Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Good

This meets the contest requirements nicely and is a great story line as many folks have made some pretty wrong moves getting involved with folks they have met online and such. I rated down due to the errors in this piece as one should always put their best foot forward when they enter a competition and this comes across a little sloppy.
"on het tiny" - should be her.
"and now she was curls up on the couch" - should be curled.
"getting laid were stating to dwindle" - should be starting.
It would also read better if you fixed the breaks which occur in the middle of paragraphs. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017

Thanks ... I never did finish it

Comment from giraffmang

Good

Hi there,

I think you may have posted your story by mistake as there are only a few words, not even an entire sentence posted. Just a heads up

GMG

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017

Thanks ...I did

Comment from Moon baby

Excellent

Like the artwork, did you create it? If so, you are a very good artist. I'm not sure who got the short end of the stick in that situation, the guy doesn't look like much of a prize either. My character has made so many wrong choices throughout her lifetime and suffered all the consequences that went with those choices. Takes some of us longer to finally get it. All you can do is learn from your mistakes and hope you remember not to keep repeating them. Hey, everybody needs love, right?

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017

Thanks