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Haiku Club Challenges, Book II

Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "senryu (lost her curly hair)"
an anthology of haiku written by fanstory poets

23 total reviews 
Comment from kiwigirl2821
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Hi Gypsy. Oh My! I'm not sure I can write haiku however, I may give it a go. Thing is that middle line to lead to a resolve seems so deep in many. I'm not sure I'm that deep, but you, girl yours are amazing. I just bought your book that Dean contributed to ...surreal! Good luck xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 23-Jun-2017
    Thank you for the review and for buying our book, Kiwi :) you are very kind.

    Gypsy
Comment from Mark Schardine
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I remember the loss of hair and the fatigue of chemotherapy. It makes for a very debilitating experience, one that leaves many memories, memories also of recovery.

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
    thank you very much for the double review
    gypsy
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Gypsy,
I hope this child returns her spurt when her curly hair returns and also her smile returns
It seems sad but, their is always a happy day coming.
I have been there and I know

Gert

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
    thank you very much, Gert,
    gypsy
Comment from Grasshopper2
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Gypsy Blue Rose,
Poignant with a proper use of the phrase "spirit away." The picture is perfect with your message. Well done.

Michael

 Comment Written 22-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
    Thank you for the review, my friend. I am glad you like it.
    Gypsy
Comment from l.raven
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HI Gypsy, this is so sad my sweet friend...I know kids who have lost their hair to cancer....very well written you....
and the picture is heartbreaking...they are starting to get closer the healing of cancer...God Bless...love you...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 21-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 22-Jun-2017
    Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie pie. Luv ya
    Gypsy
reply by l.raven on 23-Jun-2017
    your always sooo welcome you...love ya xxoo
Comment from Curly Girly
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To me, this verse could be about a child that is undergoing cancer treatment:

lost her curly hair
and sparkle in her eyes--
spirit away

Let's just hope that the last line does not materialise until she is old.

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
    Thank you for the review and kind words sweetie.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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Oh yes my friend this is a really sad haiku so much feeling enclosed in this piece but the photograph shows how the girl truly feels well done again my friend regards Jill

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
    Hello, Jill, thank you very much for the review and kindness.
    Gypsy
Comment from Ulla
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Hola, Marival. This is so sad. But a horrible fact to so many. But when it hits an innocent child it makes it almost unbearable. A very well written contribution to the book. Es tan triste pero me ha gustado mucho. Un besito. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
    Hola, guapa,

    Thank you for the review and the kind words.
    Gypsy
Comment from MizKat
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Hi Gypsy,

Again you have written a very nice poem. I wish that I could write poems like you do. It takes me a long time to write them.

Kat

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
    Thank you for the review and the kind words.
    Gypsy
reply by MizKat on 21-Jun-2017
    Gypsy,

    You are very welcome my friend.

    Kat
Comment from Dean Kuch
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Cancer is so cruel. It has taken many members of my own family far before their time.
However, it seems all the more cruel when it affects an innocent child.
This is an excellent senryu, MariVal.
Sad, but so is life much of the time.
~Dean

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2017


reply by the author on 20-Jun-2017
    Thank you for the review and the kind words. Thank you for the six stars.... that is very generous of you.

    Gypsy