Dawn Alarm
nature 3-5-39 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 3-5-3 poem. The birds in our garden start at 4AM each morning. They are chirping without end and unfortunately don't have a snooze button so I am half awake from 4 - 7 when I usually start my day.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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A very well-written 3-5-3 poem. The birds in our garden start at 4AM each morning. They are chirping without end and unfortunately don't have a snooze button so I am half awake from 4 - 7 when I usually start my day.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2018
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Hi Sandra Yes I know exactly what you mean Still to jear them is a good thing at least we havent passed away in the night LOL Thanls and Cheers Christine
Comment from BeasPeas
So that's what a Magpie looks like--stunning bird. Watching the birds is such fun and this humorous poem describes the situation of waking up to their call. Good job. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
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So that's what a Magpie looks like--stunning bird. Watching the birds is such fun and this humorous poem describes the situation of waking up to their call. Good job. Marilyn
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2018
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Hi Marilyn. Yes thats a Magpie I have a family that I feed every day and they warble every morning We want our minced steak and bread LOL Thanks my friend Cheers Christine
Comment from Val Crisson
Very nice entry and a clever satori line. I have one suggestion, and that is you don't really need to capitalize "Outside" as I see it as an extension of the first line. Hope this helps, but in the end it's your poem.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Very nice entry and a clever satori line. I have one suggestion, and that is you don't really need to capitalize "Outside" as I see it as an extension of the first line. Hope this helps, but in the end it's your poem.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Hi Val, Thanks for your review and ai have changed the O to o n outside as suggested as yes I agree. Cheers
Comment from Dean Kuch
I've never seen a Magpie in person. I suppose they are simply a species of bird we don't have here in my part of the US. Perhaps there aren't any in the US at all.
Lord knows we have just about every other species you could possibly imagine.
Except parrots, Toucans, Cockatoo, and a few found in warmer climates.
So, having said all of that, thanks for showing me, finally, what a Magpie looks like.
Your syllable count is fine, and I've already addressed the presentation.
Good luck.
~Dean
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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I've never seen a Magpie in person. I suppose they are simply a species of bird we don't have here in my part of the US. Perhaps there aren't any in the US at all.
Lord knows we have just about every other species you could possibly imagine.
Except parrots, Toucans, Cockatoo, and a few found in warmer climates.
So, having said all of that, thanks for showing me, finally, what a Magpie looks like.
Your syllable count is fine, and I've already addressed the presentation.
Good luck.
~Dean
Comment Written 07-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Hi Dean, They are a lovely bird but terrritorial and a bit bossy .I have a family that lives nearby and they come everyday for a feed Igive them minced steak and bread LOL .No tey are quite native to Australia I think wecalso have parrots and cockies that dome to feed as well in my native garden feeder at the back .I feel like the bird woman in Mary Poppins sometimes Ha Ha Thanks for reading and as we speak I can hear the Magpie warble outide my window ( he must be hungry LOL) Cheers
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Cheers. :)
Comment from oliver818
I don't know what a magpie sounds like when it sings but I'm sure it's enough to wake you up! I enjoyed this poem, thanks so much sharing and have yourself a great day
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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I don't know what a magpie sounds like when it sings but I'm sure it's enough to wake you up! I enjoyed this poem, thanks so much sharing and have yourself a great day
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Hi oliver818. Thanks for your review and why not google up a video if one to jear and see and hear they are like. I have grown up with the Magpies and they have a distinct warble . Plus they are the emblem of a football team LOL Cheers
Comment from Sugarray77
A good 3-5-3 Nature prompt contest entry. I thought the artwork was perfect for your subject and added the right touch. Good luck on this contest. Regards.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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A good 3-5-3 Nature prompt contest entry. I thought the artwork was perfect for your subject and added the right touch. Good luck on this contest. Regards.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Hi Sugarray77. Thanks for eading my 3-5-3 and I am pleasde to have your comments. The Magpie is one of my favourite birds I listen to them every morning Cheers
Comment from zanya
A pleasant start to the day here in this Nature 3-5-3 to be awakened by sounds from the natural world rather than the technological world wherein we all seem to reside these days lol thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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A pleasant start to the day here in this Nature 3-5-3 to be awakened by sounds from the natural world rather than the technological world wherein we all seem to reside these days lol thanks for sharing
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2018
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Hi zanya, Yes it is a pleasant start to my day I hear them every morning and it is always a nice sound to herald in a new day. I dont need an alarm as they are aways at the right time Cheers
Comment from Cheryl I
I have never seen nor heard a magpie, but your description makes me miss them. I think you did a nice job on this, and chose the perfect picture to go with it. Cheryl
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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I have never seen nor heard a magpie, but your description makes me miss them. I think you did a nice job on this, and chose the perfect picture to go with it. Cheryl
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Thanks Cheryl I Oh you dont't know what you are missing They warble loudly and I love to hear their morning call .One of my favourite birds ( I do spoil them though I feed them every day ) Cheer for your review
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Nature 3-5-3 writing prompt.
Nicely said in so few words.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Nature 3-5-3 writing prompt.
Nicely said in so few words.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2018
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Hi Sharon Thank you and ai do hear the Magpies every morning about 6 am I don't need an alarm ( Mind you they know I feed them bread and minced steak too Ha Ha) Cheers
