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Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Juliet"NaPoWriMo 2017
25 total reviews
Comment from Mustang Patty
If Juliette lived now, she wouldn't even think about marrying a boy just because she wanted him. Teens today aren't held to the same standards as folks back then. A girl in today's world might have been keen to marry an older man - who would upset her parents - if he had a really cool car!
Your sonnet reads well and tells a clever tale,
~patty~
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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If Juliette lived now, she wouldn't even think about marrying a boy just because she wanted him. Teens today aren't held to the same standards as folks back then. A girl in today's world might have been keen to marry an older man - who would upset her parents - if he had a really cool car!
Your sonnet reads well and tells a clever tale,
~patty~
Comment Written 27-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2017
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Hi Patty,
And don't forget all the tattoos and piercings lol Thank you for the fun review. I think my brain revolted against the traditional 'stuffy' idea of a sonnet and this is where I ended up! lol I appreciate all of your comments.
Kim
Comment from frogbook
Very original and thought provoking. The Juliet of today? Love the wonderful ideas and it really did make me think. Refreshing and a bit humerous, much enjoyed.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Very original and thought provoking. The Juliet of today? Love the wonderful ideas and it really did make me think. Refreshing and a bit humerous, much enjoyed.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi frogbook,
Yes, I believe our modern day Juliet would have viewed Romeo in a different light. The underlying message though, in the final couplet, is that no man is worth suicide. Dying to save his life would be one thing, but never suicide. Thank you for the thoughtful comments. I'm glad you enjoyed the humor in this piece.
Kim
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Oh yes, I got that part also-Amen.
Comment from rosehill (Wendy)
The modern Juliet would probably only deign to send naked selfies and hope that Romeo would be satisfied with that since all that face-to face (or should I say hand- to-hand) is so time consuming and lacking cute word abbreviations and emojis. I giggled all through your delightful and irreverent sonnet. The form was well kept and I particularly loved the calorie and starch counting. This got my day off to a wonderful start. - Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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The modern Juliet would probably only deign to send naked selfies and hope that Romeo would be satisfied with that since all that face-to face (or should I say hand- to-hand) is so time consuming and lacking cute word abbreviations and emojis. I giggled all through your delightful and irreverent sonnet. The form was well kept and I particularly loved the calorie and starch counting. This got my day off to a wonderful start. - Wendy
Comment Written 26-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Wendy,
Thank you for giving me the little laugh I needed this morning. You are probably correct about the modern Juliet. I appreciate the comments.
Kim
Comment from sunnilicious
Teenage marriages were popular back in the 1500's. People didn't understand how to control sexual urges. It was an age that was more liberal to the arts versus church. Romeo and Juliet were sooo dramatic.
I like your optimism for Juliet in this poem. Modern. Fun. Great twist. Nice work. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Teenage marriages were popular back in the 1500's. People didn't understand how to control sexual urges. It was an age that was more liberal to the arts versus church. Romeo and Juliet were sooo dramatic.
I like your optimism for Juliet in this poem. Modern. Fun. Great twist. Nice work. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Sunni,
I'm not sure they understand how to control them now lol Thank you for the upbeat review. I appreciate your comments.
Kim
Comment from tfawcus
I think you have shown here why, in high school, students tend to groan when they hear the word 'sonnet'. The traditional sonnet is so far out of their terms of reference. This one takes us in the new direction of a thoroughly modern miss with freedom of choice, independence, and a vastly different relationship with her modern Romeo. The splendid freshness of the humour also suggests a butterfly mentality that is at odds with a lasting relationship, which gives the whole poem an extra level of spice. Making unwise fashion choices, however, was probably just as much a tragedy in Shakespearean times as it is now!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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I think you have shown here why, in high school, students tend to groan when they hear the word 'sonnet'. The traditional sonnet is so far out of their terms of reference. This one takes us in the new direction of a thoroughly modern miss with freedom of choice, independence, and a vastly different relationship with her modern Romeo. The splendid freshness of the humour also suggests a butterfly mentality that is at odds with a lasting relationship, which gives the whole poem an extra level of spice. Making unwise fashion choices, however, was probably just as much a tragedy in Shakespearean times as it is now!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2017
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Hi Tony,
Thank you so much for this exceptional review. Your uplifting review is exactly what my spirits need this morning. I appreciate all of the fun comments in full detail.
Kim
Comment from Pantygynt
Did Shakespeare have a sense of humour? I suppose so since he wrote all those so-called comedies. There is something terribly ponderous about his clowns, Feste, Touchstone and Lear's Fool, but I suppose the groundlings thought them riotously amusing. This sonnet I found more amusing than anything the great man ever wrote, but humour is as much subject to fashion as those trendy Prada bags. Actually when I read this first I thought it was an entry into the "I love you. Ha! Ha!" contest. Behind all of the fun though is a perfectly formed Shakespearean sonnet.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Did Shakespeare have a sense of humour? I suppose so since he wrote all those so-called comedies. There is something terribly ponderous about his clowns, Feste, Touchstone and Lear's Fool, but I suppose the groundlings thought them riotously amusing. This sonnet I found more amusing than anything the great man ever wrote, but humour is as much subject to fashion as those trendy Prada bags. Actually when I read this first I thought it was an entry into the "I love you. Ha! Ha!" contest. Behind all of the fun though is a perfectly formed Shakespearean sonnet.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Hi Pantygynt:
I'm happy to hear that this passes the muster as a perfectly formed Shakespearean sonnet. I think I may frame that comment. ;) I tend to shy away from sonnets, but I got this idea in my head and couldn't resist having a bit of fun. I'm thrilled that you appreciated the humour involved. My one entirely serious message is in the couplet at the end. No man is worth committing suicide over. Dying to save, absolutely, but never a reason for suicide.
