A Gleam of Hope
...in our children5 total reviews
Comment from Franklin Price
Wonderfully written poem that gives so much hope, promise and support to our children. we need more hope such as this. Thanks for writing and sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Wonderfully written poem that gives so much hope, promise and support to our children. we need more hope such as this. Thanks for writing and sharing.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Thank you! Thought it was to focus on the positive.
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It was to focus on the positive. It did and quite well.
Comment from Rasmine
Good poem! It has a good beat and good rhyme, just like the poem. This was a fun contest. Good luck in the contest.
This poem should be recited in the schools. :)
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Good poem! It has a good beat and good rhyme, just like the poem. This was a fun contest. Good luck in the contest.
This poem should be recited in the schools. :)
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Haha! In the schools? Never thought of that. Thank you!
Comment from Margaret Ford
First, I want to say that your meter and rhyming is perfect. I breathe such a sigh of relief when I see that. Thank you, thank you, thank you...
Also, the use of "star" meaning a child was very imaginative and quite lovely, as were all the words of this poem. I really enjoyed reading it -- several times -- and I wish you well in the contest. Margaret
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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First, I want to say that your meter and rhyming is perfect. I breathe such a sigh of relief when I see that. Thank you, thank you, thank you...
Also, the use of "star" meaning a child was very imaginative and quite lovely, as were all the words of this poem. I really enjoyed reading it -- several times -- and I wish you well in the contest. Margaret
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Thank you(
Comment from Janet Foor
An excellent twist on this famous nursery rhyme. I enjoyed your Twinkle Twinkle Twist entry.
Very nicely done and good luck in the contest
Blessings
Janet.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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An excellent twist on this famous nursery rhyme. I enjoyed your Twinkle Twinkle Twist entry.
Very nicely done and good luck in the contest
Blessings
Janet.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much!
Comment from marybell1
I lovely concept of "twinkle twinkle little star." Unfortunately the last two lines do not rhyme. e.g.- 'dreams' and 'supreme'. Also the last line does not flow as it has the incorrect number of syllables. Otherwise a lovely poem.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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I lovely concept of "twinkle twinkle little star." Unfortunately the last two lines do not rhyme. e.g.- 'dreams' and 'supreme'. Also the last line does not flow as it has the incorrect number of syllables. Otherwise a lovely poem.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Rules of the contest said close rhyming was allowed. However I will see how I can improve the last before the deadline tonight.
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Glad I could help.
Cheers.
Marybell1.
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Hope you get in in time.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.
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I did and came in third...Behind Bosom Beauty
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Congratulations.
Marybell1.
