Benny and Sam
Two children sitting on a bench contest11 total reviews
Comment from Marvin Calloway
What a wonderful age to focus on--two small boys with nothing better to do than ponder what ever pops into their heads.
This story fits the definition of cute.
Kids always want a hint. Other kids are always eager to oblige.
Well done.
Sorry I missed out on the voting.
Marv
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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What a wonderful age to focus on--two small boys with nothing better to do than ponder what ever pops into their heads.
This story fits the definition of cute.
Kids always want a hint. Other kids are always eager to oblige.
Well done.
Sorry I missed out on the voting.
Marv
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Marv -
thanks for the great review.
FS added more days before deadline, so voting hasn't started yet.
I really like and appreciate what you said. I wish I had a recognition left to give you. Also wish we were allotted more than 6 for a whole month.
Many thanks again!
Comment from tfawcus
Delightful humour. Lovely response to today's writing challenge. I doubt if there will be a better one. The dialogue is authentic and this one really does have a bite in the tail! Loved it!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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Delightful humour. Lovely response to today's writing challenge. I doubt if there will be a better one. The dialogue is authentic and this one really does have a bite in the tail! Loved it!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2017
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thank you so much! Truly appreciated!
Comment from Drew Delaney
This is so cute. I can visualize the scene.
Two kids talking to each other and playing the guessing game.
I think you have a good chance in the contest.
Best wishes!
Drew
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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This is so cute. I can visualize the scene.
Two kids talking to each other and playing the guessing game.
I think you have a good chance in the contest.
Best wishes!
Drew
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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many thanks! here's hoping.
Comment from emptypage
This is cute, a perfect story for kids. I like the speech differences that you use, typical of little tykes, to let us guess their approximate ages. And the riddle was fun.
Best so far.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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This is cute, a perfect story for kids. I like the speech differences that you use, typical of little tykes, to let us guess their approximate ages. And the riddle was fun.
Best so far.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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thank you ma'am!
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Can picture this conversation occurring.
Touch of humor thrown in for good measure.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Can picture this conversation occurring.
Touch of humor thrown in for good measure.
Should make an interesting entry into this contest.
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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many thanks
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I enjoyed this piece and could clearly see this playing out. the dialogue is very good.
You might want to go through this for missing punctuation though. Even n a dialogue only story, you should really still include end / closing punctuation. Many are missing here.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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Hi there,
I enjoyed this piece and could clearly see this playing out. the dialogue is very good.
You might want to go through this for missing punctuation though. Even n a dialogue only story, you should really still include end / closing punctuation. Many are missing here.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 13-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2017
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will do. thanks. afraid I've gotten in the bad habit of writing with no capitals and less punctuation. :)
and thanks for the kind words.
Comment from bmethner
Love the picture and the innocent conversation between the two young boys. It flowed so smoothly and seemed so believable. I was completely engaged as it moved through the dialogue. The speech impediment added to its charm. It made me giggle. I enjoyed reading it. This indeed could have been two boys on a bench.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Love the picture and the innocent conversation between the two young boys. It flowed so smoothly and seemed so believable. I was completely engaged as it moved through the dialogue. The speech impediment added to its charm. It made me giggle. I enjoyed reading it. This indeed could have been two boys on a bench.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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what a neat review! many thanks. much appreciated.
Comment from EverInParadise
Cute story and definitely one two little boys would have. The ouch begins yet another story. Very nicely done, Though I wonder about the lack of Capitol letters in telling this conversation. It would be a shame if you were disqualified because of that. Anyway, good luck on a good story. The drawing is perfect. A very good selection.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Cute story and definitely one two little boys would have. The ouch begins yet another story. Very nicely done, Though I wonder about the lack of Capitol letters in telling this conversation. It would be a shame if you were disqualified because of that. Anyway, good luck on a good story. The drawing is perfect. A very good selection.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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thanks for the suggestion. Hadn't realized I had. oops
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. This writing is cute and creative. The picture of the two boys is perfect for the writing. I like the way you put it all together and it sounded like two small boys talking. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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Excellent. This writing is cute and creative. The picture of the two boys is perfect for the writing. I like the way you put it all together and it sounded like two small boys talking. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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thank you. much appreciated.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about two children who are on a bench contest speaking, defining a student and how they find it out in a funny, humorous way at last; I liked.
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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This speaks about two children who are on a bench contest speaking, defining a student and how they find it out in a funny, humorous way at last; I liked.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2017
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thank you, sir! am glad you like it