Thank you for all of your awesome comments.
Kim
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Kim,
This is a great sonnet for the 'me, me, me' generation. Most of them care only for themselves & what they can buy etc.
Your items in the sonnet are great + the way you have described them. You did well with the style of the English sonnet, too. From my thimble full of knowledge on meter in sonnets, I believe you got that pesky thing handled, too.
Your picture is fitting.
My 2 cents, although it is free to you,
I believe Shakespeare's words were great & true at the time of writing the original Romeo & Juliet. There was such disregard for life that teens probably had little knowledge, ambition, or ways & means to change the direction of their lives.
If a king or a lord didn't like you--too bad--you could be dead in an instant. Same with common people.
I believe R & J were really in love & that is what drove both to act as they did in the play.
Kim, I thank you for listening & always giving readers much to think about with your awesome work. Jan
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Kim,
This is a great sonnet for the 'me, me, me' generation. Most of them care only for themselves & what they can buy etc.
Your items in the sonnet are great + the way you have described them. You did well with the style of the English sonnet, too. From my thimble full of knowledge on meter in sonnets, I believe you got that pesky thing handled, too.
Your picture is fitting.
My 2 cents, although it is free to you,
I believe Shakespeare's words were great & true at the time of writing the original Romeo & Juliet. There was such disregard for life that teens probably had little knowledge, ambition, or ways & means to change the direction of their lives.
If a king or a lord didn't like you--too bad--you could be dead in an instant. Same with common people.
I believe R & J were really in love & that is what drove both to act as they did in the play.
Kim, I thank you for listening & always giving readers much to think about with your awesome work. Jan
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Hi Jan,
As flippant as this one comes off (and I really did hesitate doing that in a sonnet) it has one real message. I know that teens these days still make poor choices. And I do understand being in love. But, really, no man is worth committing suicide over. Dying for trying to save him, absolutely. I would do whatever it took to save my husband. But, there is never any sense in suicide.
Overall, though, I was just having some fun. I think I read too many ultra serious sonnets and my brain had a bit of a revolt lol Thanks for all of your thoughtful comments. :)
I don't think we've come so far as to think if a king or a lord doesn't like you that you'll be safe by any stretch of the imagination. Look at the Clintons. (I'm sure there is at least some truth in all that speculation.)
Your comments are awesome!
Kim
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Your comment about suicide for love are correct. I should have mentioned that. I believe this shows too that many teens don't have a concept of what really happens when suicide takes over. I still want to write a sonnet but my brain says no. It is like an iron gate drops down & refuses to cooperate. As for the Clintons, well that is another story. I do believe there was a lot of conspiracy & underhanded dealings with them. Jan
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Unfortunately, many teens don't have a concept of much of anything these days :( Unless you put it in a movie or a video game.
Comment from dovemarie
Dear Kim, I liked this sonnet poem, a play on Shakespeare's work. I liked the way you wrote out twenty seventeen, to me it reinforces that Juliet was in her teens. I used to read Seventeen when I was in my teens. I never knew that Shakespeare died on his birthday! Thank you for the info. I knew a woman who was born on Nov. 2, and died tragically by getting run over by a bus on her birthday. Dove
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Dear Kim, I liked this sonnet poem, a play on Shakespeare's work. I liked the way you wrote out twenty seventeen, to me it reinforces that Juliet was in her teens. I used to read Seventeen when I was in my teens. I never knew that Shakespeare died on his birthday! Thank you for the info. I knew a woman who was born on Nov. 2, and died tragically by getting run over by a bus on her birthday. Dove
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Hi Donna,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your interesting comments.
Kim
Comment from LIJ Red
I no longer see young girls shopping or reading magazines. They all have their noses
against their SmartIpad. Love is definitely out of fashion, which may save us all, as the population rise is slowing a little. Looks like an excellent English sonnet to me,
but I am not at the depth of two FS poets who were debating the thy/thine a/an
usage in archaic Bardian dialect...
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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I no longer see young girls shopping or reading magazines. They all have their noses
against their SmartIpad. Love is definitely out of fashion, which may save us all, as the population rise is slowing a little. Looks like an excellent English sonnet to me,
but I am not at the depth of two FS poets who were debating the thy/thine a/an
usage in archaic Bardian dialect...
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Hi LIJ:
This one was mostly a bit of fun. I read so many of those (as someone else has commented) "stuffy" English sonnets, I think my brain just revolted! lol Shopping and reading magazines is part of what those young girls are doing on their SmartIpad. You can do it all on one device now lol Thanks for all the fantastic comments.
Kim
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sonnet about the modern Juliet. I think she would think twice before falling in love with today's Romeo's. No one can tell if they are for real or not.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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A very well-written sonnet about the modern Juliet. I think she would think twice before falling in love with today's Romeo's. No one can tell if they are for real or not.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2017
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Hi Sandra,
My impression of the young crowd these days is that most don't want a one on one relationship. They'd rather collect as many boyfriends as they can. It is sad really. Thanks for taking the time to read and review. I appreciate your comments. This one was just for a bit of fun and to contrast how different things are today.
Kim
