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Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Voices Pt.2"A Romantic, Superhero-like, Geek Horror story.
17 total reviews
Comment from Darlene Franklin
I love this chapter! It is so believable, and makes such excellent use of the familiar action toys. I definitely want to see more of this book. Good luck!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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I love this chapter! It is so believable, and makes such excellent use of the familiar action toys. I definitely want to see more of this book. Good luck!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2019
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Thank you! I have all the chapters currently available and are on promotion for member cents. Thank you and would love to hear your comments on the story. Thank you again!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
the supernatural ideas of this boy that he's superman will save his sister from the dark shadows of life. Like your story even though I'm not a scientific writer. Good luck at the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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the supernatural ideas of this boy that he's superman will save his sister from the dark shadows of life. Like your story even though I'm not a scientific writer. Good luck at the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2019
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Thank you! I appreciate your insightful comments and generous rating.
Comment from Ulla
Right, I think I will be iin for the ride. What I've read so far has kept my interest. Are we into the supernatural? Anyway, I will carry on reading, All the best. Ulla:))
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Right, I think I will be iin for the ride. What I've read so far has kept my interest. Are we into the supernatural? Anyway, I will carry on reading, All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you. FYI I plan to promote the entirety of the completed chapters of this novel soon. Would love more of your feedback, and at the same time, as a reviewer, you can get more rewards. Thank you for your generous rating and encouraging review!
-Euell
Comment from Cindy Warren
My guess is that Eu El is becoming what he was meant to be. I have no doubt he'll save his sister. I'm not totally sure what the thing is that took her, but she'll be okay, thanks to her brother.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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My guess is that Eu El is becoming what he was meant to be. I have no doubt he'll save his sister. I'm not totally sure what the thing is that took her, but she'll be okay, thanks to her brother.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you! You?re absolutely correct! :)
Comment from Nowhereman1
Very interesting story. Reading this chapter has made me interested in the rest of the story, You have created a very enjoyable story, the characters and setting are unusual and that is a good thing. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Very interesting story. Reading this chapter has made me interested in the rest of the story, You have created a very enjoyable story, the characters and setting are unusual and that is a good thing. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Wonderful! Thank you for a kind and generous review!
Comment from Ricky1024
"Voices pt2"
Was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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"Voices pt2"
Was well written and rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues as well.
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Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Beautiful! Thank you!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
He is going to get to his sister! Self-belief is so important, and he needs it more than ever to defeat that evil shadow. I'm so pleased I didn't miss this part, I'm going away for two weeks on Friday, I would have hated to miss it. This is such a good horror story, so well written it grips me every time! Excellent! )) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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He is going to get to his sister! Self-belief is so important, and he needs it more than ever to defeat that evil shadow. I'm so pleased I didn't miss this part, I'm going away for two weeks on Friday, I would have hated to miss it. This is such a good horror story, so well written it grips me every time! Excellent! )) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 23-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you, Sandra for a kind and generous review!
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a very well written piece, my friend. Transformation happens to us all to some extent especially when we are facing adversity~Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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This is a very well written piece, my friend. Transformation happens to us all to some extent especially when we are facing adversity~Debbie
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2019
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Thank you for an encouraging and insightful review. Your generous stars are highly valued. Thank you!
Comment from Elaine Chiodi
Easy to read and understand the storyline, even if this is the first chapter read. Eu El is likable and relates to most young boys who dream of being heroes. Dialog flows well and is believable. Good story... ...ec
Just some thoughts for consideration:
- able to whisper; that he whispers = two "whisper(s)" in the same sentence
- as searches through = who searches, El or the shadow?
- making = capitalize M
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Easy to read and understand the storyline, even if this is the first chapter read. Eu El is likable and relates to most young boys who dream of being heroes. Dialog flows well and is believable. Good story... ...ec
Just some thoughts for consideration:
- able to whisper; that he whispers = two "whisper(s)" in the same sentence
- as searches through = who searches, El or the shadow?
- making = capitalize M
Comment Written 22-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2019
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Thank you for the kind rating and grammatical catches. It helps me a lot as an amateur writer. Your time is greatly appreciated. Thank you!
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You're quite welcome. Keep writing, you're good... ...ec
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Thank you! I?m quite flattered :)
Comment from Mistydawn
I'm so glad you told me it's up. Glad that fought through the horrid voiced and tried. This is well-written, suspenseful had me on the edge of my seat as I rooted for Eul in my mind. Great job.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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I'm so glad you told me it's up. Glad that fought through the horrid voiced and tried. This is well-written, suspenseful had me on the edge of my seat as I rooted for Eul in my mind. Great job.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2019
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Awesome! Your reviews motivate me to continue on with this project. I?ve been setting it aside, procrastinating for awhile. These kind of input inspires me. Thank you!
If interested, please continue reading Chp. 5, ?The Curse? to see what resulted in Eu El defeating the demon. Thank you again!