Ghosts
Dedicated to all soldiers messed up from all wars. Isalud!63 total reviews
Comment from Lisasview
Hi there Easyeveret,
I certainly would not say that your words fall short of what you wanted ~ needed to say.
To begin with the mere fact that you volunteered to visit veterans who were trapped by memories and dreams. Are to a phycologist?...Just wondering because I would think that at the veterans hospital they would want only people with knowledge of how to help... But of course that is ridiculous because all these veterans wanted to do was talk and have someone actually listen...which you did.
I thought about piking out my favourite lines but I could not because I love your entire poem....
Lisasview, in hot hot Spain
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Hi there Easyeveret,
I certainly would not say that your words fall short of what you wanted ~ needed to say.
To begin with the mere fact that you volunteered to visit veterans who were trapped by memories and dreams. Are to a phycologist?...Just wondering because I would think that at the veterans hospital they would want only people with knowledge of how to help... But of course that is ridiculous because all these veterans wanted to do was talk and have someone actually listen...which you did.
I thought about piking out my favourite lines but I could not because I love your entire poem....
Lisasview, in hot hot Spain
Comment Written 25-Jul-2023
Comment from JSD
I think it does the job superbly. The ease of your natural rhyme and rhythm does not detract from the power of the powerful message you convey. Well done.
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I think it does the job superbly. The ease of your natural rhyme and rhythm does not detract from the power of the powerful message you convey. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2023
Comment from wordsmithbully
Another enjoyable one again!! You're an heck of a writer seriously!! Really inspiring me!! Love the way you flow in all your poetry!! Thanks for sharing again!!
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Another enjoyable one again!! You're an heck of a writer seriously!! Really inspiring me!! Love the way you flow in all your poetry!! Thanks for sharing again!!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
Comment from nbonner
This was an excellent write and a great dedication! I like the rhyme of aabb used. A solute to all who fought for our country. Thank you for writing this and sharing, NB
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This was an excellent write and a great dedication! I like the rhyme of aabb used. A solute to all who fought for our country. Thank you for writing this and sharing, NB
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
Comment from rjuselius
Wow,this deserves a standing ovation dear tom! I think you have excelled in what you were meant to convey. I love this poem sincerely!
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
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Wow,this deserves a standing ovation dear tom! I think you have excelled in what you were meant to convey. I love this poem sincerely!
Thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a big squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 06-Dec-2017
Comment from MelB
I think you did a phenomenal job of explaining the memories and dreams that veterans experience. It's too bad the military doesn't deprogram vets after they come out of war.
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I think you did a phenomenal job of explaining the memories and dreams that veterans experience. It's too bad the military doesn't deprogram vets after they come out of war.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
Comment from artemis53
You weren't oblivious to them. Everett. You heard a call and followed through with it. I'm sure that many you encountered remember you with deepest respect. I don't think it's about the readers here. It's about broken spirits that were given the chance to rise in your quiet presence.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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You weren't oblivious to them. Everett. You heard a call and followed through with it. I'm sure that many you encountered remember you with deepest respect. I don't think it's about the readers here. It's about broken spirits that were given the chance to rise in your quiet presence.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Thank you so much artemis. Most honored by your very kind comments. Those "broken spirits" artemis, gave me as much as I ever gave them. They taught me what true courage is and it had nothing to do with combat, at least not the combat of war but the combat of post war battles that they knew stretched out ahead of them with no discernible time table for final healing or maybe just coping. I thank you very much artemis. tom
Comment from Pantygynt
I like the way that this is presented, with the individual reminiscences (if one can call them that) that form the various stanzas of the poem, contained in the parenteses of the opening ang closing quatrain and couplet.
It is as if these war experiences are or should be syphoned off in parentheses, to one side of the lives in which they occurred as being unreal -- not part of real life at all. Of course the tragedy is that they have come to dominate the lives affected to the point of total ruination.
that this is written in the simplest poetic form imaginable, rhyming couplets is somehow truly approprate in this instance.
"...the reaper's fertive call." Correct spelling is "furtive".
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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I like the way that this is presented, with the individual reminiscences (if one can call them that) that form the various stanzas of the poem, contained in the parenteses of the opening ang closing quatrain and couplet.
