As the Sun Sets - letter S
Lots of Alliteration Entry13 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a fine alliteration poem using the letter "S." Nicely presented and tells us a little story of Sara and not getting married. Some very good lines here. I particularly like: "She sheds her suffocating sadness through silent salty tears." Much good luck in the contest. Marilyn
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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This is a fine alliteration poem using the letter "S." Nicely presented and tells us a little story of Sara and not getting married. Some very good lines here. I particularly like: "She sheds her suffocating sadness through silent salty tears." Much good luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much for your kind comments!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written alliteration with S works well and the story unfolds unto a sad ending when the planned wedding doesn't take place at all while the sun continues to set.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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A very well-written alliteration with S works well and the story unfolds unto a sad ending when the planned wedding doesn't take place at all while the sun continues to set.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2017
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Appreciate your insightful review.
Comment from Irish Rain
Aw, so sad!! This is a beautiful entry in this contest, and 'S' is the best letter to choose, because it always reads so prettily. Wonderful!! Blessings...
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Aw, so sad!! This is a beautiful entry in this contest, and 'S' is the best letter to choose, because it always reads so prettily. Wonderful!! Blessings...
Comment Written 08-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2017
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Appreciate very much your encouraging feedback!
Comment from smileycloud
good luck in the contest
meets the requirements perfectly
tells a sad story with very good imagery
the characterization is excellent
Sara is very real in yoiur poem
the poetic language is quite endearing
have a smiley day
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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good luck in the contest
meets the requirements perfectly
tells a sad story with very good imagery
the characterization is excellent
Sara is very real in yoiur poem
the poetic language is quite endearing
have a smiley day
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your positive feedback!
Comment from Dean Kuch
This certainly made perfect sense and there can be no doubt in anyone's mind that this is most definitely alliterative.
What I liked most about this--and I do love alliteration--is not one single word seemed forced for the sake of alliteration.
All my best to you in the contest.
Well done...
~Dean
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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This certainly made perfect sense and there can be no doubt in anyone's mind that this is most definitely alliterative.
What I liked most about this--and I do love alliteration--is not one single word seemed forced for the sake of alliteration.
All my best to you in the contest.
Well done...
~Dean
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Dean! I had the story in mind and then worked the s words into it. A fun challenge. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
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It's my pleasure. :)
Comment from Analie Shepherd
Hard task! What a sad, sorrowful story. Such stress to use "S" for so serious a story! Seems "S" speaks more of silly stuff, and soul-stirring stories seek some sonorous sounds, so to speak. But, beautifully done ... still!
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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Hard task! What a sad, sorrowful story. Such stress to use "S" for so serious a story! Seems "S" speaks more of silly stuff, and soul-stirring stories seek some sonorous sounds, so to speak. But, beautifully done ... still!
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Thank you for your honest review!
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Really enjoyed this writing prompt, you have certainly drenched the lines with alliteration which makes this such a pleasant and easy flowing read.
Good luck in the contest
Mitchell
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Really enjoyed this writing prompt, you have certainly drenched the lines with alliteration which makes this such a pleasant and easy flowing read.
Good luck in the contest
Mitchell
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Appreciate your encouraging and insightful review!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Saturated indeed, a ship load of letter "s" alliteration sincerely happening in this well written story that sadly tells of a wedding that sorrowfully never happens.
Surely captures the strongest essence of this contest spot on.
Should make a sound entry into this contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Saturated indeed, a ship load of letter "s" alliteration sincerely happening in this well written story that sadly tells of a wedding that sorrowfully never happens.
Surely captures the strongest essence of this contest spot on.
Should make a sound entry into this contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review - and use of the letter s as well!
Comment from bluedragon776
This poem is amazing. I am so very impressed that you were able to compose this poem with the abundance of letter S. You've managed to write a great and complete story in just 100 words and with the difficulty of alteration. Very challenging. I am curious to know how long it took you to compose this work. Good luck with this contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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This poem is amazing. I am so very impressed that you were able to compose this poem with the abundance of letter S. You've managed to write a great and complete story in just 100 words and with the difficulty of alteration. Very challenging. I am curious to know how long it took you to compose this work. Good luck with this contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Thank you so much. I had to write and rewrite - but it was a fun challenge.
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Your welcome!
Comment from rheabug
I love this beautiful presentation. The poem is Sweet and the imagery is Sensational.
I would love to try this challenge but I doubt that I could bring it to your level of expertise. Keep on writing with that creative pen. HUGS....
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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I love this beautiful presentation. The poem is Sweet and the imagery is Sensational.
I would love to try this challenge but I doubt that I could bring it to your level of expertise. Keep on writing with that creative pen. HUGS....
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2017
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Many thanks for the encouraging and positive feedback. It was a fun challenge for sure.,
