2017 Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Cleveland School Shooting"A collection of my poems
13 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I don't know how I missed this post originally, but I am glad I noticed it today, while digging into your attic. The picture is horrific but grabs our attention. You captured the scene with your few words and intensified it with your use of alliteration. I hope the entry was well received in the competition, but I am sorry you had to experience this event. Sighs- Joan
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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I don't know how I missed this post originally, but I am glad I noticed it today, while digging into your attic. The picture is horrific but grabs our attention. You captured the scene with your few words and intensified it with your use of alliteration. I hope the entry was well received in the competition, but I am sorry you had to experience this event. Sighs- Joan
Comment Written 06-May-2017
reply by the author on 06-May-2017
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Thank you, Joan, it's so nice of you to dig out this old post.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kathleenspalding
Moving nine one one poem whose subject leaves me without words. I appreciate the author's notes. I'm am glad your son was not hurt. Did not realize how much Michael Jackson did. Good for him. Thank you for writing and sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Moving nine one one poem whose subject leaves me without words. I appreciate the author's notes. I'm am glad your son was not hurt. Did not realize how much Michael Jackson did. Good for him. Thank you for writing and sharing.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Gypsy
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You're welcome
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 9-1-1 poem. It is terrible to find out your child could be a victim of a shooter at the school where they have to learn lessons and become adults to serve society.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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A very well-written 9-1-1 poem. It is terrible to find out your child could be a victim of a shooter at the school where they have to learn lessons and become adults to serve society.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Your 9 - 1 - 1 poem speaks volumes. The amount of school shootings is alarming. The youth of our world should be protected and safe - but instead they are targets to make a name. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Your 9 - 1 - 1 poem speaks volumes. The amount of school shootings is alarming. The youth of our world should be protected and safe - but instead they are targets to make a name. Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2017
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Thank you for the review and kind words.
Comment from ~Dovey
Hi Mystery Poet:
This is an impactful piece for its few words. With a syllable count of 9-1-1, I can't imagine a more emotionally charged selection which would fit the nature of this contest. Thank you for sharing the back story, at first I thought I had missed something in recent news. It is good that you hold these children in your memory still today. I'm glad your son wasn't harmed in this tragic event.
Good luck in the contest!
Kim
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Mystery Poet:
This is an impactful piece for its few words. With a syllable count of 9-1-1, I can't imagine a more emotionally charged selection which would fit the nature of this contest. Thank you for sharing the back story, at first I thought I had missed something in recent news. It is good that you hold these children in your memory still today. I'm glad your son wasn't harmed in this tragic event.
Good luck in the contest!
Kim
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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It happened in 1989. Good job, excellent review, thank you, my friend. :)
Comment from Thal1959
Very well conceived and composed expression of an existential theme. The image renders the subject exquisitely. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Very well conceived and composed expression of an existential theme. The image renders the subject exquisitely. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Good job, excellent review, thank you, my friend. :)
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You're welcome -it was my pleasure.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Poem addresses well what sometimes appears to be an epidemic in the United States, school shootings.
With all the violence in movies, on TV, and at home kids are constantly subjected to nowadays is it any wonder these occur?
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Poem addresses well what sometimes appears to be an epidemic in the United States, school shootings.
With all the violence in movies, on TV, and at home kids are constantly subjected to nowadays is it any wonder these occur?
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
Comment from MaggieF
Chilling picture. I'm not political but this surely is a reason to have new gun laws. I can't imagine your drive to the school, and the wait, unimaginable, but the end result was good. The use of alliteration works well, the words are chilling and sadly not much changed we still have school shootings. MaggieF
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Chilling picture. I'm not political but this surely is a reason to have new gun laws. I can't imagine your drive to the school, and the wait, unimaginable, but the end result was good. The use of alliteration works well, the words are chilling and sadly not much changed we still have school shootings. MaggieF
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Good job, excellent review, thank you, my friend. :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Outstanding...gut-wrenching and truly terrifying 9-1-1 poem, Anonymous Poet.
Nothing could be more horrific than to be in a serene, supposedly safe school setting, then hearing gunshots ring out.
You just have to KNOW when that happens, it doesn't bode well.
In other words, it's gonna be a really bad day for someone.
Exceptional wording on a topic that is very near and dear to the hearts of many.
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Outstanding...gut-wrenching and truly terrifying 9-1-1 poem, Anonymous Poet.
Nothing could be more horrific than to be in a serene, supposedly safe school setting, then hearing gunshots ring out.
You just have to KNOW when that happens, it doesn't bode well.
In other words, it's gonna be a really bad day for someone.
Exceptional wording on a topic that is very near and dear to the hearts of many.
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much for the stellar review and six stars, darlin.!!!! Good job, excellent review, thank you, my friend. :)
Comment from emptypage
Wow. Powerful poem here, even without the author's notes.
I'm sorry your family had to endure such a thing... and all the families of those killed. And the other children, too. God.
The image is enough to add so much meaning, but your take is perfect. Crucified children, at the mercy of gunmen rather than a divine father, are just another sign of the times now. Back when you experienced this, it was still a rare, new, mind-blowing thing.
Beautifully done.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Wow. Powerful poem here, even without the author's notes.
I'm sorry your family had to endure such a thing... and all the families of those killed. And the other children, too. God.
The image is enough to add so much meaning, but your take is perfect. Crucified children, at the mercy of gunmen rather than a divine father, are just another sign of the times now. Back when you experienced this, it was still a rare, new, mind-blowing thing.
Beautifully done.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Thank you very much for the stellar review and six stars, darlin.!!!! Good job, excellent review, thank you, my friend. :)
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You are very welcome.
