Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Ha ha, so cute, good for the sloth!! Gives me hope!! I believe this to be a true morale too though, sometimes the fastest don't win. Blessings...

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017

Thanks, IR, for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very cute version of the tortoise and the hare, and of course the sloth. You used very good descriptive wording and made this an enjoyable story in a poem to read and review. Best wishes in the contest! Teri

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Thanks, Teri

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

Very good. You should do well in the contest. It reminds me of the snail that got mugged by the turtle. He said, "I don't know, officer. It all happened so fast."

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Many reviewers have said they love sloths. Maybe they think it's something else.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Bill, you are fast becoming my all-time favorite humorist. Why you don't gather up your best pieces and put them in a book is a wonder to me. I think if you led with a poem like the one here--which is brilliant!--as a sample to send off to an agent or editor, their ears will perk up! I'm not blowing smoke! I mean it.

I wish I could give you more than a six for this piece of genius!

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Thank you, Jay, for the marvelous review, which is a sensational confidence builder. I hope to put some things together this summer, PEOPLE POEMS, SCENES WITH PONS AND NED, WORLDS (HORSE,SPIDER, OCTOPUS, SLOTH, etc.) and numerous short stories.

reply by Jay Squires on 20-Jul-2017

Good for you, and for your readers, Bill.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Such a great story told within a poem. It has a moral and everything! I liked the variation of the turtle and the hare story. Putting the sloth in gave it more depth and illustrated that there is something that moves slower than the tortoise.

Well done,

~patty~

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 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Thank you. Patty, for reviewing this and being so positive. Bill

Comment from EverInParadise

Exceptional

Clever and fun to read. I happen to really love
Sloths, perhaps I was one in a past life, but they are great. thanks for the fun read.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Thanks, EIP, for the exceptional review. I'm glad I could help you get in your sloth quota for the day. Bill

reply by EverInParadise on 22-Jul-2017

Chuckaling.

Comment from KL Williams

Excellent

I just loved this poem! Not only because I'm obsessed with sloths, but also because it is a really well written poem and it's funny. Great job, and best of luck in the contest! :)

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 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Thanks, KL, for the excellent review. I seem to have uncovered a pro-sloth society here on FS.

Comment from damommy

Exceptional

Such a cute take on the tortoise and the hare story. Great meter and rhyme.

The sloth took the day. Poor tortoise got in the soup.

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Jul-2017

Thanks, da, for the fantastic review. Bill