Sweet Innocence
1-6-1 Poem13 total reviews
Comment from trimple
Hello there, mystery writer.
The rules for this particular contest explains that each end word must rhyme, so may I suggest that after editing, you let me know and I shall gladly plaster a further star.
You may also want to edit the description as you have 1-2-1 written here. :)
Kind regards
trimple
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Hello there, mystery writer.
The rules for this particular contest explains that each end word must rhyme, so may I suggest that after editing, you let me know and I shall gladly plaster a further star.
You may also want to edit the description as you have 1-2-1 written here. :)
Kind regards
trimple
Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Thank you.
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Revised it.
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Oh! That's much better :)
I like the message here. But...
In order to reach a ripe old age, we have to pass a lotta birthdays :)
added another star and wish you well in the contest
kind regards
trimple
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Thank you!
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No probs
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent entry for the 1-6-1 contest
Drop the "and" for syllable count, and the lines must rhyme
Very good connection in the three lines and good use of alliteration
The words reflect the theme of softness and comfort very well
Perfect picture to match
Change the top description from 1-2-1 to 1-6-1
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS
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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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This is an excellent entry for the 1-6-1 contest
Drop the "and" for syllable count, and the lines must rhyme
Very good connection in the three lines and good use of alliteration
The words reflect the theme of softness and comfort very well
Perfect picture to match
Change the top description from 1-2-1 to 1-6-1
Well done
Good luck in the contest
RS
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Should have paid more attention to the rules at six in the morning!
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Revised it.
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It looks good now! Good luck.
RS
Comment from rjuselius
Indeed, very nice! I think you have a good chance to win..
Good luck!
Blessings,
Rebekka x
rebekka x
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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Indeed, very nice! I think you have a good chance to win..
Good luck!
Blessings,
Rebekka x
rebekka x
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2017
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Will revise. Didn't pay attention like I should have stayed 6 in the morning.
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Revised it.
