One last kiss
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Comment from MARIANNE GI
Oh my God you made me cry! It was a wonderful poem...your life story I suppose? The way you write flows like water...I enjoyed it till the end. It is a blessing to have a second opportunity in life to meet the person that you longed for, for so many years and still have feelings for each other. It is something like a happy ending and not many people have this blessing to live it again. Congratulations for your work, really touching and gives hope
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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Oh my God you made me cry! It was a wonderful poem...your life story I suppose? The way you write flows like water...I enjoyed it till the end. It is a blessing to have a second opportunity in life to meet the person that you longed for, for so many years and still have feelings for each other. It is something like a happy ending and not many people have this blessing to live it again. Congratulations for your work, really touching and gives hope
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2020
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Thank you so much Marianne. OMG, I can't believe you found this in my archives
I still say this poem when I recite at the local nursing homes and when I did my live show
thanks Again, much appreciated
Comment from dragonpoet
You are right this poem has strong romantic sentiment. It shows how strong love can be. Their love lasted forever. It took them a long time to find each other and the love just came out.
I like the flow of the story and the easy abab rhyme. You have strong images and emotion in this.
My one question is, if they loved each other so much why didn't they write to one another. Maybe they would have gotten together sooner. But then the sentiment would be there.
Congratulations on the win.
Keep it up.
Joan
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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You are right this poem has strong romantic sentiment. It shows how strong love can be. Their love lasted forever. It took them a long time to find each other and the love just came out.
I like the flow of the story and the easy abab rhyme. You have strong images and emotion in this.
My one question is, if they loved each other so much why didn't they write to one another. Maybe they would have gotten together sooner. But then the sentiment would be there.
Congratulations on the win.
Keep it up.
Joan
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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Thankyou so much for your supportive review.
The question you raised is probably valid but the whole point of the poem is lost and found love after so many years andthe surprise of accidentally finding each other in the nursing home all these years later its rather ironic. Whereas if they had kept in contact by letter all these years it would take away the sentiment and impact I feel.. Well that's my take on everything lol
dip
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You're welcome.
Yes I know the sentiment would be ruined. But maybe they would have married each other and a lifetime of marriage could be expounded in verse.
A different kind of sentiment.
Joan
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Well that's another story, similar to the notebook I suppose.
dip
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I agree.
Joan
Comment from Dawn Munro
I think the addition of that second verse makes the story more complete - the poem was outstanding to start with, the sentiment so wonderful, but now you've added a beautiful setting to the diamond. (That's what 'I think'. *smile*)
xx Dawn
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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I think the addition of that second verse makes the story more complete - the poem was outstanding to start with, the sentiment so wonderful, but now you've added a beautiful setting to the diamond. (That's what 'I think'. *smile*)
xx Dawn
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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THAT, my friend is exactly the response I was hoping for thankyou so much Dawn
xxdip
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Great! It's perfect, Dip. :)
Comment from Maureen's Pen
A beautiful poem, Doc, and an well deserved win. Loved the feelings within this poem, it speaks even between the lines. I loved it.
Congrats, my freind on your win.
Hugs
m
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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A beautiful poem, Doc, and an well deserved win. Loved the feelings within this poem, it speaks even between the lines. I loved it.
Congrats, my freind on your win.
Hugs
m
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Thankyou so much Maureen. As a great fan of your poetry I thought your entry was beautiful as I thought they were all excellent and feel humbled and honoured to win but it certainly means so much to me.
I have actually added another verse. I have always felt it needed another verse at the beginning. Hence verse 2 has been added to complete the love story in the early days.
xxdip
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I love the addition, Dip, bang up job my friend.