It is as if these war experiences are or should be syphoned off in parentheses, to one side of the lives in which they occurred as being unreal -- not part of real life at all. Of course the tragedy is that they have come to dominate the lives affected to the point of total ruination.
that this is written in the simplest poetic form imaginable, rhyming couplets is somehow truly approprate in this instance.
"...the reaper's fertive call." Correct spelling is "furtive".
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Hi Pantygynt. Correction made and I am honored by this great review. tom
Comment from smileycloud
all the poetic rules are very evident in this well written poem
your words are heartfelt and strong with compassion and emotion
the story in your poem is so honourable to the men and to the nightmares
which are daymares and can remain a part of life on a daily basis
blessings
my uncle Lenny was trapped with the Rats of Tobruk and when they finally got back to land in Darwin they thought too that they were on the homeward journey to put all that horror behind them
but the Pearl Harbour disaters had them turn back and fight some more and then some
The Rats of Tobruk was the name given to the soldiers of the garrison who held the Libyan port of Tobruk against the Afrika Corps, during the Siege of Tobruk in World War II. The siege started on 10 April 1941 and was finally relieved at the end of November
I do not know the exact times and full chronology or even the whole story as most of the men/boys really who came home would be so traumatized they did not want to bring it all up and if ever we stepped up behind my uncle he would think we were Japanese or the enemy and would turn to attack us in response to his time of tragedies with his mates who suffered and the ones who never came home
he cried convulsively once when he was telling us about being dug into the trenches for weeks months defending their ground witth the stench of dead and live bodies they saw their mates blown to pieces beside them in the trenches
they stood their ground just boys really
will man never learn to stop the wars and save their hearts
blessings
have a smiley day
sorry I raved on so much
but your poem is very heartfeltly inspiring to dig deeper into our own selves
Lorraine
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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all the poetic rules are very evident in this well written poem
your words are heartfelt and strong with compassion and emotion
the story in your poem is so honourable to the men and to the nightmares
which are daymares and can remain a part of life on a daily basis
blessings
my uncle Lenny was trapped with the Rats of Tobruk and when they finally got back to land in Darwin they thought too that they were on the homeward journey to put all that horror behind them
but the Pearl Harbour disaters had them turn back and fight some more and then some
The Rats of Tobruk was the name given to the soldiers of the garrison who held the Libyan port of Tobruk against the Afrika Corps, during the Siege of Tobruk in World War II. The siege started on 10 April 1941 and was finally relieved at the end of November
I do not know the exact times and full chronology or even the whole story as most of the men/boys really who came home would be so traumatized they did not want to bring it all up and if ever we stepped up behind my uncle he would think we were Japanese or the enemy and would turn to attack us in response to his time of tragedies with his mates who suffered and the ones who never came home
he cried convulsively once when he was telling us about being dug into the trenches for weeks months defending their ground witth the stench of dead and live bodies they saw their mates blown to pieces beside them in the trenches
they stood their ground just boys really
will man never learn to stop the wars and save their hearts
blessings
have a smiley day
sorry I raved on so much
but your poem is very heartfeltly inspiring to dig deeper into our own selves
Lorraine
Comment Written 05-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Thank you very much Lorraine. I am honored by your commentary and of course the exceptional review you felt this post warranted. Thanks again. tom
Comment from victor 66
Everett, I do so appreciate the time you spent with our Vietnam Vets when you came back from that country. When I went to Vietnam in February of 1967 and came back in December of 1968, I was not able to relate to other Vets. I didn't want to hear their stories and I didn't want to share mine. It's been over fifty years since the beginning of my first tour and in my mind, it's still yesterday. I commend you for helping, when I could not. If there is a god, may he bless you.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Everett, I do so appreciate the time you spent with our Vietnam Vets when you came back from that country. When I went to Vietnam in February of 1967 and came back in December of 1968, I was not able to relate to other Vets. I didn't want to hear their stories and I didn't want to share mine. It's been over fifty years since the beginning of my first tour and in my mind, it's still yesterday. I commend you for helping, when I could not. If there is a god, may he bless you.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2017
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Hi Victor. And bless you also Victor and welcome home brother. I am honored by your service and also this very generous review. I will cherish both. Thanks again. tom
