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The World In Your Mind

Success Is The Issue poetry contest entry

6 total reviews 
Comment from BlueMarble
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I'm sorry I was so slow to find this wonderful poem. I saw such perfect meaning in every line. Thank you for writing it. I'm so glad to see that it won the contest.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2017
    What a pleasant surprise, Joan! It's so gratifying to hear that my poem resonated so well to you. Thank you for telling me, and, of course, for those precious six stars!
    It seems you haven't been very FS active lately. I hope all is under control..
    Hugs,
    Don
Comment from BeasPeas
Excellent
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This is an excellent poem with a great message which I enjoyed reading. Our mind is the control center for all that we imagine and bring to fruition. Good rhyming and flow. The image is gorgeous. Good luck in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017

Comment from Gert sherwood
Excellent
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Hello author
I like your poem 'cause of the thrumming and this part
Billions of bits and billions of bytes,
your personal bank of future insights.

I'm thinking you are saying comes to reality soon?

Gert

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
    Thank you, for the excellent review, Gert. No, that line is reinforcing the concept that all of your previous experiences are stored in your mind, and they will be available for you to use them for making future decisions.
Comment from frogbook
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Beautiful thoughts flowing easily and with wonderful rhymes. Great description of tapping within for success. Best of luck-this is a geat one.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017

Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written poem about achieving success in life. We work hard and do what we can to ensure our career path is laid out in shiny lights. We constantly improve our knowledge and lifestyle accordingly.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
    Thanks, Sandra, for the compliment and your comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Excellent
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Billions of bits and billions of bytes,
your personal bank of future insights.
The world in your mind has infinite scope,
potential untapped, unrealized (unrealised) hope.
This is the best entry I have read for this competition I loved the lines above, it all rhymes perfectly and flows beautifully, more than that iy teaches us a lesson...brilliant I think this is absolutely awesome and wish I had a six to give. Kindest regards and good luck, Meia x

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2017


reply by the author on 21-Jul-2017
    Thank you, Meia. I couldn't ask for a better review, or anyone to grasp every nuance, as you did. ('Realize' is the proper US spelling of 'realise.' Spellchecker here disapproves of the latter.)