The End
Enough of this stuff37 total reviews
Comment from Jackarrie
Ha ha,
I love your 50 word story, no doubt is is humourous, I know the nature of cats and I love the antics they get up to.
Well done, I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Ha ha,
I love your 50 word story, no doubt is is humourous, I know the nature of cats and I love the antics they get up to.
Well done, I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you. So glad you found the story amusing. That was my intention. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from LaRosa
This is so humorous, love it.
While reading, the rhythm felt like a poem.
There seemed to be 3 parts to the story. Perhaps you could break it up into paragraphs? It might give more interest to each particular thought and action.
Ex) "My husband.......to the floor.
"Pepper.....husband is screaming."
"The end of story and everything else.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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This is so humorous, love it.
While reading, the rhythm felt like a poem.
There seemed to be 3 parts to the story. Perhaps you could break it up into paragraphs? It might give more interest to each particular thought and action.
Ex) "My husband.......to the floor.
"Pepper.....husband is screaming."
"The end of story and everything else.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you. I will look at it again. It is hard to get all one wants into such a short word count. Sometimes it is a bit disjointed.
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In MY opinion, it's not disjointed. But separation of thoughts often gives impact. In a story telling sense, it seems to me that we make it interesting orally by slowing and accenting thoughts. That's why I thought it might work just as well to do that in the written form. You still get a story and you have the correct number of words.
Comment from Spitfire
Talk about a big climax. My cat did this to a barking dog and he let out a howl and never provoked my Siamese again.
Looks as if the new wife will have to decide which one is to go.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Talk about a big climax. My cat did this to a barking dog and he let out a howl and never provoked my Siamese again.
Looks as if the new wife will have to decide which one is to go.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you. I'm glad you found the story amusing and I thank you for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from GWinterwin
Oh my that would be the very worst ever. Cat would not be allowed in my house if there was any indication of love making about to happen. Good picture of the cat, but she has to go at certain times.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Oh my that would be the very worst ever. Cat would not be allowed in my house if there was any indication of love making about to happen. Good picture of the cat, but she has to go at certain times.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you. I agree, but it is just a story that popped into my mind on the spur of the moment. LOL
Comment from Sixty70
Probably not so funny at the time! Cats. They attack without rhyme or reason.
Well written and so difficult to stick to only 50 words. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Probably not so funny at the time! Cats. They attack without rhyme or reason.
Well written and so difficult to stick to only 50 words. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you. I agree cats are highly unpredictable. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Oh my gosh, this is the most hilarious story, and you told it so well. There is no strain to the story, as are many that try to say a lot in a few words, and it is insanely funny!
Good luck in the contest, my friend,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Oh my gosh, this is the most hilarious story, and you told it so well. There is no strain to the story, as are many that try to say a lot in a few words, and it is insanely funny!
Good luck in the contest, my friend,
Rhonda
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you. I'm so glad you found the story amusing. It just popped into my mind when I read the contest prompt. Thank you for reading and commenting.
Comment from mermaids
You have me laughing here. My cat Gideon use to get the blanket off my feet while I was asleep, scratch my feet to get me to wake up to feed him. So scratching a bare butt is totally real. Excellent feline tale.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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You have me laughing here. My cat Gideon use to get the blanket off my feet while I was asleep, scratch my feet to get me to wake up to feed him. So scratching a bare butt is totally real. Excellent feline tale.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you. Glad you understand this cat thing and enjoyed the story. One never knows what a cat might do at any given time.
Comment from LIJ Red
Cats do mystifying things. Five stars.
But since this is a contest entry, let me tell you some changes I believe judges would like to see. Oh, listen to me. I haven't entered a half dozen contests, and have never won any.
Nonetheless for what it's worth: First drop the present tense.
My husband and I were newly married. We were young lovers in the middle of a passionate embrace, lost in desire,sighing and moaning. The blankets fell to the floor. Pepper, the cat, sprang with claws extended on my beloved's bare butt. Hubby screamed. End of our mood and story.
Just my opinion. Good luck.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Cats do mystifying things. Five stars.
But since this is a contest entry, let me tell you some changes I believe judges would like to see. Oh, listen to me. I haven't entered a half dozen contests, and have never won any.
Nonetheless for what it's worth: First drop the present tense.
My husband and I were newly married. We were young lovers in the middle of a passionate embrace, lost in desire,sighing and moaning. The blankets fell to the floor. Pepper, the cat, sprang with claws extended on my beloved's bare butt. Hubby screamed. End of our mood and story.
Just my opinion. Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you. I value your opinion, but I have often used the present tense and won several contests that way. In this type of contest, it is the voters, like you and me, who decide the winner. I have found that present tense works quite well at times. It is just a matter of preference.
Comment from William Ross
hahah , now I can just picture this happening. lol good entry on the prompt,should do well, good luck on this and have a wonderful day
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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hahah , now I can just picture this happening. lol good entry on the prompt,should do well, good luck on this and have a wonderful day
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you, William my old friend. I find it fun to write these short-short stories sometimes. It is hard to say all that must be said, but it can be done.
Comment from Leineco
OMG. . .I am laughing my butt off!!
Been there. . .or close enough. . .there's nothing
quite like a cat's claws or a dog's cold nose to
throw a cold bucket on romance!!!
Very funny write. GOOD LUCK in the voting booth :-)
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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OMG. . .I am laughing my butt off!!
Been there. . .or close enough. . .there's nothing
quite like a cat's claws or a dog's cold nose to
throw a cold bucket on romance!!!
Very funny write. GOOD LUCK in the voting booth :-)
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank you. Yeah, I forgot about a dog's cold nose that would have worked too. Thanks so much for reading and commenting.
