious New Year, Dawn;
-just like the drummer boy who had not a gift is his but just the rhythm of his drumming I have most sixes to give you a just peace and love in my heart for this miraculously written piece of poetry.
-Being written in iambic pentameter and the account of Jesus's birth was written so eloquently and with such descriptive and expressive detail.
-The enjambment flowed fluidly throughout the writing without a hiccup or a syntactical break in the reading and the writing of your poem and was completely understandable in its context and conceptual theme.
-Thank you for sharing this elegant poem and take care and have a good one with peace and love and happiness throughout the new year.
Alex
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Merry Christmas and a joyous and glorious New Year, Dawn;
-just like the drummer boy who had not a gift is his but just the rhythm of his drumming I have most sixes to give you a just peace and love in my heart for this miraculously written piece of poetry.
-Being written in iambic pentameter and the account of Jesus's birth was written so eloquently and with such descriptive and expressive detail.
-The enjambment flowed fluidly throughout the writing without a hiccup or a syntactical break in the reading and the writing of your poem and was completely understandable in its context and conceptual theme.
-Thank you for sharing this elegant poem and take care and have a good one with peace and love and happiness throughout the new year.
Alex
Comment Written 23-Dec-2016
Comment from Gloria ....
What a gorgeous Christmas poem, Dawn. You've told the story with great imagery in perfect meter and rhyme that reads so seamlessly.
A superb post that began as an Italian sonnet. HAAAAAA.
Merry Christmas to you.
Gloria
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What a gorgeous Christmas poem, Dawn. You've told the story with great imagery in perfect meter and rhyme that reads so seamlessly.
A superb post that began as an Italian sonnet. HAAAAAA.
Merry Christmas to you.
Gloria
Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for the stirring music and notes about the Scriptures that helped to inspire your sonnet. I enjoyed your retelling the Christmas story and your rhymes, plus your engagement with the weeping "star". Well done! Here's to fulfilling the "plan"!- Joan
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Thank you for the stirring music and notes about the Scriptures that helped to inspire your sonnet. I enjoyed your retelling the Christmas story and your rhymes, plus your engagement with the weeping "star". Well done! Here's to fulfilling the "plan"!- Joan
Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Lovely Dawn, just lovely. It doesn't matter the form the poem is a jewel that will stand on its own. Well done my friend and Merry Christmas to you and yours.God Bless you. Nancy
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Lovely Dawn, just lovely. It doesn't matter the form the poem is a jewel that will stand on its own. Well done my friend and Merry Christmas to you and yours.God Bless you. Nancy
Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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HAHAHAHAHA! You are the first one to call me on this WILD modification - let's face it; I'd better change my notes. *grin* I started out intending to write an Italian sonnet, then modified to suit my muse, who THEN took over completely! (*smile*)
Blessings, my friend, and thank you for a lovely review. Merry Christmas to you and yours, Nancy. :)) XXOO Dawn
Comment from Mary Wakeford
This is glorious in presentation and in content, Dawn. The accompanying instrumentals only add to the content and holiness felt throughout the poetry. I felt like I was in church for a minute there, but not in a preachy kind of way, more in peaceful solace. Beautiful.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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This is glorious in presentation and in content, Dawn. The accompanying instrumentals only add to the content and holiness felt throughout the poetry. I felt like I was in church for a minute there, but not in a preachy kind of way, more in peaceful solace. Beautiful.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Oh, I am so glad that's how you felt about it! Thank you for this lovely review, Mary.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Christmas poem, about the star of Bethlehem that announces the birth of Christ to the shepherds and wise men, who acknowledged Him. We can just hope and pray that we did enough to be included in His final plan for the human race.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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A very well-written Christmas poem, about the star of Bethlehem that announces the birth of Christ to the shepherds and wise men, who acknowledged Him. We can just hope and pray that we did enough to be included in His final plan for the human race.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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Oh YES!!! Thank you, Sandra.
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written poem/song for Christmas dear Dawn, you are a very skilful writer, there seems no end to your skill, I love this beautifully crafted and manicured work, absolutely perfect poem for Christmas. I felt sorry for the rich young ruler, Christ asked him to give away eveything he owned, and follow Christ. but he was unable wonderful piece, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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A beautifully written poem/song for Christmas dear Dawn, you are a very skilful writer, there seems no end to your skill, I love this beautifully crafted and manicured work, absolutely perfect poem for Christmas. I felt sorry for the rich young ruler, Christ asked him to give away eveything he owned, and follow Christ. but he was unable wonderful piece, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 22-Dec-2016
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2016
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this, Roy - thank you for a most rewarding and generous review!
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I'm so glad you enjoyed this, Roy - thank you for a most rewarding and generous review!
Comment from DR DIP
nICEWRITE IN THE SPIRIT OF cHRISTMAS. i HAVE READ MANY cHRISTMAS POEMS ON THIS EXACT SUBJECT yours is certainly up there
sorry about the upper font just realised ..too busy focusing on the keys lol
dip
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nICEWRITE IN THE SPIRIT OF cHRISTMAS. i HAVE READ MANY cHRISTMAS POEMS ON THIS EXACT SUBJECT yours is certainly up there
sorry about the upper font just realised ..too busy focusing on the keys lol
dip
Comment Written 21-Dec-2016
