2017 Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "To Thine Own Self-Be True"A collection of my poems
31 total reviews
Comment from ronnie k
I for one understand and admire the poetry that is written by the hearts moments, the ability to write in feeling is a gift that you take to the limit, the rain made this all come together, great emotions.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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I for one understand and admire the poetry that is written by the hearts moments, the ability to write in feeling is a gift that you take to the limit, the rain made this all come together, great emotions.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Ronnie, you are very kind and I appreciate your review and feedback. Take care.
Gypsy
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hi MariVal,
I had read this when you first posted and am pleased to see you have revised parts of the poem and removed the sub header information. I'm doubly glad I came back to read the poem. It is much better with the revisions. It reads poetically and creates a contemplative mood in the reader's mind. I particularly liked the line about life and passion.
I do wonder if you meant "you are not here" rather than "there."
A good read.
Ray
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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Hi MariVal,
I had read this when you first posted and am pleased to see you have revised parts of the poem and removed the sub header information. I'm doubly glad I came back to read the poem. It is much better with the revisions. It reads poetically and creates a contemplative mood in the reader's mind. I particularly liked the line about life and passion.
I do wonder if you meant "you are not here" rather than "there."
A good read.
Ray
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2017
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It doesn't make sense to others but it does to me. I am in love with someone who lives miles away from me. He is 'there' and I am 'here'.. or vice versa.. it was a selfish posting. I needed to write the way I felt. All is well now. Sometimes art helps purge the soul. I am lucky that the few people who read me are kind and understanding like you are and forgive my nutty outbursts.
Take care, my friend. I hope you feel well.
MariVal aka Gypsy
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I've written a few of those too. They are solace for the soul as well as an effective pressure valve. Like you, I've either edited or disabled. Again, your edits rounded the rough edges.
Thanks for the insight into the there or here comment. I completely understand now.
I'm having fits with my post-surgery eye. :-(
Ray
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I am sorry, Ray. Take care of your eyes and don't read stupid reviews and comments. Those are not as important as your health and I want you well. You hear, young man! LOL Seriously now, thank you for the wise and kind words. They mean a lot to me.
Best regards and lots of gypsy hugs,
MariVal
Comment from Thal1959
Very well written for a free verse - it has the occasional rhyme or hint at rhyme due to the repetition of a word or phrase. The brevity of the lines creates a sort of rhythm. I would complain about the unnecessary use of the word "s**t," but I know you don't give a shinola.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Very well written for a free verse - it has the occasional rhyme or hint at rhyme due to the repetition of a word or phrase. The brevity of the lines creates a sort of rhythm. I would complain about the unnecessary use of the word "s**t," but I know you don't give a shinola.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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LOL that is funny. Actually, I do care about kind feedback. I will take a look.
Thank you, honey, I appreciate your readership.
Gypsy hugs
Gypsy
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It was my pleasure.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Very creative. I like the matter of fact way this poem explains the feelings of the moment. The repetition of I don't care works well. Great job.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Very creative. I like the matter of fact way this poem explains the feelings of the moment. The repetition of I don't care works well. Great job.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017
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Thank you, honey, I appreciate your readership.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from rspoet
Hello my friend,
Grey will fade away, and rain soak into the soil where it belongs
and the sun will shine again.
One thing I learned long ago: no matter what you say or write,
no matter how well you say it, no matter how intelligent, creative or inspiring it is,
there will always be someone who doesn't like it.
The Impressionist painters were not even allowed to show in the national exhibits
and had to hold their own, Vincent sold two minor paintings in his entire life,
they walked out on Stravinsky's concerts. But look how each is admired today.
You do care. And so do many others.
I think you add a great deal to this site, and I'm sure, outside of it as well.
Continue to write, teach and inspire.
And have FUN.
For it is poetry.
RS
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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Hello my friend,
Grey will fade away, and rain soak into the soil where it belongs
and the sun will shine again.
One thing I learned long ago: no matter what you say or write,
no matter how well you say it, no matter how intelligent, creative or inspiring it is,
there will always be someone who doesn't like it.
The Impressionist painters were not even allowed to show in the national exhibits
and had to hold their own, Vincent sold two minor paintings in his entire life,
they walked out on Stravinsky's concerts. But look how each is admired today.
You do care. And so do many others.