Hugs
m
Comment from Susan Chetcuti
Congratulations on winning your poem, One Last Kiss. I can't believe I missed reading it before. I must say it is an exceptional piece. It almost brought a tear to my eye as I've worked in a nursing home and know exactly how it is with couples that end up there. Again, I really enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Congratulations on winning your poem, One Last Kiss. I can't believe I missed reading it before. I must say it is an exceptional piece. It almost brought a tear to my eye as I've worked in a nursing home and know exactly how it is with couples that end up there. Again, I really enjoyed it.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Thankyou so much Susan Your review is greatly appreciated glad it pulled on your heart string.
dip
Comment from Leineco
Congrats on this well deserved win Doc :-)
It's a gorgeous poem expressing the mysterious endurance of
love through years apart. . .and the joy of managing to find each
other again, when the time is right :-)
Wonderfully done :-)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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Congrats on this well deserved win Doc :-)
It's a gorgeous poem expressing the mysterious endurance of
love through years apart. . .and the joy of managing to find each
other again, when the time is right :-)
Wonderfully done :-)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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Thankyou so much Leineco much appreciated glad you think it was worthy that means so much when my fellow Fanstorians feel that way Thank you again
xdip
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You know Leineco, I always thought this poem needed one more verse at the start to complete the love story So I added the second verse. I think it completes it. I sort of wish I had added it before it was nominated. I think its better with the verse added.
dip
Comment from Pinkpuppy
I liked it! It was nice and it rhymed! But I would suggest adding more detail, and putting in your heart. Pouring it out to the reader!
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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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I liked it! It was nice and it rhymed! But I would suggest adding more detail, and putting in your heart. Pouring it out to the reader!
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Comment Written 06-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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huh?
Comment from Ric Myworld
Outstanding poem, my friend, one of those that has etched a place in my heart and will always come to mind when I think of similar days. We haven't crossed paths in a while, but I'm sure glad that I didn't miss the chance to read this piece. Great poem! :-)
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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Outstanding poem, my friend, one of those that has etched a place in my heart and will always come to mind when I think of similar days. We haven't crossed paths in a while, but I'm sure glad that I didn't miss the chance to read this piece. Great poem! :-)
Comment Written 06-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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Thankyou so much Ric your comments mean so much to me.
So glad you liked the poem
dip
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Thankyou so much Ric. you know , I always felt it was missing a verse at the start to complete the love story so I added the second verse. I think it completes it. Wish i had it in when nominated I always felt it was lacking something
dip
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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 A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for the recognition this post has received from the FanStory community. While this was not a Contest Committee decision, the committee recognizes this achievement with a seven star review. |
Comment Written 06-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2017
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WOW! I am over the moon You just can't conceive how proud I am and the gratitude i have for my fellow Fanstorians. This is the biggest compliment one could ever receive and I know it is special. In the 4 years of coming to fanstory this is my most precious moment. if this is as far as I go as poem of the month consideration I am a happy man.
Thankyou so much. much appreciated
dip
Comment from w.j.debi
This is a tender tale of love lost and then found again, a lifetime later. All is not lost and the time ahead can still be shar d and appreciat and even more.
Excellent rhymes and near rhymes. Even better story telling.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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This is a tender tale of love lost and then found again, a lifetime later. All is not lost and the time ahead can still be shar d and appreciat and even more.
Excellent rhymes and near rhymes. Even better story telling.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much Wj much appreciated.
just curious you say near rhyme where do you mean
Again can be pronounced two ways phonetically this one was to rhyme with when. Is that what you were referring to? just curious that's all
dip
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Passed and last were the ones that seemed near rhymes to me. The hard 'd' and the 't' are extremely close. Like you state, probably pronounciation.
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with respect rhyming is the phonetic sound in this case I thought 'passed' and 'last' were phonetically fine to pass as rhyme but that's just me I suppose.
in Australia passed and last are pronounced the same as is passed and past. Being an American site i am constantly spell checked for my spelling of certain words and some others continually pick up on my pronunciation for rhyming verse
respectfully dip
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I get it. I have a list of words that I never use in rhyme because of regional pronunciation such as 'been'. I'll make a note of passed.