I think you add a great deal to this site, and I'm sure, outside of it as well.
Continue to write, teach and inspire.
And have FUN.
For it is poetry.
RS
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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Thank you, my friend, your kind words and wisdom mean a lot to me. I will not forget your kind gesture.
Gypsy
Comment from marinadawn
I am not familiar enough with Haiku to be able to comment on that style of poetry , but I enjoy reading other peoples sentiments expressed creatively .
I think its admirable to strive to thy own self be true , we are always the experts on who we are and our experiences and its sharing of that that enriches our world
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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I am not familiar enough with Haiku to be able to comment on that style of poetry , but I enjoy reading other peoples sentiments expressed creatively .
I think its admirable to strive to thy own self be true , we are always the experts on who we are and our experiences and its sharing of that that enriches our world
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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thank you, marina
gypsy
Comment from krys123
Greetings and cheers, Gypsy; MUCH BETTER AND DIRECTLY SITUATIONAL ENDING
THAT SPEAKS MORE FROM A UN-FETED HEART THAT IS MORE UNDERSTANDING TO THE INNER WORKINGS OF YOUR DEMANDING SPIRIT. BRAVO!!!
-though unsettling are the defeatist words of this poem that one is chosen suicide over being dismissed from the one they love. Though the topic is one of grieving and sadness the composition itself is well-written in both structural imagery, which uses simile and metaphors, and the rhythmic flow of the writing itself.
-The picture of a woman walking away Down a Lonesome Road is actually very befitting for this poem in actually sets up the tone for the reader to read this poem with a sad enlightenment.
-Thank you for definitely sharing and posting this writing and take care and have a good one especially with the one you care for.
Alex
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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Greetings and cheers, Gypsy; MUCH BETTER AND DIRECTLY SITUATIONAL ENDING
THAT SPEAKS MORE FROM A UN-FETED HEART THAT IS MORE UNDERSTANDING TO THE INNER WORKINGS OF YOUR DEMANDING SPIRIT. BRAVO!!!
-though unsettling are the defeatist words of this poem that one is chosen suicide over being dismissed from the one they love. Though the topic is one of grieving and sadness the composition itself is well-written in both structural imagery, which uses simile and metaphors, and the rhythmic flow of the writing itself.
-The picture of a woman walking away Down a Lonesome Road is actually very befitting for this poem in actually sets up the tone for the reader to read this poem with a sad enlightenment.
-Thank you for definitely sharing and posting this writing and take care and have a good one especially with the one you care for.
Alex
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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Thank you, my friend :)
Gypsy
Comment from Unspoken94
I don't agree. I think you do care. You care a great
deal. If you didn't you wouldn't be writing this. I hope
you continue to care. Words do hurt and no one has
the right to use words as a weapon. This is a wonderful
declaration and I hope you continue to speak out. -Bill
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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I don't agree. I think you do care. You care a great
deal. If you didn't you wouldn't be writing this. I hope
you continue to care. Words do hurt and no one has
the right to use words as a weapon. This is a wonderful
declaration and I hope you continue to speak out. -Bill
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the awesome review. I really appreciate it, my friend. God bless you.
Gypsy
Comment from Winslow
Dear Gypsy,
It jolted me to read the line life is not worth......I cuss and swear but I was enjoying this poem and then wham. The last line is disturbing-to you really mean it.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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Dear Gypsy,
It jolted me to read the line life is not worth......I cuss and swear but I was enjoying this poem and then wham. The last line is disturbing-to you really mean it.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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I had a very bad day yesterday and my writing reflects my mood. I will change that. My day was disturbing too.
Thank you for reading.
Comment from Sasha
This is very disconcerting. Please do not leave. I have learned so much from you and I know others feel the same. As you say in your poem, be true to yourself, keep writing and sharing your talent and work. Don't let a few cruel, jealous people push you away.
Be true to yourself. Keep writing and sharing your work.
God bless you!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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This is very disconcerting. Please do not leave. I have learned so much from you and I know others feel the same. As you say in your poem, be true to yourself, keep writing and sharing your talent and work. Don't let a few cruel, jealous people push you away.
Be true to yourself. Keep writing and sharing your work.
God bless you!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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I don't want to leave but things happen sometimes that are out of my control.
Thank you, honey,
Gypsy
